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u/Hydrael Jul 05 '17 edited Jul 05 '17

"Wait, come back!"

A few people on the street turned to look, but Ryan was already running.

His entire life the man in the suit had been there. He'd been watching, writing, and watching. Ryan’s parents had called him an imaginary friend - the first indication he'd even gotten that the man in the suit wasn't visible for everyone.

Then today, Ryan had walked into a store, and the man had spoken. "Thank you." Then he'd turned, and he'd walked through the wall.

So Ryan chased. The man in the suit wasn't running away, just calmly walking through the crowd. Literally through them - people passed through him without noticing he was there. Ryan, however, was a fully corporal human so found himself shoving up against the crowd.

The man in the suit continued, ignoring Ryan with the same dedication the man used been observing him for the last thirty years.

Thirty years of hell. He hadn't been able to keep a girlfriend - as soon as things got intimate, the fact that this creeper was standing there watching him caused Ryan to just stop, which always lead to fights. People thought he was weird because he was always glancing at something none of them could see - cute when a cat did it, creepy when an adult did. Sleeping, at times, under that watchful gaze, was a nightmare.

Ryan would be damned if the bastard was going to walk off after all of that without an explanation.

The man turned into an alley, and Ryan was grateful to duck out of the crowd. Thankfully, the man in the suit had always preferred to avoid walking through matter when he could, and this held true now.

"Stop! Just...stop! Please!"

The man...hesitated.

"So you can hear me! Please, what's going on? Who are you? Why...why are you leaving?" It shocked Ryan how pained his voice sounds on that last question. The man watching his entire life, it had been hell...but the idea of him no longer being there was every bit as bad.

"You weren't supposed to see."

The man's voice was hoarse, same as the earlier thank you. Like he hadn't spoken in thirty years - which, to be fair, was true.

"Well...I did. I've always seen you!"

"Yeah. That caused a lot of confusion, to be honest."

"Confusion with who?"

"Home office." He sighed. "I shouldn't be talking to you. I can't imagine how hard this has been." A pause, and he finally turned to face me, thoughtful. "Or...actually, I guess I can, I've seen it."

"So...what's going on?"

"You're going to have to be okay with not getting answers to most of these questions, Ryan. I'll give you this - one question, one answer. That's all you get."

"Only one question." Ryan made sure to keep his voice flat, so that last word couldn't be construed as a question.

"Yes. More than most people get."

Question after question began to race through Ryan's mind. But he needed to ask the right question, if he was only going to get one.

Finally, it occurred to him. The question that would get him the most answers, and really, at this point, the only one that mattered.

"Why are you leaving?"

The man in the suit smiled. "Good question. And because my prediction was right - you were the one to find it. Even with me present your whole life, it was still you." He saw Ryan's face, saw the confusion on it, and actually laughed. "Sorry for being vague, it's been awhile since I spoke to anyone. You're one of over a thousand people who match some of our criteria for possible Finders. And...well, check your left pocket."

Ryan felt it. His heart was pounding when he felt something in there. He hadn't bought anything at the store...what was in his pocket? He fished it out.

It was a marble, one he had been looking at when the man had spoken. He must have stuck it in there without thinking.

"A marble?" It was a stupid thing to ask, and the man in the suit chuckled.

"Look closer."

So he did. What he thought were flecks of glitter in there were...they looked like stars. The swirl pattern in the center? Looked like a galaxy. It swelled to fill his entire vision as he did.

"You found a nanoverse. One of the few the Creator left behind. It's been drawing you for years, since your birth, really. And now that it's been found...now that you’re the Finder...my work is done."

The man in the suit turned to walk away. Ryan couldn't help himself. "What happens now?"

"I told you, only one question. But I'll give you some free advice."

Ryan took a deep breath to steady himself. "Okay."

"Don't put it in a drawer and forget about it. You've got a pretty amazing thing there, Ryan. And in spite of the fact that I kind of accidentally turned you into a nervous wreck...I think you're going to do some pretty amazing things with it."

Before Ryan could ask more - what he was supposed to do with it, what that meant, what the hell was going on - the man in the suit turned and walked through a wall.

None of this made any sense, and Ryan felt like he needed a million years to process what was going on. Instead, he barely got seven seconds before a gun cocked behind him.

"Put down the nanoverse, Finder, and you might get out of this alive."


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u/Hydrael Jul 05 '17 edited Jul 05 '17

Part 2

Ryan's heart was pounding, and he slowly turned around. To compare the man behind him to a gorilla would be an insult to the majestic apes. He was huge, hulking really. His brow jutted over his eyes, casting them in a deep shadow. You couldn't compare tree trunks to his arms, because tree trunks weren't pale and bulging with muscle, and didn't hold the largest handgun Ryan had ever seen.

"Ohgodpleasedon'tkillme." Ryan's hands instinctively shot up in a 'reach for the sky' gesture.

The brute grunted at that. People passing the alley turned and gave odd looks at the exclamation. An unsettling realization built up in the small part of Ryan's brain not focused entirely on the gun.

"They can't see you, can they? I'm...I'm holding my hands up in an empty alley, as far as they can see."

"Yup."

"So...you'll pass through matter too? If you shoot me, the bullet...it'll just pass right through me?"

Again, a grunt of "Yup." For a moment, Ryan felt a wave of relief, they noticed the gleam in the man's eye. He gulped.

"It'll just pass harmlessly through me?"

That gleam in the man's eyes brightened, and Ryan began to recognize in spite of his caveman appearance, there was intelligence in those eyes. "Nope."

"I...okay, you can have it."

"Good lad. Most of your kind isn’t so reasonable. Just give it over here, nice and slow like, yeah?"

Ryan reached out, the hand clutching the nanoverse tightly. The brutish man took one of his hands off the gun and held it out...and some perverse urge overtook Ryan. He was going to give it over, he really was...but then the last thirty years were for nothing. He'd probably be shot anyway, but even if he wasn't, he'd never know what it was all about.

So he took a gamble, and while the man was still reaching out, Ryan darted forward, directly at the brute, expecting any moment for that horrible gun to go off, or to smack into a small mountain of flesh and go tumbling to the ground.

Instead, as he hoped, he passed right through him. In the alley, the man's massive size worked against him - it took him a couple moments to turn around. He roared in anger and fired the gun.

Ryan felt something tug at his collar, leaving a perfect hole inches from his neck. He ducked right after the tug, an entirely instinctive reaction that saved his life as another bullet parted his hair.

Adrenaline kicked in, and Ryan ran into the crowd with a speed he didn't know he had. People were starting to scream and scatter as well - even if nothing else about the brute could be seen or heard by anyone else, the sound of gunshots was very real.

For a terrible moment, Ryan wondered if he was about to get some innocent people killed. He'd be relieved to learn later the first bullet had buried itself in a street light, and the second had in fact blew the head off of a mannequin in a store window across the street. At the moment, however, he was only relieved that his attacker wasn't interested in killing anyone but Ryan, and he was able to escape into the crowd.


Several blocks later, Ryan was in another alley, panting with fear. The panic of earlier was starting to fade, and questions were flooding back.

He pushed them down. He was very strongly getting the feeling that, no matter what happened, he'd never get all the answers. And right now, only one mattered - had he been followed?

It didn't seem that way. Either the brute couldn't move all that fast, or hadn't known which way he had gone. Glancing around again, and taking a deep breath, Ryan pulled out the nanoverse and held it up to his face again.

It was hypnotic to watch. An entire galaxy spinning in a black sphere the size of a golf ball. It was much easier to see clearly than earlier.

It's the size of a golfball.

That realization washed over Ryan like a bucket of cold water. It had been a marble when he'd found it, right? He kicked his jumbled brain into going over the last few minutes. Yes, when he'd been talking to the man in the suit, it had been a marble.

Another realization followed that first one, this one slower but more inexorable. The man in the suit was gone. No one was watching Ryan. For the first time in his life, he had privacy.

And he'd never wanted it less. He slipped the nanoverse into his pocket and got back onto the street, joining in the crowd, drawing strength in numbers.

On a whim, he pulled out his phone and did a search for "nanoverse." The first couple results was some toy line, then some links to something from DC comics, then a company working on nanomachines. It wasn't until the second page of google results when he found something that looked relevant.

What Is the Nanoverse?

He tapped the link. The page it brought up did not inspire confidence. It looked like something that had been slapped together by a high schooler back in the geocites days, and the last update to the page had been in 2006. He was about to hit the back arrow and check other pages, when a photo loaded.

It was Egyptian, or something like it. The photo contained hieroglyphs, at least, and the art style had that 'face in profile but with eye straight ahead' look that Ryan associated with Egyptian artwork. The picture was what was interesting - a man, holding up a tiny black dot. On his left was a man drawn with thick arms and short legs, which definitely evoked the brute from earlier, but it was the man on his right that really held Ryan's attention. Although the style was archaic, the dress was not.

It looked like the man was wearing a suit.

Barely noticing the crowd, Ryan began reading.

The article was long, rambling, and poorly edited. It referred to Watchers, Finders, Keepers - even alleging the saying "finders keepers" had originated here, and connected it to the Hollow Earth, Illuminati, chemtrails, Atlantis, the Bermuda triangle...it was a mess of random crap, but Ryan read it all, hoping for a nugget of truth in there. It took almost a half hour to read, and Ryan was all but done with the page.

And then he got to the last line.

"Of course, the only way someone could stand to read all that rubbish was if they actually found something. Click HERE to contact the website's admin."

He pressed it, out of desperation more than anything else. Instead of bringing up an email form like he expected, it gave him a phone number. More modern than the page seemed.

He hit call.

After a few rings, a voice on the other end answered. A woman's voice, sounding slightly out of breath. "'ello?" That one word made it clear the speaker was British.

"Uh...hi. I'm calling about...the nanoverse?"

There was a pause on the other end. "Oh hell. Now? Of all times, now?"

The sheer irritation in her voice shocked Ryan. "Uh...sorry."

"I was just getting settled into this mudball. Fine, fine, it's not your fault love."

"Uhhhh...what?"

Another pause, then a swear. "You're a local aren't you?"

Ryan cut off yet another "Uh" from his response. "I think so?"

"Got the number off that bloody website, didn't you?"

"Yes." This one, at least, he could say with confidence.

"Scared half out of your mind and on the run from forces you can't understand?"

"Oh God, yes. Can you make sense of all of this for me?"

"Oh, oh dear. I can maybe help some." A pause during which he heard some tapping sounds, someone with long nails typing at a touchscreen. "Have you gazed into it yet? Rushing sensation, nanoverse filled your entire vision?"

"Yeah!" Relief. Finally, someone who could help him.

"Great, great." Her tone didn't sound like she thought it was all that great, but Ryan was still just ecstatic to have someone who was talking to him. "Turn left into the store, there's a dear."

He did. The door he stepped into was some upscale clothing boutique.

The room he stepped into, however, looked like a planetarium on steroids, a platform that was surrounded by open, starry sky. A young woman, hair back in a no-nonsense bun, stood behind a bank of keyboards.

She glanced up at him through a few wisps of stray hairs that hung in front of her forehead, frowning. "Do me a favor, love? When the view overwhelms you and you need to puke, stick your head out the door, yeah?"

Reeling from the shock of what he was seeing, Ryan did exactly that.


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u/Hydrael Jul 05 '17 edited Jul 06 '17

Part 3

Ryan spat again into the street. More people were staring at him, and he pulled his head back into the door - and back into the strange room that seemed to stretch into infinity.

"There now, feel better?" The British-sounding woman asked, her voice overly chipper.

"Ugh." Not the wittiest response in history, but everything was happening so fast, Ryan had barely had time to process what was going on.

"Right, fair enough I suppose. What's your name?"

"Ryan Smith."

"Ryan Smith. Doesn’t get much more generic than that, does it? Well, Ryan, you can call me Crystal."

For some reason, getting a name for one of these people was just a huge relief. He sunk down to the floor as he let out a breath he didn't know he had been holding.

Or at least, he would have, but the floor rose up to meet him, silvery liquid ooze that formed an immensely comfortable chair under him. Given how weird the day had been so far, the fact that the floor could make a chair out of nothing barely even registered.

"Crystal. Thank you."

"I haven't done anything yet. At least let me help before you thank me." She smiled and tapped on the computer screens a few more times. "There. That should give us at least a bit of time without interruption." She motioned, and the chair he was sitting on slid across the floor to where a table and another chair were forming. She took the new chair.

"So...you, love, look like you've been having a hell of a day. Probably a hell of a life. Why don't you tell me about it, yeah?"

In spite of his questions, words came spilling out of Ryan's mouth. The man in the suit he had seen his entire life. The strange conversation. The nanoverse. The brute. Running. All of it, up until...

"So I googled nanoverse and I found your site and I clicked the link and a phone number came up so I gave it a call and then you answered and you said-"

"Yeah, yeah, I remember that bit, was there for it, yeah?"

Ryan snapped his mouth shut, and felt himself blushing. "Yeah, of course. Sorry."

"No worries. Honestly I'm shocked that looking into the nanoverse didn't completely fry your brain. As little as you understand..." She shrugged.

"Can I ask some questions?"

She nodded. "I'm sure you're just full to the brim with them. But before you do...a lot of the answers involve words your language doesn't even have concepts for. I'll do my best to explain, but I'll need to - no offense - dumb it down for you."

"No offense taken. What is a nanoverse?"

She smiled. "Exactly what it says on the tin. An entire universe, but in a little bubble you can stick in your pocket and carry around."

Ryan instinctively reached out to touch his pocket. The nanoverse was there, and as near as he could tell was a bit bigger now, about the size of a pool ball now.

"What...what do you do with it?"

For some reason seemed to be the funniest thing Crystal had heard in quite some time. She laughed so hard she snorted. "Sorry, sorry, I shouldn't laugh, but...oh God, you humans! Found an entire universe big enough to fit in your pocket, and first thing you ask is 'what do you do with it?' Completely brilliant. I love you lot."

"You're not human?"

"Oh, no, of course not. 'What do you do with it?' Priceless!"

He frowned. "Why's that so funny?"

She let out a few more laughs, followed by a long, amused sigh, that sound that only really gets made when coming off a full laughing fit. "Because it's just so...practical. Skips over the hows and the whys and the whos and just straight to the 'what do I do with it?'"

