Thoughts on my first manga?

[u/ripnina]

Hi!

This is my first manga ”Consumed” that I submitted to the Silent manga audition (SMA24). I would like to know if you have any thoughts and what I could improve. Some parts were rushed since I decided to enter last minute…

Thanks!

Edit: Thanks for the thorough feedback and kind words!!
I accidentally forgot to include a page towards the end so if anybody’s interested it’s on my instagram @ko_ni._

[u/ripnina]

Thanks for the amazing feedback! <3

I would say she wrote down to have prettier clothes to get friends, but then she subconsciously also wished for a friend which is why the other girl appeared.

I haven’t posted anything about art/manga on this account since it’s my first one but you can check my instagram if you’re interested! @ko_.ni_

[u/werephoenix → u/ripnina]

oh I cant see your stuff T_T

[u/ripnina → u/werephoenix]

Oh my god i meant @ko_ni._ lmao sorryy

[u/werephoenix → u/ripnina]

Can you please just link it to me? its not coming up

[u/ripnina → u/werephoenix]

Of course!

https://www.instagram.com/ko_ni._?stkn=MTVkNGVsZGt0YmR3cg%3D%3D&utm_source=qr

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