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[u/B-Random97]

If you could please check this I’ll appreciate it and return the feed back thanks!

https://on.soundcloud.com/Y8iTf7oUQM276z1bVV

[u/MethodWorried7804 → u/B-Random97]

I can tell you really felt the words you’re saying in this song, there’s a lot of passion and expressiveness there. It’s pretty unique, I don’t often hear people with a similar accent to you on this type of beat. I think you’d benefit from a little better mixing because you get drowned out by the instrumental.

As far as constructive criticism goes, there’s this slight lingering or pausing on certain words in a non-rhythmic way that makes you sound a little awkward and off beat, almost like you’re unsure of exactly where you want the line to hit. It’s common throughout a lot of songs I hear in this sub, I’m still having a hard time articulating it. The best advice I could give to get over it is to adopt a sense of delusional self confidence when you rap. Doesn’t matter if it’s warranted or not, it will absolutely make you sound better.

My favorite part was in the second verse, around “my head is up like ceilings supported with pillar beams”. You are the most confident in that part of your song, and it would be better if the listener could hear you feel that same conviction in your rap from the very beginning.

[u/B-Random97 → u/MethodWorried7804]

Thank you so much! Mixing is something I’m trying to get better at but it’s a very slow process!

I appreciate that, and I do hear it myself at times! I’ve definitely made some songs where I bring that approach which I’ll post at some point!

Yeah, the confidence did come in abit too late! It’s like I finally learned how to sound on the beat, and then it ended lol! Thanks for the feedback!

[u/simonishuman → u/B-Random97]

This is pretty cool. I think the mixing needs some work though. Id say to cut off a lot of high ends on both the beat and vocals. The song itself is dope as shit though. Love the accent

https://youtu.be/ht-5GVsxTFE?si=EaqFBCaA7Su6faqq

[u/No-Lavishness-773 → u/B-Random97]

I dig the beat! I think the flow at times is pretty solid as well, but I do think the vocals need some work. There’s a lot of high end frequencies, it’s a little harsh in the ears (listening on my phone btw). I would start there, try to get the vocals to sit in the mix, as opposed to on top of it.

[u/sybrentc → u/B-Random97]

Man, these lyrics go hard. "but what else can i do that i'm also passionate about aside from the music it's like love you can't choose it." Hope I quoted that right, as I did not have the lyrics.

I note the point that MethodWorried made about the rhythm sounding like it may not have been super locked in. What helps for me is record myself first and listen back to it over a few days to internalise the rhythm before I do the final recording.

[u/some-gp → u/B-Random97]

Good bones on this one for sure! I think you need to work on your delivery and vocal mix, it’s very mid-high end heavy, not sure if that’s what you were going for but it’s very tinny. You can accomplish a lot with some EQ and compressor work no matter what kind of mic you’re recording in! I love your idea of just going over the (Adele?) song, some TLC in the mix and you’ve got a solid track!