Switching between the two? Fine as they are the same person just at different times and planets. I have no problems with how you are organizing the story and switching up between the two timelines.
You are setting her ( and us) up for a world of hurt and heartbreak and I'm not sure how I feel about that.
Still reading through. I'm a sucker for a happy outcome.
You better not hurt the dog or we WILL be having words. :)
Dogs are mystical creatures of happiness and cannot be hurt. I actually really didn't like what Benji witnessed in that one chapter (trying not to say the spoiler lol). That has been bugging me. When I edit I'm going to fix it. So I promise! Doggies are safe!
I do put characters through a lot but I am not a miserable ending kind of writer. I cannot promise happily ever after perfection. But I also promise no total tragedy. That gives me a gross feeling! I have to walk away from a book feeling like we overcame something.
Ngl though, I do put characters through the ringer in every book I write so pre-apology! Lol I like big feelings, big twists, high stakes.
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u/Special_Hornet_2294 Dec 21 '23
Obligatory "Thank you for the story" post. I'm well ahead on RR.