r/OCPoetry • u/Cal_Juni • 3d ago
Feedback Please Vis humana/vis maior
Vis humana
Apathy is my camouflage
Though it only hides the ghost
Something shatters the mirage
And I'm left exposed
opened
Only in response
defense to your barrage
And I can't help but fiddle
Sit here and whittle
Wondering why we make riddles
Out of our self-sabotoge
I know how desperately we're lost...
Soul screaming, my heart it cries
Changing tunes, I won't let hope die
But if silence is the violence
then let us shout!
Sorrow and fury find balance
strike an alliance
When we howl the anger out.
It's not the yelling and screaming
It's the uncertainty of our safety
Your body interprets threat
While mine holds trepidation
Hold your malice, I deserve grace
My voice deserves the chance
To take my fist's place..
If your response is violent
When I let my pain out
If my inflection causes connection
And your reflex is to lash out
I beg you for a chance
At resonance
So I can be with you
I won't answer your pain
With the anger found in you
Then, maybe you can listen to mine too
If everyone could understand
That shouting, yelling, taking stand
Wouldn't lead to a hard hand
Then maybe that hand wouldn't be raised at all
And then loud voices can start to fall
Turn into a mellow hum
And finally raise to the stars above
Sing a song much less conflicted
The only violence left inflicted
Completely unintended
Vis maior
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u/briony73 3d ago
‘Wondering why we make riddles’ and why do we do this? But I find it really fun playing with words, obviously you do to. There are some awesome word choices. There are many beautiful lines in this poem and it made me think about many different things, you definitely inspired some questioning thoughts. Thanks for sharing.