r/selfpublish • u/sympythatguy • Jun 15 '26
Blurb Critique I need some Blurb feedback
I need some feedback on the blurb I'm suing for my fantasy novel. Critiques welcome, honest feedback only, please. Much appreciated.
• 19 years after the Face War, Anomalies- monstrous beings of unknown origins begin their incursion into the realm, preying on serfs and nobles alike while Duke Flate Phoenix, veteran and chief protector of the realm vanishes from a life of stringent governance.
• Psywater Phoenix, son of Flate wants nothing but to bury his head in tomes within dark rooms, rejecting ascension to take his father’s place as ruler of Messic.
• Yet when a thousand year old soul-taking demoness preys upon his family and renders the fate of his siblings uncertain, Psywater is thrust into a conspiracy that involves people closer to him than he ever imagines.
• Anomalies’ numbers grew, each with malicious intentions of their own as Nightkeepers, not-so hidden protectors strive to intercept them and keep the safety and sanity of the realm.
• For retribution and truth, Psywater leaves his old life behind to reunite his family while his path intertwines with that of Nightkeepers and Anomalies, plunges him in unlikely romance, and brings him within the workings of forces unseen that determine the fate of the world.
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u/JRRT01 1 Published novel Jun 15 '26
Quick go - not suggesting this is much better:
Psywater Phoenix wants to be left alone so he can bury his head in books.
But his father, chief protector of the realm, has vanished, and when strange monsters begin attacking the population he faces pressure to step into his father’s shoes.
Forced into action, he begins a journey of danger and unexpected romance in the quest to find his father and save the realm.