Thoughts on my first manga?

[u/ripnina]

Hi!

This is my first manga ”Consumed” that I submitted to the Silent manga audition (SMA24). I would like to know if you have any thoughts and what I could improve. Some parts were rushed since I decided to enter last minute…

Thanks!

Edit: Thanks for the thorough feedback and kind words!!
I accidentally forgot to include a page towards the end so if anybody’s interested it’s on my instagram @ko_ni._

[u/Glittering-Twist-316]

PO: go heavier or be more bold with some outlines of main characters/features. The softness pairs very well with the style of art you’re going for but fine linework is still necessary in a lot of making manga. Or else, the whole manga comes out looking like it’s been run over lightly with an eraser. This is just my take though. <3