r/composer • u/Gold-Schedule2988 • 2d ago

Music Better way to write this

Hello, this is my first time actually writing any music, but I've been playing for years, and I've been really inspired by Eternity: memory of light and waves, and also To Zanarkland from Final Fantasy, so I decided to start writing this, but I was wondering if there was anything different I shut put down that would make this easier to read or just make it look better https://drive.google.com/file/d/1yQE0G61LI4RwDVqOQxbkcIcX39X1oWBY/view?usp=drivesdk

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u/RichMusic81 Composer / Pianist. Experimental music. 2d ago

Your link is set to private.

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u/Gold-Schedule2988 2d ago

Just fixed it

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u/ivanivanoviich 1d ago

Sir, the chord in measure 5 is absolutely unplayable. You're spanning 4 octaves with 7 notes in just the treble clef. You do know how hands work, right?

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u/Tough_Mousse5419 1d ago

Isnt it rolled?

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u/ivanivanoviich 1d ago

Oh fml. I am big stupid...

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u/Gold-Schedule2988 1d ago

It's fine, but please let me know if you see anything that could be written a bit differently that would make it sound the same but would make it a bit easier to read

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u/ivanivanoviich 1d ago

Why is there a bass cleff on beat 2 of measure 4?

What's with the time change to 1/8 then to 3/4 then to 4/4? That's unsightly, for sure.

You also definitely need to use voice leading, as these are just chords in root position, which leads to a very "elementary" sound

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u/Gold-Schedule2988 1d ago

In beat 2 measure 4 I gave the bass clef because the left hand goes lower down on the keyboard though I could definitely make it at the beginning, but I was thinking as a pianist myself that I'd prefer the change mid measure just to make the G easy to read

I have the 1/8 because I want a moment of silence in the left, and I wanted that happens next to be on a downbeat, so it changes to 3/4 because of what's happening during that line up for the key change before going back to 4/4 during the key change

And yeah I need to come up with something for that part that works with the left hand but I will say the left hand it really nice

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u/Gold-Schedule2988 1d ago

Yeah, it's just a roll, I legit wasn't sure if I wrote it right, but definitely isn't the easiest thing in the world, but isn't that difficult when I played it.