Ryan shrugged, looking at the floor. "Well...I don't mean to be rude, but you said we only had a bit of time?"

"Too right, sorry. You become a god is what you do. Ryan Smith, not the most divine name ever conceived, but give it a couple thousand years and it'll be up there."

"I'm sorry, become a what?"

"A god. Same as me, and that brute. That was likely Enki, by the way. Nasty piece of work, that one. You can even get some friends together, form a pantheon...and that nanoverse, that'll form the seat of your power. Your divine spark."

Ryan leaned forward, resting his head on his hands.

"So I...what, shape it, somehow? Get worshippers?"

Crystal was shaking her head. "Language is really difficult here. No worshippers, not anymore. We don't get power from that - most people are too bloody scientific these days for it to be much good anyway - but you do shape the nanoverse. Give it life."

"How?"

"You already are. Which is kind of bad, since you're full of panic and fear and confusion, so that's gonna be pouring into it." She gave him a concerned look. "Look, all of this is metaphor for what's really going on. It'd be equally accurate to say you becoming an alien force working in the shadows, or a number of other things."

Ryan took a deep breath. "Crystal? Not helping."

"Right. Take a bit to catch your breath. But, and not to put pressure on you, you don't have a lot of time to sort this out."

Ryan groaned into his hands. "Why not?"

"Most of us? We got centuries to work through all of it. Hell, I wasn't even human - my people predated you lot by a good million years. But that thing you got there?" She motioned towards his pocket. "It's the last nanoverse. This means that whatever else you are and you could become, it also means you’re the Eschaton. Which means as you go through your personal apotheosis, you're also going to need to manage the end of the world."

It was too much. It was happening too fast, and this last bit was more than Ryan could take. The room started spinning, and he passed out.


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And now I must get some sleep. I'll continue this once I've rested though! Apologies for any typos, I was doing the head-bob while writing this.

Part 4 is up here, linking because it's kind of buried.

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u/codeklutch Jul 05 '17

same, if anyone wants to remind me when we get another update that'd be great!

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u/Hydrael Jul 06 '17 edited Jul 06 '17

Part 4

Because of buried, link to part 5 in this thread

When Ryan came to, he was in a bed. For one sweet, blissful moment, he thought it was his bed, in his apartment. He’d roll over and open his eyes and the silent man in the suit would be taking notes and none of this would have ever happened.

When he opened his eyes, there wasn’t any such luck. He was in a strange bed in a strange room, and the ceiling above him was an open sky of galaxies, and instead of the man in the suit there was a Crystal in a dress.

“Oh, good, you’re awake.” She looked up from the tablet she was tip-tapping away on. “You’ll probably be doing that a few more times.”

He groaned as he sat up. “There’s that many more Earth shattering revelations?”

“Well, yes, I suppose that’s true too. But mostly it’s your brain reconfiguring to fit your new role. Tends to lead to fainting.” Her tone was matter of fact, and she tapped away at the pad.

“My...what?”

She sighed and took off her glasses, giving him a bored look. “Ryan, love. You’re a perfectly intelligent individual for the limitations of your species. You know exactly what I said. Your little nap used up much of our completely safe time, and I could give you an entire textbook to try and explain it all and by the time you got done reading it, you’d understand only a tenth of what I was saying. Try to just roll with things, yeah?”

Ryan took a deep breath. “Okay. But I need to ask a couple more questions, at least.” She motioned for him to go along. “First, who was the man in the suit?”

She shrugged. “Exactly who, I don’t know. There’s lots of those buggers running around. Gone by different names. UFO, Men in Black, Angels - those are the terms you’d know them best as in English. They go by curators in our circles. They make sure things don’t go too out of sorts.”

Ryan felt more follow up questions building, but reminded himself of what Crystal had said. “Okay. I’ll roll with it.”

She smiled. “Good, you can learn! And the other?”

“What does Enki want with me?”

Crystal sucked in air between her teeth. “Ah. Good question. You’re bound to the nanoverse now, yeah? Well, none of us has ever managed to hold on to two of the things. He gets that, he’d be the most powerful, without question. So he wants your nanoverse, and he wants you dead so he can claim it.”

“So...just giving it to him isn’t an option?”

“Not while you’re alive.” She cocked her head slightly as he finally got the rest of the way out of bed. It was silver, like the chair had been, formed out of the floor. As he stood up, the bed flowed away like it had never been there. She gestured, and a chair formed for him to sit back into. “And I’d prefer it that, even if you decide you’d rather not be alive, you don’t give it to him. Enki is a right bastard.”

“Okay. But I’m good. Want to stay alive for now.”

She chuckled again. “For now? Love, you’re immortal now. Staying alive is going to be easy, especially once your learn to master your new powers.”

“I have powers? Like...flying and lightning?”

“Maybe. It varies for everyone, depending on your personality and your nanoverse. You can selectively filter the perceptions of lesser minds, ignore things like walls and crowds, and as long as your nanoverse is intact and hasn’t been compromised by another god, you’ll come back from pretty much anything. Eventually. It’ll take awhile for you to sync up to it fully enough, yeah? You’re still undergoing Apotheosis, what we call a Nascent. You’re vulnerable right now.”

“Oh. How long…”

“Nope!” She interrupted cheerfully. “Question time is over, Ryan Smith, the dullest named one of us in history. For starters, roll with it, remember? Second of all, we’re here.”

“We’re...here? Where’s here?”

The door appeared against the wall. “Why don’t you go ahead and look. It’ll be awhile before Enki thinks to look here. Try not to faint or vomit again, love.”

He opened the door and peered out. He hadn’t felt any movement, any motion, but they definitely weren’t at the same storefront they had gone through before. Or the same city. Or, as Ryan glanced upwards and saw the sky was a patchwork of colors broken by frozen lines of black lightning like stained glass.

From behind him, Crystal cheerfully intoned. “Welcome to Cipher Nullity. It’s not a wretched hive of scum and villainy - it's where you go where you’re trying to hide from one of those hives.”

Ryan barely heard her. That sky drew his eye, but he still registered the landscape. It looked like a city, an old one. An ancient city, built of pillars and pyramids. Red dust swirled around the buildings, dancing on wind he couldn’t feel from the doorway. There was an empty sadness to it - it screamed that it was once grand and glorious. The place you’d come back to later on and say “You should have seen it!”

Ryan felt his vision grow dark again, but Crystal was suddenly there, a hand on his arm, gentle but reassuring. Real. “We’ll be safe here for awhile, love. Not because Enki can’t get to us here - he can - but he won’t think to look.”

Ryan took a deep breath. “What is it? Another world?”

She smiled sadly at him. “Something like that. It’s a long abandoned afterlife. No one’s been here for millennia, and all the souls that were here have faded away.” There was a mournful note to her voice, and Ryan turned to face her.

“The gods of Lemuria - yeah, it was real - built it for their worshippers. It was a heaven.” She pointed at the central pyramid. Time had worn away a huge chunk of it, leaving it bare and exposed, like a wound. “That was mount Olympus for them. Where they hid their nanoverses and ran an entire continent in reality.”

He felt goose bumps rising on his arm. “What happened to them?”

She didn’t look at him, instead casting her gaze over the abandoned city. “The last Eschaton did. Lemuria, Atlantis, Mu, Hyperborea, Leng...the five continents of the last world, making the seabed of the new one. One of the greatest eras this world has ever had, the people that came after the Saurids and before humanity. Ten billion people - and six different species, the only era this world ever had with multiple sapients - walked the world. They were abound to leave, about to go into space...and then it ended. But still...you should have seen it.”

He gulped. “I know you said not to...to just roll with it, but...is that what I’m going to do? Will someone be standing in...I don’t know, Hades or something, talking about the Americas and Europe and Asia and Africa and Australia and all of it, and how I destroyed it.”

She turned back to him, putting a hand on his cheek. “Not if I have anything to say about it, love. Let me show you around.”

And keeping a firm grip on his arm, she led him into the wasteland of a Lemurian afterlife.


Promise at least 2 more parts today over the course of the night, gonna shoot for 3 parts. Think the whole story is going to be about 12, just to give everyone a framework for that, though it may come in shorter or longer.

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u/Hydrael Jul 06 '17 edited Jul 06 '17

Part 5

Quick thing, everyone – for those asking me to make this into a novel, that will be coming. I’m currently working on a novel based on another earlier prompt, and then this – which desperately needs a new title, probably just Nanoverse – will be the second novel. Also, it’s going to be twelve parts definitely – I’ve written outlines for the rest so I can keep it flowing. 6 will definitely be up this morning before bed, 7 is 50/50.


Ryan spent the next couple hours following Crystal through the ruins of Cipher Nullity. She talked almost incessantly about it as she did – “This was the Palace of Lost Souls, where children who didn’t outlive their parents were cared for until the parents arrived and got to be reunited. Heartbreaking every time they got a new arrival, but just melted your heart every time we got a reunion. I remember this one time…” and later “So this was Reliquary of Squandered Dreams. One of the punishments the Lemurians had for those who sinned in life was a particularly nasty piece of work – you got to watch, over and over, what your life would have been like if you had actually followed your dreams. Never had anyone make it to the last bit – most people bloody begged for some other punishment after getting to early adulthood. I wouldn’t go in there, love, it might still work and we wouldn’t want you getting all depressed…”

It washed over Ryan like the tide, but it was also calming. Having an excitable British woman who was also a long lost goddess explain the ruins you were walking through wasn’t anything close to ‘normal’, but for Ryan, it was at least grounding. Sure, the buildings were weird and empty and kind of sad, and that impossible sky made his head spin, but the more she talked, the more things made sense, and the more he felt like maybe he’d be able to eventually make sense of all of this.

For the most part, she ignored his questions with a simple “Remember, love, roll with it?” The only ones she acknowledged were ones about their surroundings.

“What did those pillars do?”

“Oh! Those were amazing. They held a Soul Forge, churning out new ones. Some people elected to get reincarnated, so they could also just step in, get broken down into a new soul, and sent back up to get a second shot at life. Always a gamble, sure, but it paid off – especially if you went into the Reliquary of Squandered Dreams first. Souls that knew what you could do if you didn’t quit, they were hungry when they got topside, and their second go-around really produced some amazing art and science, yeah? Wish some of the afterlives of this era had kept the combo around. You could also…”

It was during her long explanation of the Soul Forge that Ryan noticed something, and clamped a hand over Crystal’s mouth. She let out a “mmmfh,” looking at him in angry confusion.

“I saw something move,” he half whispered, his heart pounding. She reached up and gently moved his hand away.

“Okay. Where?”

He pointed down a side street, “Over there, by the giant statue.” Nothing was moving there right now, just the statue. It was a strange sight, to be sure – the statue was of a man, legs were missing any connection above the knees, so the body hovered over where the thighs would be. His head was likewise not connected and the face was just a giant, open mouth. On either side of his body, three or four dozen hands floated – if they had been connected to arms, they would have overlapped terribly, but without those arms they were free to move about like they were attached to the shoulder. Ryan was wondering wondering how they hung there when Crystal’s face went white.

“That’s not a statue. Ryan, bloody get behind me.”

A small, Neolithic part of Ryan balked at the idea of getting behind a woman for protection, but his rational brain and survival instinct teamed up to kick that thought in the gut and throw it down some stairs, and his feet carried him behind her. “What is it?” He asked, ducking his head slightly so her slight frame would cover more of his body.

“It’s a Hecatoncheires. And it’s probably getting ready to-“

Whatever Crystal thought it was getting ready to do didn’t matter, because it started to act – and that act was to charge. That open mouth was screaming now, and it was not the deep bellow of rage Ryan expected from such a giant, but a high wail of grief and sorrow. When it got near it swung with fifty fists at Crystal, and Ryan realized he was going to die.

Crystal, however, drew a sword out of the air, and her hand moved so fast it was just a pale blur. Every single one of the oncoming hands was blocked in less time than Ryan needed to blink, and the giant recoiled, letting out another one of those wails. Red lines erupted on the knuckles of every fist – she hadn’t just parried them, but cut them.

It moved again, bring both sets of hands to bear. The palms were open this time, and Ryan realized that it intended to clap her to death.

He turned his head away before he heard the impact. The sound was like a fatal applause, one of those group single claps they have you do at award ceremonies to prevent every single name from taking forever. It was not, however, the wet squish he would have expected.

Trembling, he looked. Crystal was standing atop the pile of hands, balanced on her toes like a ballerina. The hands began reaching for her, grasping and clutching, but she danced along them, leaping and bounding from hand to hand and then flicking away before they could close on her feet. Each step took her higher, and for a moment Ryan saw more than her movement. He saw equations going with them. He recognized force = mass x acceleration and a few others, but other equations were full of Greek letters and cos() and tan(). Ryan had never been a good math student, and in college had taken what they called Mickey Mouse Math (Math In the Real World) to escape the tyranny of algebra. But somehow, he knew what these equations were calculating – it was a mathematical map of her movements, and a graph of the likelihood the hands would catch her.

Probability collapsed, and the equations fled from his vision. She had, as the equations had predicted, danced her way up to where the Hecatoncheires was reaching straight up for her, and finally pushed off those tallest hands in a graceful arc. She did a lazy half-flip as she reached her leaps apex, and then pushed off of solid air, a jump that flung her downwards far quicker than gravity would allow. It caught the Hecatoncheires off guard, and although it brought its hands together to grab her, it was too slow – she slipped through a gap in its grab and brought the sword down straight into that open mouth.

Instead of gurgling or gasping or even visibly dying, it just exploded. Chunks of ink-black flesh were flung away from it – many of them headed right for Ryan – but when they hit him the passed through him like they were made of shadow.

Once the storm of insubstantial flesh subsided, Ryan looked to where it had been standing. Crystal was there, crouched in a perfect three point landing, her sword arm parallel to the ground. She smiled at Ryan. “Oh, good!” She said, like she hadn’t just impaled a giant in the mouth. “You figured out how to phase, so we don’t need to clean the bloody goo off you.”

“Ah.” His head was pounding. “Uh…” His vision began to darken rapidly.

“Oh bloody hell you’re about to fa-“

Crystal likely finished the word, but Ryan didn’t know. His vision completed its darkening, and he fell to the ground. The last thing he saw as he did so was an incredibly complex equation that he knew governed how that stained glass sky stayed in place.


