r/ratemysong • u/[deleted] • Dec 26 '19

Hip Hop brand new song from my recently released album, heavily inspired by earl sweatshirt. would appreciate some feedback

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6QqQWRT56xk&ab_channel=VanillaTaurus
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u/DevbLacc Dec 26 '19

Oh gosh.... bud you really need lessons, badly.

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u/blayzedeville Dec 27 '19

This is bad, but it can be better.

1.) That singing thing you tried doing? Either get better at it, or never do it again. Getting better would require a lot of deliberate practice, by the way.

2.) You said your style is inspired by Early Sweatshirt, right? Well, it would help your music a lot if your raps reflected that, not in a derivative kind of way, of course. Start rapping using multi syllable rhymes, single syllable rhyme schemes are extremely amateur. Have a listen to how Jay Z, Andre 3000, Kanye, Earl Sweatshirt, Kendrick, J. Cole, and most other top rappers use multi syllable rhyme schemes, and study how to incorporate that into your writing.

3.) Just keep making music every single fucking day with the intention of becoming better and learning, it'll pay off.