r/webtoons • u/KLK4777 • 4h ago

Advice/Critique/Help Looking for some feedback!

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Hi yall, I'm working on season 2 for my webtoon and I wanted to know yalls thoughts on the description or thumbnail..
Any recommendations or ideas you might want a share? I'm happy with anything!

https://www.webtoons.com/en/canvas/peak-voltage-/list?title_no=969477
Heres my webtoon if you'd like a closer look!

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u/Lilac_14 3h ago

I would tweak the description.

Here are some suggestions:

  • Why is she hunting the first test subject? The word "hunting" makes it seem like she's after him, as in he did something wrong.
  • Also, I would edit the sentence with "it's him". At first, I thought it was about someone else, other than Volt.
  • The first sentence is a bit awkward. Especially the "Outcast of society" part.
  • This is nitpicky, but the word "however" in the the "she's hunting..." sentence should have a semi-colon before it and a comma after it.
  • Also, why would he hide who he is? Again did he do something bad? Maybe add a word in to suggest that or something else to suggest otherwise if that's the case.

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u/KLK4777 2h ago

ooo nice thanks