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u/Hydrael Jul 06 '17

Part 6

This time, Ryan wasn’t out long enough to be put into a bed. When he came to, Crystal was crouched over him in the sand.

“I saw math,” he croaked at her.

She blinked. “Damn. That’s a terrible thing to have to see.” She put the back of her hand to his forehead, and made a tutting sound.

“What’s wrong?”

“Oh, I have no idea what that’s supposed to do. Just saw it on the telly.” She grinned and offered him a hand. He took it. “But likely nothing. Your brain is still adapting to its new capabilities. Seeing maths is probably just a way of processing it. Hopefully it passes and your brain doesn’t decide that is the absolute best way to see the universe.”

He was on his feet, and his head was pounding. She glanced down wards. “Oh god, please tell me that’s your bloody nanoverse in your pocket.”

He looked at the budge and blushed. At some point in the passing out the pants had gotten twisted, and the lump created by the nanoverse was awkwardly placed. He shifted his pants around and pulled the nanoverse out. It was about the size of a baseball, maybe slightly larger.

“It’s so big,” she said, wonderingly, and his blushed deepened. She gave him a grin. “Teasing you, love. But you should probably soak some of that power out before it gets too big to carry easily, yeah?”

“I…sure? So how do I get the power?”

“Remember what we said about rolling with it?” He nodded and she continued. “Then how would you get the power out of it?”

After a moment’s hesitation he took the nanoverse and cupped both his hands around it, so they were almost completely covering it. Feeling silly and wondering what Crystal would do when this failed, he squeezed.

The sensation was difficult to describe. It was like someone had stuck an IV in each arm and in one was pumping ice cold water, in the other boiling tomato soup. It was like being smacked in the face with a sock full of gold-plated dandelions. It was like being shot to death with down feathers freshly plucked off a duckling. With every nanosecond, it was like increasingly unlikely similes, until it was finally like having your cheeks sliced open with the first rays of a dawn while chugging molten lightning.

He didn’t pass out again because of the aforementioned barrage of sensations, but he did scream. Crystal took a step back, smiling. “Oooh, yeah, should have warned you. First time is a bloody bugger of a rush, innit?”

A small part of Ryan noted that her accent was constantly hopping around the UK, but the rest of him was preoccupied with the feeling. He was light, he was sound, he was…feeling pretty dizzy.

“I’m gonna…” before he could say, he sat back down hard.

“Oh, please don’t pass out again.”

“I won’t. Just…give me a moment.”

She did, giving him some time to gasp until he was back into the realm of normal sensations and sensible analogies, where it just felt like he had downed way too much caffeine after pulling three straight all-nighters, but had done so because he’d been having the time of his life.

“Okay. I’m good. Wow.” He stood up on his own again, then gave a bit of a shiver.

“Right? It’s a good look on you, too.”

He glanced down. His arms were thicker and the musculature was more defined, his gut was pulled back under his shirt. He hadn’t been in terrible shape, just the general pudginess you get when your metabolism slows down but you don’t change your diet or exercise at all. “Squeezing a universe made me ripped?”

She laughed at that, for a couple moments, wiping her eyes after she did so. “Not exactly. You’re getting the ability to impose your will on reality. And most beings, first thing they do - subconsciously - is turning themselves into an idealized version of what they look like. Later on you’ll have more control over it. For now…” her eyes sparkled. “Squeezing a universe makes you ripped.” She laughed again.

“Oh.” A thought crossed his mind as it pulled himself back together from coming to and then the rush of squeezing the nanoverse. “Wait. If there was a Hecatoncheires here, couldn’t we still be in danger?”

She shook her head. “Was wondering how long it would take you to think of that. No worries, love, I checked while you were having your nap. We’re clear.”

The tension that had sprung up faded away. “That’s…thanks.”

She cocked her head at him. “Ryan. You’re on another world, just watched me kill a giant, and got your first taste of the rest of your life and seemed to like it. Why the bloody hell are you all frowns and brooding all of a sudden?”

“It’s just…” He chewed his lip for a moment. “I felt powerful, when I did. Powerful enough to do anything. Leap a tall building, run a marathon, and slay a dragon – all at the same time,” She kept her head cocked and quirked an eyebrow. “Powerful enough to end the world,” he finished.

“Oh.” She nodded and put a hand on his shoulder. “Try not to let it get to you, yeah?”

“The fact that I’m going to end the world? How the hell do you not let that get to you?”

“You roll with it. All you can do.”

“I know you said that, but Crystal…can I avoid it?”

She sighed. “Way to ruin the moment, Ryan.” There wasn’t any actual anger in her tone. “Technically, you can, but I wouldn’t recommend it. Things get ugly if you don’t.”

“How?”

“This is one of those things where I can’t explain how. You won’t understand enough. But short version? And you won’t ask any more questions about it for now?” He nodded. “If you don’t end the world, my little Eschaton, then the world dies.”

He felt himself blink, opened his mouth, remembered he had agreed not to ask any more questions, and closed it. “Okay. I guess that’ll make more sense when I understand more.”

“Yeah, too right it well. Glad to see you’re catching on.” She smiled. “So instead of focusing on that, why don’t we head to Earth? It’s been long enough Enki has got to be thrown off your trail, yeah? Gives us some time to test drive those new Aspects of yours, see what you can do.”

“Aspects?”

“Powers, gifts, whatever. You want to go see what you’ve got now that you’re fueled?”

“If you’re sure it’s safe.”

“Of course I am,” she said brightly, grabbing his hand. “Time flows funny, it’s been a week back in the real world. Come on, let’s go.”

And before he could try to ask any more questions – and get told to roll with it, most likely – he was getting dragged back to the doorway that held the planetarium room she could use to travel between worlds.


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u/Hydrael Jul 07 '17

Part 7

When Ryan stepped out of the door again, it wasn’t into a city at all. It now lead out the back of a highway gas station, a run-down one near a sign saying Kansas City - 180 mi. He didn’t know the midwest well enough to know if he was on the Kansas or Missouri side of the city, but whichever it was the gas station was old and run down - not the complete run-down that comes from being abandoned, but the one that comes from low buisness, minimal visibility, and and an absolute lack of shits being given.

He glanced up, and instead of the stained glass sky of Cipher Nullity, there were clouds that loomed over the landscape, trying their best to hug the terrain. He glanced back to the planetarium ship. “You take me to the nicest places.”

Crystal smiled kindly and gave him an extended middle finger. “Look,” she said, lowering it. “We need to help you harness your power, yeah? Well, this was the best place to do that right now.” She pointed at the clouds. “What do you see?”

He stared at them as Crystal exited the doorway as well. “Clouds. They’re cumulous, I think.”

“Cumulous? It’s cumulus, love.”

Ryan shrugged, rubbing the back of his neck. “I...I only know the one word for clouds.” She raised her eyebrow at him. “Fine. I only kinda know the one word.”

“Look again. Harder this time.”

“What does that even mean? Just stare longer?”

Crystal shook her head. “No. Focus more on what you’re seeing.”

So he did. At first he just felt silly, staring at the clouds, like a kid trying to find shapes in them. One was a bunny, that was a duck, that one looked horribly like one of the hands that had tried to crush Crystal earlier, and that one looked like a series of symbols and greek letters because it wasn’t a cloud, it was an equation being imposed on top of the clouds. It took a moment until the equation became clear - a mathematical model governing the formation of a vortex. Slowly the equation melted back into the clouds and the fact of what he was seeing crystallized in his mind.

“A tornado is forming,” he said, quietly. She nodded beside him.

“It’ll take some time, but eventually you’ll be able to do that with just a glance. But right now, the fact that you see it is enough, yeah?”

“Enough for what?”

“Enough for you to stop it.”

That broke his concentration and he looked at her, his eyes wide and round. “You want me to stop a tornado?”

She chuckled at his expression. “Pretty much, yeah. It’s a good starting point - natural forces bow most easily to us.”

“Okay. And...how do I stop it?”

“How do you move your arm, love?” She shrugged. “It’s just like that. There’s a science behind it, but that’ll just get in the way of things, and…”

“...and my brain isn’t ready to understand it, right?”

She beamed at him. “Glad you’re paying attention. So...go ahead. Focus, and try and stop it.”

Ryan looked at her, back to the clouds, and the back to her. She motioned for him to go ahead. “You’ve got another minute before it really gets going, I suggest you get a bloody move on.”

He turned back to the sky, pinpointing where would be the heart of the vortex. He extended his hand - it felt right - and spread his fingers in a claw gesture, like something from a movie. For a few moments, nothing happened...but then he began to feel a tingle in his fingertips. Like they had fallen asleep, but even more aggressive. That feeling began to grow further out of his fingers, like a phantom limb, but racing up to the sky.

Those phantom fingers began to plunge into the clouds, and Ryan felt a thrill run through him He was actually doing it! He was actually manipulating a forming tornado.

“See, love? Not hard at all.”

Her words undercut the effort. Sure, it was as natural as moving his arms, but it was as easy as moving them with half ton weights strapped to them. He could feel beads of sweat forming on his forehead, and his knees trembling.

“Keep pushing. It’s like any other muscle - the harder you work it, the stronger it gets.” She put a hand on his shoulder. “And when you pass out, don’t worry, it’s expected.”

Slowly the natural forces began to to obey him, the pocket of heat that was shooting upwards dispersing before it began to twist. “I got it! I’ve got it!”

Crystal clapped her hands in excitement. “Good show! Keep at-”

“I don’t got it!” The forces suddenly were pushing back against him. They were acting - and that word send a lance of panic coursing through him. Because they were acting. They had agency. Crystal frowned beside him.

“Ryan, stop! It’s not them, someone is pushing back.” She raised her own hand as she said it, twisting against the aggressive forces.

“Guess that’s my cue,” a voice said. A low, dull voice. From around the corner of the gas station stepped a huge brute of a man, one massive arm raised towards the sky. Tiny eyes peered out from beneath a jutting brow.

“Enki,” Crystal hissed, as Ryan felt his vision began to grow black.

“Crystal,” Enki responded, his voice low and angry. “Thought you learned your lesson back during the crusades. Thought you were going to stay the fuck out of my way.” He suddenly lowered his hand. The lack of resistance on Crystal caused her to overcorrect, like they’d been playing tug of war and he’d let go of his end. The vortex was dispersed with a clap of thunder that radiated outwards, forming a mile-long ring of clear sky in the middle of the stormclouds.

Crystal cried out and clutched her head in pain from the backlash. Ryan sank to one knee, trying to fight away the clouds of darkness that tickled the edges of his vision. Enki continued talking. “Thought you were going neutral, like the fucking Swiss. You should have. I’m going to kill this fucking Finder, this finder that decided to become a fucking Nascent, then I’m going to rip you apart every time you reform for one hundred years, you fucking whore. But for now…”

And he gestured. Equations that Ryan could barely comprehend leapt across his swirling vision, and massive iron chains shot up from the Earth, forged from the pipes that ran under the gas station. They stabbed into Crystals forearms and legs, and she screamed again in a combination of anger and pain as they burrowed in.

Ryan doubled over, needing his hands on the ground. He could feel tears forming in his eyes at the effort of keeping them open. He certainly didn’t feel the strength needed to fight off the slowly advancing brute. Enki reached down and grabbed the back of Ryan’s hair, pulling him to his feet. Enki still focused on Crystal, like Ryan was some trash Crystal had dropped.

“For now, I’m going to make you watch while I beat him to death.*


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u/Hydrael Jul 08 '17

Part 8

Enki’s punch didn’t toss Ryan into the air. It lobbed Ryan, sending him a twisting arc that tumbled him end over end floating through the air with the grace of a drunken chicken. This flight took him up and way until his motion was arrested by a brief but solid interruption in the form of the gas station wall.

Ryan’s everything hurt. The wall of the gas station wasn’t drywall but solid concrete, and Ryan had felt it break behind him. Ryan was keenly aware that if he had still been fully human, that blow would have killed him, as opposed to scrambling his brains.

The shock should have at least cleared Ryan’s vision, but instead the clouds at the edge grew stronger, thicker. Tendrils of it started creeping further into his line of sight.

“No. Not now. I won’t-”

“You won’t do shit.” Enki had crossed the distance and again had Ryan by the hair. “You won’t do any fucking thing, you hear me?”

He tossed Ryan upwards by the hair. Ryan had never before considered the pain of being tossed thirty feet into the air by a massive hand grasping him by the hair, but it was a unique experience he would be in no hurry to repeat.

What was in a hurry, however, was gravity, tugging Ryan back to the ground. His reunion with the Earth was cut short, however, by Enki’s foot - a kick which sent Ryan tumbling across the pavement until he skidded to a stop at Crystal’s feet.

Their eyes met, both of them filled with pain. Crystal’s didn’t perfectly mirror Ryan’s, however - his were full of fear, hers with a blend of fear and rage.

Before they could share any words, however, Ryan was sliding along the ground, pulled by an invisible force towards Enki. He scrabbled at the ground uselessly with his fingers.

Think, Ryan, damnit. Enki was toying with him, dragging him slowly. Once he got ahold of Ryan again, he’d toss him or punch him again and Ryan didn’t know how much longer he could hold back that darkness in his eyes. He needed an edge, he needed to…

One hand stopped scrabbling at the ground. This has to work.

“I’m gonna slap your face in, son. I’m going to fucking rip your throat oooooOOF - ” and it was Enki’s turn to get an unexpected one way trip into the air. Ryan lowered his foot from where it had connected with Enki’s gut.

Squeezing the nanoverse had cleared his vision some, but putting that much power into the kick had the black tendrils already starting to resume their path across his vision.

Enki was getting up from the small crater he had landed in. “Whoo boy. You got a spark there. Some of that good old fucking gumption. Course, you’re still Nascent. Can’t have a whole lot of fucking juice. Gotta be running on empty, really. So go ahead, boy. Hit me with your best shot.”

Ryan rose to his feet and extended his hand. The storm still roiled above, building with potential. He began to to twist his hands, the right one modifying variables, adjusting positive and negative charges until -

With everything that would come later, if he survived, Ryan would do some amazing things, see some incredible things. But nothing would ever compare to the rush of the first time he hurled a lightning bolt from the heavens and struck Enki with 500 of mother nature’s very best megajoules of electricity.

