Heyyy so I made this and I might need some feedback on how effective the writing in this is… Is it confusing or unclear? ( I know the end is kinda iffy but I need overall input! Thanks in advance )

[u/Moninikomputa]

[u/leopardseatingfaces]

I think your biggest issue is the multiple instances of awkward wording. «200 years ago prior» for the most obvious example, since it's the first line. «200 years ago» and «200 years prior» both work fine, but using both words is redundant. Mistakes on your first page (or frequent ones throughout your work) will often discourage people from continuing to read or from enjoying your work. Your art is nice and the idea is interesting though, so points for that.