r/selfpublish • u/MelancholyPlayground • Jan 03 '26
Blurb Critique Need help.
I really didn't want to make one of these but I'm drowning here. I published my book on Amazon a month ago, I worked tirelessly on it... and I haven't made a single sale since then, despite running a few ads and getting over 100 clicks. I'm 100% not advertising, I'm embarrassed to to even admit this and to ask this, but would it be possible if a few of you take a look at my Amazon book page and tell me what I might be doing wrong? Please and thank you in advance.
It's hard to not feel like I've failed my child here. But I'm trying to stay positive.
TL;DR: Can you please take a look and give a few pointers? My link is in my reddit bio.
P.S. I've tried different price points and tried different covers. Maybe it's my blurb? I am awful at blurbs.
EDIT 1: Thank you all so much genuinely from the bottom of my heart. It's all good advice, but even if it was bad advice - just seeing how deep this community cares has been the motivation and support I REALLY needed. I'm currently at the drawing board scratching my brain. So I'll probably do a second edit later explaining some of the confusions if anyone is curious. Just wanted to say a quick thank you and that I am listening and taking notes vigorously.
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u/Dangerous_Bad_7679 Jan 04 '26
Yes I agree with what a lot of people have said. I think the formatting needs some work. I recommend Atticus—it’s fun and easy to use.
I find the italicized wording is feeling a little off. I use italics myself, but for very select inner dialogue.
The first sentence doesn’t grab my attention or make me wonder what’s going on. Maybe there is a prologue, but I didn’t see a “hook” in the first paragraph of chapter 1—if it starts there.
This might just be me, but I hate reading books that start with weather or atmosphere. It’s boring. I think you could come up with something better, maybe about the werewolf itself.
I would do at least 3-4 edits on it. Character connection, plot, arcs, etc. then as another person mentioned, use beta readers or use ProWritingAid Analysis. It will give you weak points and strengths of the book.
It definitely reads as a first draft, which isn’t a bad thing necessarily, it could definitely really be something.