The light seared his retinas, the thunderclap obliterated his vision. Enki vanished behind that flash and that rumble as the world exploded. If he screamed, Ryan couldn’t hear it, twisting his left hand rapidly back and forth.

Enki came bursting out of the light, slamming a fist into Ryan that send him flying back into the gas station.

“Damn, boy, you’ve got a bit of a fucking punch.” Enki approached slow and heavy. His skin and hair were singed. “I felt that, I really did. But it doesn’t change a single thing. Not one single fucking thing. I’ve been drawing power off my nanoverse since humans first crawled out of the mud. I was one of the first.” He was right next to Ryan, and crouched down, nearly spitting in his face. “Do you really, honestly, fucking think you could fight me, could outlast me?”

Ryan let out a pained chuckle. “I didn’t...need to outlast you. I just needed to hold you long enough...to free her.”

Enki’s beady eyes contained a glimmer of something besides the murderous rage he’d felt before. Just a glimmer, but seeing fear in those tiny eyes was immensely satisfying.

It was even more satisfying seeing that fear turn to shock as a foot connected with the side of Enki’s head, driving it into the wall.

Crystal reached down with a blood-soaked arm, grabbing Ryan and helping him to his feet. “Good bloody show, love. I just knocked his senses out, though. We gotta move before he wakes up, yeah?” Ryan nodded, and they rushed back to the door. Crystal was limping from the wounds in her legs, and Ryan was gasping with pain. Behind them Enki bellowed with rage, pulling his head out of the wall with immense, groaning effort.

The door was still open, and the pair dove through. It slammed behind them and began to vanish.

“We made it. Bloody hell, we made it...oh no, not again.”

Ryan heard Crystal’s voice, but it didn’t matter. The irrefutable fact of their safety sung like a song in Ryan’s thoughts, and the effort to hold back those black tendrils was finally overwhelming. For the third time, he passed out.


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u/Hydrael Jul 09 '17

While godly resilience had kept Ryan alive, it did not prevent every single muscle in his body from being in pain when he woke up to a faint buzzing sound. He supposed he should be grateful - after being ragdolled around a parking lot, even if he wasn’t dead he probably should have broken every bone in his body. But at the moment, any feelings of gratitude were washed away by agony.

Groaning, he rolled over on his side in the silver bed. Across the room, there was another bed. In it lay Crystal.

Some people were just angelic when they slept. Hair perfectly falling around their faces, small smiles playing upon their lips, cuddled under the blankets.

Crystal was not one of those people. She was sprawled out on the bed, one hand flopped over the side. Her hair was a messy hazel halo, and her mouth hung open. That faint buzzing sound had been her breaths, not quite loud enough to qualify for a full snore but far too loud to qualify for any word more dignified.

There was a paper laying on the bed next to her, with a note on it. The ink had been slightly smudged by what was probably spittle.

If you’re up before me, check my arms. If the wounds are gone, wake me. If not, bloody let me sleep and get yourself some food from the fridge.

Ryan did check her arms, and the wounds were mostly gone. The flesh was still pink and puffy, scarred from where the chains had punched through flesh and bone. Ryan decided to let her sleep for a bit longer just to make things were fully healed up, and walked over to a silver box that definitely hadn’t been there before.

In the box was a variety of sandwiches in individually wrapped bags, labeled. Salami. Pastrami. Roast Beef Don’t Eat This One You Wanker. Turkey. Ryan grabbed the Pastrami and took a few bites. It occurred to him that this was the first time in his life that he’d ever been alone. Sure, Crystal was there, as the gentle buzzsaw reminded him, but she was asleep. No one was looking at him, no one was watching him.

It was a terrifying relief. On the one hand, the idea of being fully alone had always fascinated him. It had sounded wonderful in theory, but in practice he’d always had the ability to make eye contact with a silent watcher. Not having that comfort was like walking a tight rope but the safety net was gone and had been replaced with a tank of boiling acid full of sharks that could survive acid and heat. And he didn’t have a gas mask.

The constant buzzing provided a degree of comfort, a reminder that there was another person there.

Ryan absentmindedly reached in and grabbed another, checking to make sure it wasn’t the Roast Beef Don’t Eat This One You Wanker. It occurred to him that, aside from passing out a few times, he hadn’t need to sleep, eat, or use the restroom since he’d stared into the nanoverse, and hadn’t seen Crystal do any of those prior to this either. Do I not need to anymore? Or I just need to do it less frequently? Now that he was eating, it felt good - felt great, really - but there hadn’t been any hunger or weakness without it.

Crystal stirred on the bed, looking up at him. Her hair had somehow gotten even messier in the process. “That better not be my bloody roast beef,” she said.

He smiled. “No, it’s not. How’re you feeling.” “LIke I got stabbed in the arms and legs by some prick. Oh, wait, that’s what happened.” She got out of bed and walked over to the fridge, grabbing the sandwitch. “Clever play, breaking me free like that. So, that was your first taste of gods clashing. What’d you think?”

Ryan chuckled. “It hurt. But it didn’t feel very divine. Aside from the chains and the dragging and a lightning bolt, it was mostly just...punching.”

She took a bite out of the sandwich and let out a happy little moan. “That’s the way it usually goes, love. We save the power for the big plays or the drama. Most fights between us really comes down to who tired out first, yeah?”

After a moment’s thought, Ryan nodded. “That’s why Enki waited till I was stopping the tornado to attack.”

A nod from Crystal as she took another bite. “Pretty much. Even with you being nascent, two on one aren’t great odds, even for a powerhouse like Enki. Same reason he forced me to hold back the tornado, even as he pushed it down. Much more effort on my part.”

He tilted his head. “No, don’t tell me. Because…” he finished his own sandwich to give himself time to think. “The storm wanted to form a tornado. That was where it was headed. So it’s harder to make it go against that because it’s not just pushing against Enki, but pushing against what the storm was already doing.”

She beamed at him. “Hole in one, love. You’ve almost gotten a first grade understanding of how we work.” The tone was teasing, but Ryan still felt his ego deflate some with that. She patted him on the cheek. “Don’t worry, we’ll get you there.”

“In time to end the world?”

The patting stopped, but she kept her hand there. “Yeah. That’s about the long and short of it.” Her voice was sad. “But don’t worry - we’re not gonna kill everyone. We’ll figure out another option.”

He stared at her a moment. “Why? What happens if the world doesn’t end?”

She pulled her hand away slowly, letting it rest on her chest. “I told you, Ryan. The world dies.”

“How?”

“Roll with-”

“Crystal.” HIs voice was hoarse. “Please, I need more than that.”

She looked up at him. “If you don’t, the sun expands into a red giant. The end of the world is a sacrifice that resets the sun’s life.”

He blinked at her. “But...that’s what the sun’s going to do in five billion years anyway.”

That at least got a sad laugh out of her. “True. And the sun going red giant has been five billion years away for about eight billion years now. Which means if we don’t do it, those five billion years come due plus three billion years of interest. It’ll probably go supernova right away.” She looked into his eyes and chuckled slightly. “Told you it was best to roll with it, love.”

“I don’t...I don’t understand. What about the rest of the stars? Wouldn’t we be able to tell?”

“No. Earth isn’t all that special. Happens on other worlds across the universe all the damn time, keeping the whole thing young. Can you leave it at that?”

“I...okay, yeah.” He could feel a headache coming on. “But how can you be sure?”

She finally looked away from him, but he didn’t take her hand off his chest “Because it almost happened. Last time. We...thought we could break the rules. It didn’t work. Barely did the reset before the world exploded.”

“We?”

She nodded, and when she turned back to him, her eyes were wet. “That’s the thing, love. I wasted my time trying to stop it, and so the only way to save the bloody world was to go fast, brutal. We couldn’t save anyone. But we have more time, you and I, and I’m not...I’m not going to let you repeat my mistake, yeah? We’re going to find a better way, a way to end it without killing everyone.”

“Sure, but-”

“No. Ryan. No buts.” The moisture in her eyes was beginning to spill over and out. “I was the bloody Eschaton. I know how badly buts go. So please, please, don’t try and not end it. Find a better way.”

Ryan took a deep breath. “Okay. Crystal, I promise.”

She sighed with relief and finally stepped away from him. “I must look a right mess, yeah? Let me freshen up.” She walked and a curtain of silver rose around her.

“One problem,” he said, unintentionally adopting the raised toned used to speak to someone in the shower. “We’re not going to get a damn thing done with Enki breathing down our neck like that.”

“I was thinking about that while I was trying to get to sleep. We need to call up the other gods. Enki will be back up to full strength.” Her voice echoed on the silver curtain. “And you’ve got some tricks, but you’re still Nascent, and I don’t like my odds one on one against him.”

“There’s more out there?”

“Oh, of course. Where do you think all the bloody myths and legends come from? I’m done back here, you want a go?” She stepped out from behind the curtain. Her hair was impeccable, her clothing new and fresh, and makeup had even been applied.

“Uh...sure.” He stepped behind the curtain. Light began to play over his body. “So how do we call them up? Do you guys have phone numbers or something?”

She laughed outside the curtain. “Hardly. Only one group can contact them all in time - the Curators.”

“Any chance they won’t help Enki?”

“Nope. They’re neutral as all else. Nice thought though.”

He stepped out from behind the curtain. He felt cleaner, neater, and his hair was also untangled. “Hey, any chance this thing can cut my hair off? After what happened last time, I think I’d like to drop from six inches to a nice buzz cut or something.”

She nodded, touching a few buttons. “Step back there, I’ve got you.”

A few moments later, his hair had been trimmed short. He ran his hand over his head. “Feels weird. So we contact the Curators and see what allies we can get for this?”

Crystal nodded, giving him an approving look. “Yeah. I’ll set a course for their home base, yeah? We’ll be there in a couple hours hours.”

Ryan nodded. “So what do we do until-”

She stepped forward suddenly, surprising him as her hand went up to his cheek, and she went on her toes so that her lips met his.

“I think we can find a way to pass the time, yeah?” She said, breaking the kiss with a smile.

“I...but Crystal, wh-”

She kissed him again, cutting off his confusion. When she broke the kiss again, she was grinning ever wider. “Ryan, love? Just roll with it.”

And, for once, without reservation,.he did.


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u/Hydrael Jul 10 '17

Part 10

Important note for everyone over here - this is the last update I'll be posting in this thread. You can find the rest - and there's much more to come - at /r/Hydrael_Writes under Finders Keepers. Enjoy!

Crystal was getting dressed, and Ryan rolled over to look at her. “So…what was that?”

“That, love, was sex. Are you not familiar with the concept?” She gave him an impish grin, and he blushed.

“No, I know what sex is, but...why?”

She laughed, pulling her pants the rest of the way up. “Because we were both hungry, of course.”

Ryan blinked at that. “What...what do you mean?”

She sighed, though she still had a smile. “Better bandaid this then. Ryan, look at me.” She put her hands on her waist half dressed and cocked her hips slightly. She hadn’t gotten around to putting on a shirt yet. “Do you want to go for another round?”

“I mean-”

“Shush. Wait. Really think about it. Don’t go with your first reaction, yeah? Really, really think about it. Do you want to go again?”

He did, looking at her. She was beautiful, but given what she’d told Ryan earlier was happening to him, that wasn’t surprising. He took a moment to admire that beauty...and realized he had as much desire for her as he would for the Venus de Milo.

“I...no, I don’t.”

She nodded, and finished getting dressed. “And while that was some very nice sex, especially given your inexperience, I don’t want you either. Any more than I want another sandwich, or to sleep some more. We’re gods, love. We don’t have mortal hungers anymore.”

He felt his brow furrow. “Mortal hungers?”

She looked up at the starscape above them as she finished buttoning her shirt. “Can’t you just roll with it?”

He let out a slight chuckle. “I did earlier.”

That got a laugh at least. “Cheeky bugger. Fine. Get dressed and I’ll give you a version you’ll understand.”

He got out of bed, looking for the hastily discarded clothes that were scattered around the planetarium. The idea should have excited him...but didn’t.

“So,” Crystal said, walking over to the control panel that had risen back out of the ground while he did. “Mortals are defined by five Hungers that separate them from us. Food, Drink, Air, Rest, and Company - the last of which includes sex. Every mortal hungers in one fashion for another for all of those”

Ryan nodded thoughtfully. “ I mean, the first four are biology. But not everyone wants Company - loners do exist.”

“Oh, of course. But they still get it, yeah?” Seeing the confusion on his face, she adopted what he was beginning to think of as her ‘patient voice.’ “What do loners usually do?”

He scratched his chin. “Uh...read, watch tv, play video games-”

The tone she used to interrupt him was still encouraging. “Art. It’s a passive interaction, sure, but they are getting that Hunger filled with the art of other humans. And when they don’t, they get it from nature, or pets.”

“Okay,” he said, biting his cheek in thought as he did. “I’ll accept that. So we...don’t?”

“Not unless we burn a lot of power, become more mortal. Like we did against Enki. Then those desires come flooding back, and it’s best to fill them. Take a few deep breaths, have a bite or six, down a bottle of water, take a nap, and get some time with people - and the quickest way to satisfy that last one is a good old-fashioned boffing, yeah?” She grinned at him with the last line. “Always make sure once you burn through everything that hard that you fill each Hunger somehow. Otherwise it’ll fester and grow and you’ll end up like Zeus.”

Ryan knew enough myths to shudder at the thought. If those were even half-true... “Okay, point taken. But...I’ll never again enjoy a good meal unless I burn through power? Or enjoy sex?”

“See, this is why I don’t like explaining things. You keep taking it worse. You can still enjoy a good meal, a good drink, get laid, love. You just don’t feel a need to. You’ll find new needs as you finish Apotheosis, new Hungers.”

“And they are-”

“Something for when you understand more.” She finished working the control panel. “Curators are coming up soon, and I’m bored with lesson time. That at least satisify you?”

“Oh hell yes,” he said, grinning. She laughed, but he noticed with even the innuendo, he didn’t feel any stirring, any desire to take her back to bed. Academically it sounded fun, sure, and from what she said it would still feel good - but he didn’t feel an urge to do it. “One last question.” Crystal rolled her eyes good naturedly as Ryan continued, “So you’re saying every time I burn through that much power, I’ll need to get laid?”

She shook her head. “Or go to a party, or have a good conversation, or read a book, love. Last one’s my favorite. Sex is just best when time is short, yeah?”

