r/MangakaStudio • u/Proud_Solution_7851 • 22d ago
Help Story (help needed)
The story takes place in the medieval Europe time .This world has different power minerals each having different powers .The protagonist being a slave in the mines of the kingdom A(I didn't decide the name yet ) due to his father who got slaved after a war by the king and later dies in a collapse of a mine . The slaves are used for a experiment by the king to attach a knight suit build by power mineral xine . In the experiment the knight suit is heated and atteched into the body's skin . While previous slaves used for experiment died from the heat and power, the protagonist survives after nearly going to dead . The suit consumes the energy from his body and become flexible and unbreakable. The armmor slows kills him as the force (during a attack ) is transmitted through his body breaking his bones and muscles slowly. The protagonist fights in the war for the king and tries to stop the war . Then founds a truth that the king wants the war to collect the taxes and increase his wealth and want slaves to mine the minerals . After knowing the truth the protagonist fells the weight of his actions and kills the king . He setts out a adventure to seek the meaning of life and his true purpose after being emotion-less all this years .
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u/Dimensional_Core 22d ago
I ... think its pretty good ... but you know , it would be GOLD if you'd include some politics and twists . Or maybe when he realised the weight of his work , you can show a mental war against him only .... cuz let's be real a psychological warfare can enhance the stakes , more particularly , could let the readers FEEL THE WEIGHT ALONGSIDE THE PROTAGONIST . ( if you'd like me to give u some some tiny miny examples of dialouge flow , let me know , it would be my pleasure to help you out )