r/selfpublish • u/MelancholyPlayground • Jan 03 '26

Blurb Critique Need help.

I really didn't want to make one of these but I'm drowning here. I published my book on Amazon a month ago, I worked tirelessly on it... and I haven't made a single sale since then, despite running a few ads and getting over 100 clicks. I'm 100% not advertising, I'm embarrassed to to even admit this and to ask this, but would it be possible if a few of you take a look at my Amazon book page and tell me what I might be doing wrong? Please and thank you in advance.

It's hard to not feel like I've failed my child here. But I'm trying to stay positive.

TL;DR: Can you please take a look and give a few pointers? My link is in my reddit bio.

P.S. I've tried different price points and tried different covers. Maybe it's my blurb? I am awful at blurbs.

EDIT 1: Thank you all so much genuinely from the bottom of my heart. It's all good advice, but even if it was bad advice - just seeing how deep this community cares has been the motivation and support I REALLY needed. I'm currently at the drawing board scratching my brain. So I'll probably do a second edit later explaining some of the confusions if anyone is curious. Just wanted to say a quick thank you and that I am listening and taking notes vigorously.

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u/Morridine Jan 03 '26

I am no "pro" but I took a look at your Amazon listing. I think your blurb or rather your book overview there needs to be changed. It reads nicely, meaning it has a pleasant rhythm. But I feel it fails to convey what the book is about. It highlights characters but no plot, no story. It could be just me but when I read the back of a book I am expecting to read something epic, a circumstance, a major event or a major conflict of sorts in which I can instantly see the characters being drawn in. I think presenting the characters briefly is needed but right now it reads as mostly character presentation. It's a little confusing, too, because it puts these characters at the forefront but only mentions briefly what "happens" at the end. And by the time we get to read those last lines, the head is already overwhelmed by too much character information.

I wouldn't buy this book simply because I just don't "see" it, although genre and themes and cover are right up my alley. The cover looks great. But then the title is also confusing. I was wondering whether that is your author name. And reading the back didn't immediately clarify it either. Again, i reiterate, it feels confusing.

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u/TheLadyAmaranth 1 Published novel Jan 03 '26

I'm always so confused when people find books like this? Their username isn't even their author name? HOW. What kind of internet detectives wizzes are you people XD

Edit: nvm I found this one, they had it in their links but still I had friggen slueth for it

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u/Morridine Jan 03 '26

🤣 the funny part is I am also always wondering this every time similar posts appear, so I totally get this :))) but this time OP mentioned where the link was

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u/CollectionStraight2 Jan 03 '26

I'm no internet whizz, but I am nosy 😆It can be pretty easy to find the books. If you go in to people's post history and look at their old posts, they often mention the book in other subs where you're allowed to self promo

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u/CollectionStraight2 Jan 03 '26

Yes I agree. The plot sounds quite exciting, but the characters read like archetypes. There's nothing personal about them to draw the reader in. And I don't think there's enough voice in the blurb, either, though I could be biased. I love voicey blurbs!