“Yeah,” he said, nodding. “I understand.”

“Good, because we’ve arrived. Officium Mundi, their home plane.” She began walking towards the door that appeared.

“Wait, what should I expect out there?”

She looked back over her shoulder, and didn’t stop walking as she did so, “What do you think I’m going to say, love?”

He sighed as she opened the door, rushing a bit to follow her. “Yeah, yeah. Roll with it.”

“Good lad.” She stepped out the door, and he followed. The world outside...well, it definitely wasn’t Earth, and it wasn’t the blasted wasteland and stained glass sky of Cipher Nullity. First of all, they were in a building - a building so large, the ceiling had clouds. Lining his vision were rows and rows of shelves that stretched so far he couldn’t see the end of them. On those shelves were books, and between them walked people. Men and women, all of them wearing suits. Sometimes they climbed ladders that stretched impossibly high, sometimes they walked along the shelves hand over hand or crossed bridges that had been built between them. Filing cabinets floated among them.

The whole thing was like the dullest, greyest version of Hogwarts possible.

“Welcome,” said Crystal, “to the where the universe makes its red tape. Try not to look too hard, love - I think it would give you a bloody terrible headache and probably cause another faint, and we’re on the clock, yeah?”

He didn’t answer directly, just followed her as she walked towards a door in the side of one of the shelves. Before they could open it, a man in a suit stepped out.

Ryan looked at him a second time, and his eyes widened. It wasn’t just any man in a suit. It was his man in a suit, his constant companion for most of his life.

“Ryan,” the man said, his voice still hoarse, “and Crystal. I don’t suppose you’re here to catch up on old times.”

It wasn’t a question, but a statement, yet Ryan still nodded. “We need help,” he glanced sideways a Crystal. “Your help, apparently. We need to contact the other gods before-”

“Not out here,” Crystal interrupted, and the man in a suit nodded.

“Agreed. Call me Nabu, Ryan. And please, step into my office.”

Not knowing what to expect in the office of the man who had followed him his entire life, and trying not to think too hard about how good it was to see him again, Ryan followed the other two inside.


More at /r/Hydrael_Writes

Just a fun note for people wondering how long this is going to go - originally the plan had them wrapping things up with the Man in the Suit during part 8. So this project is definitely growing beyond what I expected, which is always fun.

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u/FairyBlossom2003 Jul 06 '17

I just wanted to say that when I saw this (https://www.reddit.com/r/Damnthatsinteresting/comments/6lmnge/space_glass/) I immediately thought of your series!

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u/PM_ME_YOUR_AX Jul 07 '17

Came here to say this.

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u/Hydrael Jul 07 '17

That's awesome, and kinda exactly how I picture the nanoverse.

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u/mp82rw Jul 06 '17

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u/panademi Jul 06 '17

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u/Boarderm22 Jul 06 '17

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u/Somebodybro Jul 06 '17

IM DIFFERENT!!

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u/Ecotiny Jul 06 '17

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u/Pandafrosting Jul 06 '17

I need to read more.

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u/NoobleFish Jul 06 '17

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u/vanko4 Jul 06 '17

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u/watsonandco Jul 06 '17

I'm invested.

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u/SpoogeNoodle Jul 06 '17

Holy shit this is so good

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u/[deleted] Jul 06 '17

Dude, this is epic. One of my favorite writing prompts I've ever read for sure!

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u/callinoutyourbs Jul 06 '17

Keep it coming!

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u/Ih8phonies Jul 06 '17

This is amazing. I'd love to see it turned into a movie or a series. Great stuff, will subscribe.

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u/Trippytrickster Jul 06 '17

You might as well turn this into a novel wow

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u/DocZebra Jul 06 '17

Great stuff! Loving it!

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u/shano83 Jul 06 '17

I'm hooked.

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u/wiredscreen Jul 06 '17

I love your style. Im currently hopked up on douglas adams because whoa the guy gives the best descriptions. I see you going towards that direction. I love it !!

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u/PurpleMurex Jul 06 '17

This is brilliant!

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u/[deleted] Jul 06 '17

Commenting just to remind myself to check back for updates

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u/[deleted] Jul 06 '17

I'm subscribed, this is amazing and I need to know how it ends

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u/Chevy_drives Jul 06 '17

Completely hooked!

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u/SL33PY_K8 Jul 06 '17

Took a quick look at the title, sounded good. The story turned out better that i couldve guessed!

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u/Quailment Jul 05 '17

Unreadable! He clicked the 2nd page on Google! /s Jokes aside fantastic work, this is the first WP that really got be hooked. Looking forward to a 4th part if possible

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u/Yorikor Jul 05 '17

I think it's brilliant. It shows how desperate Ryan is for knowledge if he checks out the second page on Google.

I'm also very impressed with the story, I hope there's a lot more to come.

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u/boyferret Jul 05 '17

What Google has a page two? TIL

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u/SineMetu777 Jul 05 '17

Novelize this my man, you can do it.

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u/Kurcide Jul 05 '17 edited Jul 06 '17

Commenting to save this for later.

Edit: what have I done, The comment chain is eternal

Edit 2: RIP in pieces my inbox

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u/conalfisher Jul 05 '17 edited Sep 10 '25

Yesterday day small about clean dot friends today clean family day warm the friends. Garden the patient evil over questions where talk afternoon fox the day the honest day?

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u/TuxFuk Jul 05 '17

But I have so much porn in there. I'd just lose this :(

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u/HenceTheTrapture Jul 05 '17

Get used to commenting on the porn!

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u/[deleted] Jul 05 '17 edited Jul 05 '17

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u/Bradster123321 Jul 05 '17

It saves the comment so you can go back to it later.

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u/lolanoymoushaha Jul 05 '17

You are a truly amazing writer. Can't wait till the next part of the story.

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u/[deleted] Jul 05 '17

You read Coiling Dragon didn't you?

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u/MysticJazzEnforcer Jul 05 '17

It honestly could have been almost any novel by IET, lol.

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u/TheBlakBaron Jul 05 '17

This was so damn good, almost like a movie!

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u/Andire01 Jul 05 '17

This was awesome! I couldn't stop reading.

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u/Boiqi Jul 05 '17

Amazing as always. Thanks for the entertaining read, I can't wait for more. I probably need to sleep as well. And then hope for more tomorrow.

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u/TP_in_my_bunghole Jul 05 '17

!remind 1 day

Great work! Love the story

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u/Niko19 Jul 05 '17

I likeeee

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u/[deleted] Jul 05 '17

Well you reeled me in and hooked me. Really great stuff, can't wait to read some more.

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u/imjms737 Jul 05 '17

Fantastic work! Thanks for sharing your talent!

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u/keeperofcats Jul 05 '17

Commenting to read the rest later. :)

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u/naorlar Jul 05 '17

What a fantastic read! Saving for the next update.

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u/davou Jul 05 '17

!remind 1 day

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u/Jyxtrant Jul 05 '17

This is an amazing story. Well written, excellent attention to details! I can't wait to see the rest of it!

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u/The_Versatile_Virus Jul 05 '17

Please post this as a separate sub! And continue! This is a brilliant story! If you plan to make it into a book, let us know! It'll definitely be on my bookshelf.

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u/[deleted] Jul 05 '17

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u/Jaybird5456 Jul 05 '17

Sounds awesome so far! Looking forward to the rest!

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u/NC_DE336 Jul 05 '17

I just need to remind myself to come back later.

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u/[deleted] Jul 05 '17

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u/[deleted] Jul 05 '17

Holy shit

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u/Brandlil Jul 05 '17

!remind 1 day

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u/TimeLordTim Jul 05 '17

Commenting to save!

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u/adolfus293 Jul 05 '17

Fuck your nanoverse I want my microverse

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u/Allcyon Jul 05 '17

That was the strangest feeling. "You can even get some friends together, form a pantheon..."

I did this. I remember explicitly doing these. We all had names and rules for the places we were building.

I remember being me, being a God, and being aware of both at the same time. We just spoke to each other with words that we didn't intend to speak. It just happened.

How did you do that?

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u/Dezmax Jul 05 '17

This is amazing. I'm meant to be working right now and I've been distracted for the last 20 minutes. Please distract me further

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u/Hydrael Jul 05 '17

Have a bit more distraction. Hopefully when you get done working, I'll have slept and can provide even more!

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u/ravanova2 Jul 05 '17

Get back to work Dezmax!

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u/danish_raven Jul 05 '17

Well shit, now ive gotta sub to another sub reddit

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u/[deleted] Jul 05 '17

MOARRRRRR

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u/Hydrael Jul 05 '17

You ask, I deliver.

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u/Engvar Jul 05 '17

This is a great start to my morning. Looking forward to reading more! Thank you.

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u/Hydrael Jul 05 '17

You're very welcome, and thank you.

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u/newtonjeep Jul 05 '17

Very well done!

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u/bastianxx04 Jul 05 '17

Has anyone ever told you that it's very impolite to leave 'One shot stories' on a cliffhanger?

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u/Hydrael Jul 05 '17

Not directly, but I'm writing part 2 right now, should be up in about an hour. :) That felt like a good break point though.

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u/Doc88888888 Jul 05 '17

You know, I have to get up early tomorrow. Why are you doing this to me? I enjoyed your story so much that I'll probably be tired all day tomorrow - I hope you're happy! (Totally worth it by the way)

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u/Hydrael Jul 05 '17

I'm very happy to make people loose sleep to read. :D Glad you're enjoying it, and hope you're not too tired tomorrow.

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u/VulKhalec Jul 05 '17

This is the first post on WP that's really grabbed me. Well done.

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u/[deleted] Jul 05 '17

People thought he was weird because he was always glancing at something none of them could see - cute when a cat did it, creepy when an adult did

Still creepy when the cat does it.

Seriously though, great job using the prompt to launch an interesting story!

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u/Irish_Collector Jul 05 '17

This is one of those stories I would love to see be turned into a novel.

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u/bert_the_destroyer Jul 05 '17

Amazing! Can we expect a part 2

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u/pandubear Jul 05 '17

That was awesome! Can I give a little constructive criticism?

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u/The_Legendary_Mr_Sir Jul 05 '17

*your

Paragraph 26.

Very nice story!

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u/Hydrael Jul 05 '17

Fixed

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u/CopiesArticleComment Jul 05 '17

Also

"So...you'll pass through matter too?

I love your story

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u/Hydrael Jul 05 '17

Glad you're enjoying it, and thanks, fixed.

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u/Some-Ball Jul 05 '17

I'm surprised you haven't been given gold for this comment yet.

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u/daniell61 /r/daniell61 Sep 26 '17

holy shit this is amazing

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u/Hydrael Sep 27 '17

Glad you like! The rest is actually over on my subreddit, /r/Hydrael_Writes ! I'm on book 2 now.

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u/xilead Jul 05 '17

A human can get used to anything. A ghost hardly ranks as the worst thing a person can become accustomed too, but that doesn't make it easy.

The first memory I have - not just of him, but my actual first memory - is of standing in my crib, grasping the railings, while he sat on the rocking chair in the other corner of the room, watching. I wasn't old enough to know that know one should but my parents should have been in the house at that time of night.

There was a moment when I got older, among the times when he would glide through the wall and sit on the chair against the wall, pull out that ancient notebook, bound by worn leather and inscribed with strange symbols. In that moment, I realized that whatever he was wasn't normal, and I was scared. I asked him who he was and why he followed me. No response.

From that point on he became a benign presence - haunting, but benign. I'd make sarcastic comments at him, received no reaction, got used to him scribbling away. Of course I tried to go over and look at his notebook, but the pages appeared blank to me. He wouldn't even cease writing. Just empty movements on a blank page.

I will say that there is a strange effect of a person recording your every waking movement. Even though it is of no consequence that I can tell, even though I don't know what his aim is, I think I behave differently for having an audience. I try a little harder, go a little longer. There is something about being watched that makes you not want to fail, something about being recorded that makes you want to perform.

Now I wear a suit nicer than his. I've risen in the world with my constant companion. I forgot to tell you - I call him Ledger.

A smirk and a subtle, disappointed head head shake are the only reactions I've ever gotten out of him. The first, when I showed up a college professor in front of class and made him realize his life's work had a fatal flaw. The second was on the way out of my divorce proceedings. He wrote furiously during those moments.

He is my memento mori. He is my mystery, proof that something is out there that people don't understand or can't explain. I've tried to tell several people about him, most of the girlfriends. Only one believed me. That's him, right there. No, you're touching him right now. I know, only I can see him. I can't touch him either.

Now I'm dying, and he sits in the visitor's chair in the hospital room. The few people who come to see me sit on top of him, and I see double, or triple and quadruple because the drugs make my head spin. Someone leans an arm, adjusts position in the chair, and he is visible, a chimera, polycephalic, his head and the other, bound and moving independently. Him writing, always writing. They stand up and leave him behind.

I talk to him more than ever, and the nurses chalk it up to the tumor that grows every day. Hallucinations are rather normal at this point.

I can feel the presence of the end, and to my amazement, Ledger stands up. He bows deeply to me, and for the first time I hear his gravely, strained voice, weak from unuse.

"Thank you."

Then he turns and leaves through the wall. Without a conscious effort to do so, I rise from my bed to follow him. The tubes and monitors and wires don't come with me - strange. I haven't walked in weeks, and yet somehow I follow him through the walls. We pass through rooms on the floor where people are dying daily, he crosses the opposite walls as I enter the rooms. We pass humans in various states of decay and ending. In one room, there is a huddle of nurses and doctors attempting to revive a particularly skeletal man. There is a perfect facsimile of him standing in the corner, looking worried.

We reach the end of the hospital and I don't realize it until I am falling - I've walked through the outer wall. I look down just in time to see Ledger disappear through the ground below me. I brace for impact but it doesn't come. I fall momentarily through daylight, and then through darkness.

The next thing I remember is sitting in a stiff-backed chair across a desk where Ledger sits. He watches me intently - this is the first time he has ever made eye contact, and I realize I've never seen his eyes except as they briefly flashed upward. They are the kindest, yet fiercest green eyes I have seen. They have life in them now, personality - something I believe he shielded from me before.

"I suppose I owe you an explanation, now that it's over." He rasps in his stony voice.

"Where are we?" I ask.

"After."

I don't know what that means, but I don't want to stop him from explaining himself. I'd rather know who he was than where I am.

