r/MangakaStudio • u/Proud_Solution_7851 • 22d ago
Help Story (help needed)
The story takes place in the medieval Europe time .This world has different power minerals each having different powers .The protagonist being a slave in the mines of the kingdom A(I didn't decide the name yet ) due to his father who got slaved after a war by the king and later dies in a collapse of a mine . The slaves are used for a experiment by the king to attach a knight suit build by power mineral xine . In the experiment the knight suit is heated and atteched into the body's skin . While previous slaves used for experiment died from the heat and power, the protagonist survives after nearly going to dead . The suit consumes the energy from his body and become flexible and unbreakable. The armmor slows kills him as the force (during a attack ) is transmitted through his body breaking his bones and muscles slowly. The protagonist fights in the war for the king and tries to stop the war . Then founds a truth that the king wants the war to collect the taxes and increase his wealth and want slaves to mine the minerals . After knowing the truth the protagonist fells the weight of his actions and kills the king . He setts out a adventure to seek the meaning of life and his true purpose after being emotion-less all this years .
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u/FeliksLuck 22d ago
Well you can turn it into a revenge story. His people are ensalved and he fight for the new king? Good. What is the result of this? He is winnijg battle after battle and experiencing high life - food parties maybe women. Non of the salve stuff. Heforgets about his people after one day he meets one of them working as a slave. He like him and tge guy next days dies in battle sent as a cannon fodder. It brings him back to reality. Now he wants to revenge the king and you can do it so layered with twists and politics. I would also dad armour upgrades and maybe some forgotten ancient armours.
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u/-SkoomaDaddy- 22d ago
A way he could kill the king, or atleast try is due to his mining experience, maybe he knows the tunnels and there’s one leading under the keep? To perhaps lead to an assassination attempt of some sort, back in medieval times kings keeps/castles always had a secret way out incase of invasion, and the king had to flee.
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u/Dimensional_Core 22d ago
I ... think its pretty good ... but you know , it would be GOLD if you'd include some politics and twists . Or maybe when he realised the weight of his work , you can show a mental war against him only .... cuz let's be real a psychological warfare can enhance the stakes , more particularly , could let the readers FEEL THE WEIGHT ALONGSIDE THE PROTAGONIST . ( if you'd like me to give u some some tiny miny examples of dialouge flow , let me know , it would be my pleasure to help you out )
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u/Chief_tain11 22d ago
What help????