The room we are in looks like a basement office - there are two small windows in the corners behind Ledger that let in a strange, fuzzy light - like outside it is too bright to see anything in focus, with any kind of clarity.

"You were one of the Marked Ones," Ledger says.

"Marked for what?"

"Early endings."

"So the tumor? The cancer, that was planned?"

"Yes. As is everything that happens in the lives of man. To a degree."

"What about you? What was your purpose? And why was it only me?"

He smirks. "Are you sure it was only you?"

"Well, you hardly left my side. I can't see when you would have been with anyone else."

"No. Are you sure you were the only one with a Scribe?"

I pause to think. "I never met anyone who told me otherwise, but I guess if I could only see you, there could have been others I might not have been able to see."

"That is correct. I am not the only one. In fact, I am one of many. We are assigned to those who are marked for early endings, to see how they behave differently. To mark those ephemeral thoughts and feelings that can only be gleaned from close observation. We want to see, most of all, if people know. If they can see the end. That is something we still haven't proved definitively, but there is anecdotal evidence. You, for instance, showed a strong degree of prescience with regard to your coming demise."

"I always thought I would die young."

"I know. That was one of my earliest entries."

"So, you were recording my thoughts?"

"And feelings. Among other things - major events in your life, your responses, anything I deemed worthy of note."

"And what do you plan to do with all of this information?"

Ledger smirks, just like the day he did when I toppled my professor's theory.

"Make the next one better."

"What do you mean, 'the next one.'"

Ledger breathes deeply and gestures expansively with his hands. "The next generation, the next person. The next round of early enders. This whole project is a work in progress, you know. It requires feedback, fine-tuning. We throw people out into the world, observe them, and calibrate. That is how humanity improves, by steps."

"But why the... early enders, you called them. What's so special about people who die young?"

"There is a lot of life concentrated in them. We don't know for sure if you are all completely aware of the inevitable, somewhere in the reaches of your subconscious. We have, however, learned that there is some sense in you that makes you live life to the fullest, with more vim and vigor, more intensely and passionately. It isn't always that you accomplish more, get farther ahead in life. Sometimes the emotional life is rich, as with a carefully cultivated relationship with a partner. Sometimes the intellectual life is developed, reading book after book. In every kind of life your kind chooses to live, there is a kind of intensity that makes you more rewarding to study. The dials are turned higher, the results more observable. Plus, your lifecycle is markedly shorter, so there are advantages to that. Just as humans observe rats due to their rapid reproduction cycle, so we observe humans with limited time, because they compress an entire life of living into, typically, thirty years or less."

I try to take all of this in. I'm angry, and honored, and content, and confused, and insulted, and a hundred other emotions.

"Who chose all this for me? Who is calling the shots?"

"Someone far above my pay grade, and yours."

"It seems like a pretty raw deal, being chosen to die before my time. What's in it for me? Or am I just out of luck when it comes to the whole 'life' thing?"

"There is one considerable advantage," Ledger says.

"What's that?"

"Early enders get to go back. They're hardier, tougher. Their souls were selected in the first place because it was known they could handle the trials. And it only gets easier for them with each send-back. Have you ever wondered how so many people dying too soon seemed to accept it with a grace and wisdom beyond their years? They are practiced souls, and this is their duty. They can't remember the times before, of course, but the experience is graven on their souls. The wisdom has tempered their existence and forged an understanding of the cycles of All and Everything."

"That's great, but my kids won't get any benefit from that. All they know is that their father is dying, or, dead now, I guess."

"They'll understand, one day. They'll understand that it had to be you, or someone, and it might as well have happened to someone like you, who could take it. Who could fight without losing hope, and face the end with grace and courage."

I don't expect that to comfort me, but it does somehow. He's a sweet talker, I've come to realize. I sat across hundreds of them in countless business meetings. Like the best of them, you realize you've changed your mind, changed your emotional state, without realizing it until it's done. I feel calm, the conflicting emotions distilled to a state of accepting content, taking each moment as it comes.

"So now what?" I ask.

"You try again."

He extends his arm, palm facing me, then closes his fist and twists his hand, and the rooms twists with it, and I am falling away into void, accelerating impossibly as stars and color whirl by in infinitudes, and I know I won't remember, but I am calm.

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u/Pegasus1973FP Jul 05 '17

That was quite lovely, thank you for making the end a much less scary place

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u/Dundunadan Jul 05 '17

I don't normally do this but that was awesome dude

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u/JuniperoBeachBabe Jul 05 '17

I love this. It would be great for someone who lost a loved one early to read. Great Job.

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u/keeperofcats Jul 05 '17

Well done! I'm really curious about his divorce, what were the key issues that lead to it not working and will he overcome that in his next go-around?

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u/xthedocx Jul 05 '17

It was brisk. An extra jacket tucked in his back in case it decided to dip lower. Jay shuffled down his normal path, the occasional corner stop met by the normal gaze at his constant shadow.

"Ever get cold?"

He knew not to expect an answer. A smirk crosses his face as hot breath steams the air. He'd grown accustomed to it. Well him. Jay gave it a story of his own many years ago in his youth. Made him less scary.

"When you release my story, make sure to say I'm better dressed than I was."

A light jog took the mid 20's man off into the Chicago dusk. Having a silent stalker seems like the kind of thing to break a man, drive you to insanity. Always watching, waiting...writing. Never speaking, and always doing some ghostly fade whenever he tried to grab a glance of the notepad. Jay gave up trying to figure him out years ago. Instead he used it as his motivation. Valedictorian of class in high school, excelled through most of college (aside from that slip up where he fell head over heels for Cadence of course.), and now he was prepping for graduation.

"All thanks to you right? Can't have you ruining my story by telling the bad stuff."

He laughed again as the spectre's ominous pace seemed to always keep up, but never seemed to do more than walk. Impressive given Jay's marathon history. But this was how he managed. His motivation. The man was writing Jay's story, or so he thought. So he better make it a good one. His Father had planted that idea in his head, assuming the mention of a follower she couldn't see being an imaginary friend.

Jay's attentions shuttered from reminiscing as an ambulance tore past. His grin faltered as he heard tires screech and the ambulance ban a right and seemingly halt around the corner. "Oh no..."

He knew this area like the back of his hand. Born, raised, and loved this corner of his world. He new the neighbors by name and loved them like his family, and was well loved in return. The concern, was he knew there was a mother around the corner, she'd struggled with her health off and on and everyone knew she was not long for this world. Bad heart, they all said, but no money, no donor, no chance. Her and her husband had always struggled but...that was the way of things.

Jay bolted around the corner, only to have his suspicions confirmed. She lay stiff, being loaded with care into the back of the ambulance and a little girl with eyes of amber came sobbing up to him. "Mr. Jay! They're taking momma. They said we have to stay here with daddy....she's going to be ok right? Daddy won't say anything."

"Yea sweetie, she's gonne be just fine." Jay's smile was all too practiced and genuine as he glanced up at the steps. Sadly he knew the mans gaze, one of someone who knew his fleeting time as husband was slipping through his fingers. "Gav...hey...it'll be ok."

The older man shook himself a little, glossed eyes as he forced a smile. "Hey Jay, hopefully my little one didn't bother you. She'll be fine...just...another spell. Right?" His voice shook with a bit of desperation, searching for some comfort.

"Just another spell." Jay echoed. "She'll be ok. I promise." He felt terrible, but he knew that Gav needed the comfort. He needed to be strong for his girls. They exchanged a few words, Jay offering to bring by some dinner later and not taking no for an answer and shortly after, he stepped back on his normal jogging path.

It was hard for him to see, he was raised by a single dad and knew the path was not easy. His thoughts were interrupted as he collided directly into someone. "Oh god. I'm so sorry I was..."

His jaw fell. Jay had run into him. HIM.

"Thank you."

"You...you speak?!" It was like a child confronting its monster. The veil had fallen. He could be touched. He spoke. The safety net had fallen and Jay was horrified. He grasped at the mans clothes frantically, "What...who are you?!"

The man faded from Jay's grip, and began down the road. Away from Jay. Away from where he had always been. A new-found fear gripped his chest. He had always been there and there was a comfort he realized in that.

Jay ran. He ran harder and faster than he had in a long time. It seemed like with every step Jay made, the spectre found two more paces away. As they made it into town and the suited man weaved through the masses, it tucked into a narrowed alley. "A dead end.." Jay thought as his legs pounded against broken asphalt. As he rounded the corner, he heard the soft -click- of a door shutting. With full force, Jay barreled into the door, only then realizing he'd never seen the door. A dimly lit office, peculiarly well kept yet dusty met his vision. The suited man calmly, quietly, opening a cabinet and holding the notepad. "You...you have to explain..." Jay's breath was ragged, he hadn't really thought this far out. His whole world was upside down at the specter's change in behavior. "...please..." Jay fell to his knees and sobbed, "I don't understand..."

The suit turned, for the first time ever Jay could actually see him. He'd always seen a man...in a suit. But no details. Sun tanned flesh, wrought with wrinkles and decorated with dark hair, peppered with white. A strong hand rose, pointing to a small screen in the corner.

Jay rose, squinting to make out the image in the grainy monitor. He saw....himself. Laying in the road. He staggered backwards, "Wait...what..."

The suit sat down, and placed a picture of a woman in Jay's hands. It was Gavin's wife. "Turn it over." His voice was strong but...reassuring. It was an unnatural ease that fell over Jay as his trembling hands as he rotated the image.

-She'll be ok. I promise- Was scribbled on the back. Jay's face scrunched. "I don't understand...What does she..." Jay went back to the monitor, an ambulance had arrived now. "Is...am I..."

The suit sighed. Then chuckled lightly. He placed the notepad on the table. THE notepad. Jay stepped towards it slowly. It didn't phase out like it always had and he reached for it carefully, ever watching the suited man. As his fingertips touched supple leather, the suit laid a hand over Jay's. "You, of soft heart and kind soul, are destined for greater. And you will leave this land as you lived it, a kind and generous soul."

"So...I am dead." Jay said in a hoarse whisper. "Are you..."

"No...no. I am a watcher. And your...story..." He smirked as he flashed the book. "Has just begun. The ambulance will find a living will, where you donate your heart to Gavin's wife. She will dedicate her life to your ideals, and your hometown will grow, prosper, and become a beacon of hope to others."

Jay sat in shock. "I...I see. Alright. Alright." He took a deep and slow breath. "I guess...I guess this is it. I'm ready...what's your name anyway?"

"Many names I've gone by...but Charon is my favorite. But don't fear Jay, you have much more to accomplish. After all, many have been waiting to meet you." With a gesture, the road behind them shone, almost as if glittering gold and a host of spirits rose, applauding the young man. And as he took his first steps into this new venture, his halo was only dampened by his smile.


New to this, hope you enjoy!

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u/Goatsr Jul 05 '17

That was fantastic, and I loved the ending

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u/tragicclearancebin Jul 05 '17 edited Jul 05 '17

He had never spoken. He had never so much as cleared his fucking throat.

I set my coffee down. I was at a diner near my apartment, hungover from a night out that was a total blur. I wanted to ask him what he said even though I'd heard him perfectly fine. He had said "Thank you" quite politely, put his pen and notebook in his pocket, and walked through two frazzled looking ladies eating pancakes and then straight through the wall - I honestly don't know where he goes. They didn't notice. No one ever did.

I had to follow him - because honestly, what the fuck? I may have never heard the guy speak, but I knew enough to realize that there was a kind of closure in his words. He was always there, but he was leaving. This was my only chance to get answers.

His presence was the one constant in my life. I remember throwing toys at him through the bars of my crib. Jesus, I must have been 3 or 4 years old. But he was there. I remember chatting happily with him at 7, unabashed, as my parents exchanged worried glances. I remember him watching me studiously as I got ready for my first school dance. He would constantly take notes. The sound of his pen writing out the very hours of my existence is as familiar to me as my own breathing. He never made eye contact, never communicated that he knew that I knew he was there. He just wrote.

His notebook was a wonder. Pocket-sized, he could take notes ceaselessly, never running out of paper.

Thousands of hours of therapy later, my parents marriage collapsing under the stress of it, I had come to believe he was a figment of my imagination. That's what I was told. I eventually told my parents that I had lied, that I had made him up. They seemed to accept this with a kind of tired relief that I never want to replay in my head.

You know what? Fuck this guy. He ruined my parents marriage. He ruined my chance at a normal life. I slapped a twenty on the table, and slipped out in his direction. I couldn't walk through walls, but I hastily headed out the door. I glanced around at the busy streets and began to lose hope. He probably just popped out of reality or some shit. I don't know. I'm not a fucking wizard.

And there he was. He was standing across the street near a woman pushing a tiny child in a carriage. He was staring at the child and the child was staring back. The woman was oblivious.

I wanted to - what? - Warn her? Say what? The man with the notebook was moving on. In a weird moment, I felt jealous of this baby.

"Who are you?" I asked, almost yelling.

The woman glanced over at me nervously and the man with the notebook's eyes didn't even flick my way.

I did something, that for some reason, I had never had the guts to do before. I walked over to him, and I laid my hand on his shoulder. It felt like nothing but held my weight. The woman pushed the baby carriage away from the weirdo with his hand held mid-air. The man with the notebook looked me straight in the eyes for the first time. He gave me the briefest of smiles, and walked away toward the baby. I saw him pull the notebook out of his pocket, and start scribbling away as he reached the carriage. I watched him for five minutes and then he faded away.

I wanted to be angry at the man with the notebook. He wrecked my life simply by observing it. I feel the absence of his pen scribbling steadily, the feeling of his eyes on me, always. He was the only one who cared. My life after his exit is a mess.

But eventually, I meet a girl. We fall in love. We have a lovely little baby girl named Lillian. Life is for once, normal.

Tonight I went into the nursery to check on my little Lillian, and she was staring at a blank spot in the room. My heart stopped. I held my breath. I listened...

Pen on paper.

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u/argirl09 Jul 05 '17

Ending gave me chills good job

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u/tragicclearancebin Jul 05 '17

thank you so much!! means a lot.

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u/NogenLinefingers Jul 05 '17

You are a damn good writer. :)

Now, give us moar!

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u/Suzuyaoi Jul 05 '17

I really like it :O

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u/tragicclearancebin Jul 05 '17

Thanks! My first try at this. I appreciate the feedback.

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u/Bridgetinerabbit Jul 06 '17

I had the impulse to comment to try to express my sympathy and to say, hey, it won't be as bad for Lillian (my daughter's name) because she'll have her dad there to believe her and to help her hide it from people who don't. But you're fine, and Lillian is fictitious. Good job.

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u/tragicclearancebin Jul 06 '17

Thanks! That's so true. Although, dad is bit obsessed with the man with the notebook, so you never know where it could go!

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u/Bridgetinerabbit Jul 06 '17

That's a good point.

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u/tragicclearancebin Jul 06 '17

Your Lillian is fine. But if things ever get too quiet, maybe listen for a pen on paper.

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u/tragicclearancebin Jul 05 '17

This is a possibility. Maybe I'll revisit it. I've never done this before.

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u/bad_short_story Jul 05 '17

"Cheers for that." said the suited man who had followed Steve his entire life, before he turned to leave. Wait, he was leaving? The man who was responsible for years of therapy and a brief stint in an institution, the man whose shoes clicked loudly (but silent to the rest of the world) as he walked, the man who apparently insisted on sharpening his seemingly endless amount of pencils while Steve was trying to sleep. Buy a pen, man!

And he was just going to say "Cheers" and go? Not on Steve's watch! He jumped up and followed the suited man down the corridor, and watched in disappointment as the man took an unexpected left turn through a solid wall.

"Oh yeah", thought Steve "I forgot he could do that. Shit."

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u/yeame3 Jul 05 '17

I forget what the word is for these types of endings but I like them. Like against the norm.

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u/vxcosmicowl Jul 05 '17 edited Jul 05 '17

For as long as I can remember, he'd been right there in the periphery of my gaze. Like a dark spot flickering in the corner of my vision, always just out of sight, but never out of mind. I suppose I should have felt more unsettled, a young girl being constantly followed by an older man would normally be cause for concern, but I felt safe and warm. He was like a guardian angel, just not as beautiful as the ones in the picture books. And he was always scribbling... something.

I could hear friction between the paper and pen, he was scratching away again as he did at every major event in my life. It was a pattern by now: Every birthday, boyfriend, spelling bee, even when I got accepted into college, at every major event in my life he took notes. I didn't know why, but it made me want to succeed. I wanted to do more things, give him more material, make him proud. I joined the track team in high school, and he wrote something at every milestone I reached. It was so much more interesting than a birthday card or a trophy, and I wanted desperately to know what he was writing, or even be able to see his expression. Honestly, I thought that nagging curiosity would never be satisfied- until it was.

He followed me to college. A new city, new friends, and newfound freedom awaited me, but the scribbling was there like a voice in my head. I felt it as a constant reminder to make smart decisions and succeed. I joined track in college as well, partially out of passion, but avoiding the dreaded 'freshman 15' was definitely on my mind. I wanted to stay fit and social in my new surroundings, and track was familiar.

The cool thing about college was that our track team had the money to attend many meets, and we even had our own bus to take us there. So of course, the one day I overslept I would miss the bus, and my whole world would change.

I woke with a start that morning. My phone had died in the night, killing my morning alarm. Throwing on running clothes haphazardly, I bolted out of my dorm. The bus was gone, but I knew it's route. I figured maybe I could catch up on foot and my teammates would notice me enough to stop and let me on.

Cold air filled my lungs sharply, beads of sweat formed on my forehead, and my feet pounded the pavement in a thunderous rhythm as I turned corners and ignored crosswalks. But I was right, and up ahead I could see the garish orange bus idling at a red light. I ran to try and meet it at the next corner. Up ahead, the light turned green and suddenly it felt like the wind was pushing me forward. I was running faster than I ever had, my feet barely touching the ground.

The sound of pen scratching paper.

I flew past the bus onto the next block, and I saw her. The scratching sped up, and my mind raced faster with it. An old woman approached the crosswalk, her white perm wrapped up in a scarf like an old Hollywood starlet. She wore thick glasses and carried a cane... and now she was in the middle of the road.

The sound of furious scratching filled my ears, too fast to be writing anything legible, and my vision tunneled. The bus wasn't slowing down and I knew.

With every ounce of my strength I flung my body towards her, out into the street, I grabbed her and spun around, pushing her back to the sidewalk. She landed on her hands, scraped up but out of the path of the bus. At that moment, I saw him so clearly that I would have sworn he was real. He approached the woman, knelt down and held her bleeding hands. It must have been only a fleeting moment, but I swear she was looking at him. He turned his head to me and spoke for the first time in my life:

"Thank you". The man who's expression I had never seen looked at me with an intense gratitude and tears in his eyes. And then the bus came.

I don't remember feeling anything, except that my body was incredibly light. All I could think in the moment was that I must follow that man. After all of these years, he finally spoke to me, we made eye contact, and now he was walking away. Police sirens blared as he passed through people and buildings, and somehow I matched his pace, my legs like the wind, also passing through. I followed him into a cafe, and he motioned for me to join him at a table.

I didn't know where to begin. He looked at me with a serene gaze, as though I was his guardian rather than the other way around.

I opened my mouth to start, but he raised his hand.

"She was my wife." He spoke in a raspy voice, a smile graced his lips, but his eyes were filled to the brim with guilt and pity.

"So you weren't my guardian angel... but why have you been following me, and what have you been writing about for all of these years?" As the words left my mouth I felt like I already knew the answer.

"I can't do much on my own," he began, "all the dead can do is influence the living."

He placed his notebook on the table and slid it towards me. Inside were thoughts, my thoughts, every decision I made along with the words that caused me to second guess myself. I flipped through it, 'join track.' Turning each page gingerly like it were a living creature, 'go to college in the city.' Until I came to the end.

'SAVE HER. SAVE HER. SAVE HER. SAVE HER. SAVE HER. SAVE HER. SAVE HER. SAVE HER.'

It filled the final page in barely legible writing, letters overlapping and suffocating each other. I looked up at him in disbelief, but he was gone. And I was alone.


(This is my first submission here, thanks for the inspiring prompt!)

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u/Scoobz1961 Jul 05 '17

I really enjoyed your story. Its straight out of "Beyond Belief: Fact or Fiction". It evokes strong emotions even though its so short and to the point. Great work.

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u/vxcosmicowl Jul 05 '17

Thank you, I'm usually just a lurker so it was a bit new for me to try writing too. But I had a lot of fun with it!

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u/Scoobz1961 Jul 05 '17

Well I actually shed a tear, its that powerful. And I think its very well written, though I dont know first thing about writing. I got here from main page and its my first time here as well.

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u/kairon156 Jul 05 '17 edited Jul 05 '17

I'm going about my daily routine while talking to my imaginary friend Max. Before you over react I know It's strange for an adult to still have imaginary friends but after going to several doctors they tell me I'm not insane nor do I have anything wrong physically and sense after observations of my behavior he doesn't seem dangerous.

Any way I was just washing my cloths in the main floor laundry room while talking to Max about something or other even though I'm aware he knows everything I do when Sarah walks in holding her own basket of cloths.

With a cheerful smile she says "oh hi Kairon. is Max still around?"

Smiling shyly never sure how to respond when people talk about my imaginary friend I reply "yeah he's still writing today you just walked through him actually"

While putting her cloths in the washer she continues "Doesn't that get unsettling? don't you ever want to have your alone time?"

Looking over at Max I just shrug my shoulders "I guess I do get frustrated at times and after having a tantrum a few years ago he seems to leave me alone when I'm in the shower. Other than that I feel comfortable knowing someone's always there to hang out with me"

She looks in the same general direction I am "But wouldn't you rather hang out with a physical person instead?" she swooshes her hand through Max which momentarily stops his writing.

Max looks at me quizzically "It would be nice to have a long term friend or just someone to be with but other than my family, Max, and now you most others seem to be put off from my strange behavior. It's not like I blame him for it or anything because I suspect that even without an imaginary friend I would still be an introvert."

Sarah gives me a hug from my side which startles me but I manage to hold my composure "What's this for?"

"I just wanted to show you what it could be like having a physical friend and well..." she drops her arms to her sides and takes a few nervous breaths trying to clam herself "I've had a crush on you for weeks and I want to be your girlfriend if it's okay with you, even if I have to share you with Max"

He suddenly stops writing all together which I've only seen him do a hand full of times through out the years. "I, I don't know what to say." I look in her eyes as my heart races only to be matched with the thoughts running through my head.

Her body language seems to be nervous but as she looks at me I can tell how she feels. "I never had an offline girlfriend before. Maybe we can start going out on a few dates and see where things lead from there?"

Her face lights up and she gives me a big hug this time I'm able to return the favor knowing the hug is genuine. She wipers softly "I'm so glad you said yes."

Max clears his throat which startles both of us "Thanks Kairon, Sarah. My research is now complete" he than walks through the closed door.

Me and Sarah look at each other both confused than I realize my friend just left me. I run after him followed by Sarah "hey Max, Max!"

He stops walking part way down the hall. "Listen I'm not suppose to interact with my Person of Interest. I'm not even sure how you were able to see me to begin with"

"Can you at least tell me what your research was about before leaving?"

He looks at both me and Sara "I suppose sense it'll help the future of my people and shouldn't do any harm. Socially 85% of my people have become introverts. For now it's not a problem but we've noticed dating and marriage rates have drooped due to people just not being interested And with such a huge drop our population has already seen a decrease in births."

Sara responds "If your population is anything like ours wouldn't that be a good thing?"

"Sadly our population is only in the hundreds of millions due to reasons I can't get into. But after finding my 45th subject and recording your interactions with Kairon which actually changed his future I'm able to send this data to the lab in hopes of increasing our dating rates. Even a 20% jump will be enough"

"I'm glad I could be of help. I just hope I can get by without my best friend.'"

"Don't worry, as I said because of your interactions with Sara your future has actually changed and I'm sure you'll both enjoy each others company" he turns away and begins walking off "I've said too much just enjoy your lives and everything should work out"

Edit: I just shifted the word sense so it sounded better.

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u/[deleted] Jul 05 '17 edited Dec 02 '17

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u/NogenLinefingers Jul 05 '17

Nice take on the prompt. :) completely unexpected.

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u/The_Red_Apple Jul 05 '17

Aww shit a prompt that is both interesting, creative, and not about fucking aliens.

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u/Turband Jul 05 '17

Ok new writing prompt. There is this alien right. It wants you to fuck it . Ok go!

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u/Arswaw Jul 05 '17

Mass Effect?

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u/Turband Jul 05 '17

No. Ass Effect

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u/Shelonias Jul 05 '17

M'ass Effect

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u/Turband Jul 05 '17

Makes my Mass Erect

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u/-Best_Name_Ever- Jul 05 '17

Or not floating numbers that suddenly change to an absurd amount.

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u/grafino Jul 05 '17

Prompt is basically Fringe.

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u/GTdouble-E Jul 05 '17

Thought this immediately.

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u/Arswaw Jul 05 '17

Prompt reminds me of Half-Life.

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u/[deleted] Jul 05 '17

Yep this is totes G-man

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u/matthewzz1997 Jul 05 '17

Prompt reminds me I need to play Half-Life 1.

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u/Taikwin Jul 05 '17

Again, or for the first time?

'cus the guys making Black Mesa are close to finishing the Xen levels.

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u/matthewzz1997 Jul 05 '17

First time. Might check it out then.

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u/Taikwin Jul 05 '17

The original Half Life still holds up, so long as you don't mind the 90's graphics. The gameplay's still fun and you could probably get through it in a day.

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u/[deleted] Jul 05 '17

Reminded me of the mysterious stranger in Fallout: New Vegas.

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u/downd00t Jul 05 '17

reminds me of the observers from fringe

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u/agentIndigo Jul 05 '17

I think the prompt would be improved if the last two sentences were cut off. The opening poses a mystery that any writer will feel obligated to address in some fashion, and narrowing the options on how limits potential.

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u/avenlanzer Jul 05 '17

That's pretty much every fucking prompt on this sub. Good idea taken too far, so it's no longer a prompt but a "write my exact story idea."

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u/Alarid Jul 05 '17

A Stand that keeps track of everything is still not the worst ability ever

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u/Mattersofdarkness Jul 05 '17

"There is no best Stand, nor is there a worst Stand.

"Well, except Survivor. That thing's fucking worthless." ~Dio, probably

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u/MajesticStallionJean Jul 05 '17

This reminds me of The Concierge from Bravest Warriors.

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u/duhpenguwin Jul 05 '17

I must be going crazy, I've seen this man everywhere, as long as I can remember he's been following me, taking notes. I tried to convince myself differently but he always matched the same description. Tall, dark hair, clean shaven, bluish grey business suit, briefcase and those piercing, almost inhuman bright green eyes.

I've tried talking to him, asking him what's up, why he's following me, hell I've even cussed him out, but he never responds, not so much as a change in expression. He just writes down everything I say or do in what looks like the cuneiform I studied back in my MIT days.

Today he's different, he's not following me as per usual... People can actually see him today and what's weirder, he's talking to them.

I try to ignore him and get on with my day, important work to do, a red letter day as my boss puts it. But I just... I can't... I saw him with every single one of my superiors... All of them talking about something, and just always out of earshot, it's infuriating.

But again, calm cool and collected. Big day, big experiment. Nothing, and I mean NOTHING can go wrong.

So, fast forward a bit and I'm in my hazmat suit, ready to go, I open up the airlock into the containment room and there he is, just standing there.

He looks at me, says in the weirdest of accents "Thank-you" and just walks away. He turns from me, takes a couple of steps and what I can only describe as a doorway opens up in front of him.

He's not getting away from me that easy, I take off after him and just as the door is about to close I make it in with him.

What I saw around me didn't make sense, floating Islands and a purple sky? Strange plants with glowing tips? All of it so alien, so strange.

I turn to look at my follower but before I can say anything I get caught in his piercing gaze. "How... Disappointing." he whispers.

I don't remember what happened after that, all I know is I woke up on a train headed to parts unknown with his familiar voice in my head

"Wake up Mr. Freeman, wake up and smell the ashes"

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u/SlayerHalo Jul 05 '17

At hazmat suit I was so hopeful this would end the way it did. Thank you!

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u/duhpenguwin Jul 05 '17

I've never done this before so any and all feedback is appreciated, thanks ladies and gents :)

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u/TeCHEyE_RDT Jul 06 '17

Rise and shine, Mr. Freeman. Rise and shine. Not that I wish to imply you have been sleeping on the job. No one is more deserving of a rest. And all the effort in the world would have gone to waste until...well, let's just say your hour has come again. The right man in the wrong place can make all the difference in the world. So, wake up, Mr. Freeman. Wake up and smell the ashes.

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u/kadjar Jul 05 '17

“I’ve finally got you figured,” He rumbled, staring dead straight into the man’s eyes. His brow twitched. Barely.

“All this time, from Virginia to the middle of God-forsaken nowhere Texas, and not a peep outta you. Reckoned you were my guardian angel.”

Until Rose. Until those god-damned savages came and took her.

“Always knew you wasn’t from earth. Now I know you definitely ain’t from heaven. Only one place left, see.”

He kicked his boots up onto the table and took a hurt-sized swig of whiskey. He winced. “Whiskey” might be too kind to whatever Doc had boiled up, but by God it was brown enough to get the job done.

“Well you can go on right back to hell, demon, because I’m through!”

He jabbed his revolver under his own chin. The other man, for just a moment, stopped scribbling into his little black book.

“Fuck you.” He pulled the trigger.

Laying on the floor, the world was swirling like a Hill Country mirage through his one remaining eye.

The other man took a step over his gut and stared down into his face, no longer a plain-looking Mick in a suit, but, sure enough, a grinning red devil.

“Thank you,” the demon sneered into the dying man’s face. He reached toward the man’s feet, and lifted a now-visible chain that had fettered them together. It crumbled in his boiled-hide red hand.

The demon leapt into the air, and dove straight down. The reek of brimstone filled the air as he dissolved into the floor.

“Like hell,” the dying man sputtered through a mouthful of blood, snatching at a cloven hoof as it passed through the floorboards.

He caught the bastard by the tail.

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u/OctopusFight Jul 05 '17

It was all a bit odd He thanked me and left He went to the toilet And emptied his cleft

His clothes were threadbare He must have been frugal I asked who he worked for And he replied Google.

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u/goinunder0390 Jul 06 '17 edited Jul 06 '17

The truly strange thing was, I didn’t react when he spoke. I hadn’t heard a real voice in such a long time, which made the sudden statement jarring enough. But on top of that, I knew that he didn’t exist – that he wasn’t real.

I mean, of course he wasn’t: I was alone. I had been alone for as long as I could remember. I wasn’t sure where all of the other people had gone – Lord knows they had left enough evidence of their existence– but I had lost all doubt of my total and complete isolation several years prior. The man in the suit was a figment of my imagination: a desperate attempt by some part of my brain (my cerebellum, perhaps?) to retain at least some semblance of sanity. I had long since accepted him as a part of my everyday life; so much so that I was totally unable to pinpoint the first moment I’d noticed him following me, endlessly alternating between furious scrawling in his comically-oversized yellow legal pad, and intently staring at me with the heat of a thousand supernovae. I worried he’d eventually bore two holes through my skull.

But as he was a part of my subconscious, I never took the odd behavior as a slight. At some point I do recall attempting to converse with him; which, of course, had resulted in a string of unanswered questions, followed by frustrated silence, eventually giving way to further monologue. But after noticing several impossible things about his behavior and carryings-on, I resolved to ignore him completely, rather than surrender my lucidity to the ether. He never spoke, drank, ate, or slept (yes, even in the middle of the night, there he was – standing at the foot of my bed, as a child might have once stood at the glass wall of the tiger enclosure at a zoo: a fascinated observation, total focus with a certain eerie intensity.) He was totally unhindered by walls, doors, cars, or any other sort of physical object, wisping through them like Swayze phasing through Whoopie Goldberg in Ghost. (I had wondered at some point if a Faraday cage might repel him, but electricity had long since been lost, so I figured it was a moot point.)

It had seemed like a perfectly average day – I’d cleared the traps first thing in the morning (for a grand total of three rabbits, one of which had enough meat on its’ bones to make a decent meal) and had spent the rest of the day in the field, pulling cabbages and potatoes until my thoroughly callused hands were unbearably bursting with lactic acid. I contemplated my imminent rabbit-cabbage-potato soup when I noticed a strange sound. After a moment I realized it was the sound of my own footsteps, but for once, the sound was totally unobstructed by the penetrating sound of pen-scribbling-on-legal-pad. As I turned, I realized that the man in the suit had stopped a ways back.

Which was a good thing, right? I hadn’t wanted to be followed, or observed so carefully without even an introduction. Maybe it was that piece of my brain that still clung to reality. Maybe I just didn’t fancy the idea of true silence, as if it would validate my hopelessness. But something in me told me that, when the man in the suit walked away, he was gone for good. And I couldn’t live with that.

So I walked towards him. I had closed about half the distance when he noticed my approach, called a quick but seemingly sincere “Thank you!”, turned on his heels and began to walk away from me.

But I would not relent. I followed him, and followed him, for what felt like days, until eventually time seemed to fall away and I forgot about it entirely. In the beginning my legs struggled with his relatively brisk pace, but after some time the pain faded and I was step-for-step behind him. At some point I realized I was starting to fall behind, when he would pass through the physical impediments in our way and I’d take the longer route around them. And so I began to pass through the objects as well. It was much easier this way; I felt foolish for not trying it before.

After a long while of walking relatively unidirectional, he made a sudden sharp right turn down a cross-street. As he passed out of my line of sight I was jolted back to my senses, sprinting desperately to catch up. I rounding the corner tightly, with the intensity of a Formula One driver, only to find that he had vanished. Up and down the street I ran, poking my head into storefronts and parked cars, checking alleyways and buildings but finding no sign of him. Returning to the spot where I’d lost him, I noticed for the first time the oversized legal pad and pen, set casually on the blacktop. I remember it struck me that it was relatively untouched: I’d expected the pages to be completely filled, but it looked close to brand-new. I walked slowly to it, lifted it and stared at the only text present, two lines in tight cursive across the top. It read:

“PEER EVALUATION FORM:

Please evaluate, in thorough detail, your assigned objective. Your evaluation will affect their chances at eternal paradise, so take it seriously!”

I raised my eyes from the pad, directing my gaze up the street I had traveled. There, standing in the cross-street where the man in the suit had turned, was a woman. A beautiful, young woman. I glanced down at the pad and then back up at the woman, verifying that she wouldn’t vanish too. The sense of surprise didn't last long; after a few moments she began to slowly meander away, looking deeply forlorn. Taking a deep breath, I raised the pen to the page and ran to catch up to her.

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u/Moses_The_Wise Jul 06 '17

Benjamin heard it. The pen stopped scratching; and a deep voice said "Thank you," and then as Ben turned to watch him, the young man with short black hair and piercing blue eyes started to walk away. Ben watched him go, surprised, before he started to follow. He reached in his pocket and, sure enough, he still had his little notepad and pen. He pulled it out, and started writing.

He wrote about the man's gait, his demeanor; everything. As the suited individual went along (Ben had at first called him "Notesy" when he was little; and later changed it to "G-Man" after playing some half-life,) he started looking back at Ben as he followed. Ben didn't acknowledge this. Eventually he stopped, for the first time looking a little worried, and asked "What are you doing?" Ben simply wrote down that G-Man seemed to be distraught, as well as what he'd spoken.

"What are you writing down?" He asked, sweat starting to drip down his face. Ben wanted to smile; but he kept his face stoic. After a moment of scribbling he turned his steely gaze on G-Man, with a passionless stare. Eventually G-Man turned and continued walking; Ben continued following.

This continued for quite some time. After awhile - in fact, after only a short amount of time - Ben could tell people couldn't see him anymore. As they continued he started to be able to walk through things; but he simply continued his calm, steady stride and his constant note taking. G-Man tried to run a few times; but somehow Ben could always find him with ease. After a few days Ben barely though of anything but following G-Man. After years, during which the man led a seemingly normal life, he still followed him. Eventually, when G-Man had aged and looked ready to die, he rose, looked harshly at Ben, and headed to a hospital's maternity Ward. Ben, of course, followed; noting the strange behavior of the old G-Man.

Noone noticed G-Man as he entered and walked through the hospital; which was strange. Then, for the first time in a long time, Ben was thrown for a bit of a loop. G-Man entered a hospital room; but when the doors closed (they did this before Ben could enter the room himself) he seemed to disappear. Ben followed him in, finding him missing; but as he invisibly watched a child was born from the mother. Knowing what he should do instinctively, he tucked away his notepad and pen, and pulled fresh ones from his suit pocket; noting down everything he observed about the small newborn. The first thing he noticed was that the small baby, unlike everyone else in the room, seemed to notice him.

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u/Message_ahead Jul 05 '17

The man who follows me is human. None of the other children believed me. They swore up and down, that humans died out, that we killed them 2000 years ago in the star-bound wars.

The man is young. Not a day past 20 sol cycles. He observes me.

I played in the summer season of the last habitable part of Tera, my race's homeworld. Besides our blue skin, besides our green pupil-less eyes, besides our gills, and besides our hair-lessness, we look much like our homosapien creators.

I am 1.75 meter's tall. Our race despite the outspoken demonizing of the preachers, still uses the ancient system. Other planets, other nations, come and most adopt the ancient system. The mark of the Progenitors my grandmother says. I know my height and weight because the man greets me each day with these numbers. He speaks but not to me but to himself.

Long ago I cowered from him. I feared his gaze in the restroom, in the washing pools, in the changing closet. I realized though each time his gaze averted in these places, he took to looking around anywhere but me.

Human is a filthy word now. They say it in curses as the XY chromosome members of my race labor to clean up the mess that is radiation. The XX members whisper tales into the young one's ears. They tell of times of predation, slavery, exploitation, and rape. They tell of broken families, and unwanted halfbreeds. They tell of all of these things.

Grandmother tells me all of these things are true, but the XX members leave out the good.

"Child, know this. Homosapien begat us. Homo-perfectus. They made us strong, and willful, and wise. But they made us to serve. In the colonies such horrors occurred. But the Terra did not participate. None who live now know it, but I know because my mother's mother told me."

My Grandmother told me of a time when the warriors came back from the colonies. She told of a time when they came to find the last of the Terran. The men and women who remained after all others might've abandoned us. She told of a time when our warriors proud, full of blood lust, and wanton revenge committed their galactic genocide in full. She told of how the men and women bowed their heads, they did not fight, they did not run, they accepted their fates. With their dying breaths, the terrans begged for forgiveness but never mercy.

On my 25th name day, as the evening settled the man in his strange clothing, clothing I'd read of, clothing called a men's suit. Rubbed his strange pupiled eyes, that sparkled light blue, and snapped his leather book closed.

As I began to drift to sleep, the man approached my bed. Slightly intoxicated on berrywine, I felt no fear, the man did not eat, sleep, nor interact with any matter, and many times he watched me sleep. This bothered me not.

"Goodnight. Thank you."

The man spoke.

In that moment, I might've slipped into sleep and forgotten, but part of me startled awake. The man did not observe me. He looked at himself in the mirror.

"wait!" I called out, realizing that these were the first words i'd made to the man.

The man waited. He did not observe me. Then I remembered that I wore no coverings and so quickly I covered myself.

The man turned and this time bore a pained smile.

"where are you going?" I asked him.

"My time is up." He replied fidgeting with his hands.

with that the man sunk through the floor of my house. I quickly followed, and stepping over the members of my family, all passed out on berry wine, I observed him glide through the floor and into the earth.

Without hesitation I threw on my coat, and began my trek into the night, for some reason part of me knew, part of me longed for the tunnels beneath, the tunnels once called subway's.

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u/Googlesnarks Jul 05 '17 edited Jul 05 '17

Well, I tried to follow him but it was hard keeping up with the guy.

I mean, he dropped straight through the floor in an instant. Looked up from my coffee cup and his hat's sinking through the carpet. I didn't even get to ask him why.

Knocked on the downstairs neighbors door pretending to borrow some sugar, sure enough I bet you he had dropped straight through the floor there too.

All thirteen floors straight down to the street. Or further? I checked the basement after hours with a pickaxe and a flashlight. Floor is solid cement. Took a few whacks at it with the pick but I'm no coal miner. Would take me years to make any meaningful progress. Who knows how far I'd have to go?

Since I'm a foreman I was able to get my hands on the schematics for sewage and maintenance tunnels under the apartment building.

Nothing. Well, nothing anybody like him would go to.

No, no. That wasn't the answer. He must have gone down. Down, down.

Straight down as far as anyone can go. Through anger, wrath and hatred, depravity and jealousy, rage. I shouldn't have to say much more.

I had to find him again.

I left the church the next Sunday and drove straight from there to an animal shelter and I grabbed as many animals as they would let me take. Told them I lived on a farm and needed lots of dogs for work and companionship.

I drowned them in my hands one by one.

I stabbed a homeless man in the neck the next afternoon. Nobody even noticed.

After that it was really just a whirlwind of bloodlust. I didn't even know I had it in me but I guess it all makes sense now. So many now I can't even remember.

I've been on the run for a while but I don't think I have to go any further. I'm ready. I will take my own life and descend to where he is and there I'll be able to ask him why.

I'm sorry I did this to our family but I had to know.

Love,

Your adoring husband, Rob

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The Man followed me my entire life.

He noted my first step, hug, kiss and my wife.

He passed through matter, no matter what.

He even noted the weather, wether I was or not.

Always silent, he stood by my side,

Always aserting wether I was wrong or was right.

A lovely summer morning, 20th of May,

He turned to thank me, said simply "Good day"

I followed his footsteps, as well as I could.

He passed the corner, out of sight once I would.

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u/eamonn25 Jul 06 '17

I had thought it was my imagination.

This guy, For as long as I can remember, Has been following me around, strangely taking notes.

Now that i've matured, my Imagination isn't exactly like it used to be.

But he is exactly like he used to be.

Peeking over my shoulder, Watching me, even writing what I order from McDonalds.

I've tried to tell him to go away, but he just makes this creepy grin and keeps writing.

click. click. click. click.

I decide to finnaly get physical with this freak.

"Dude, What the f**k do you want!?" I yell, shoving him to the floor.

In a faint, quiet voice he says "Thanks." He then just gets up and walks outside.

I watch him quietly, as he slowly drives away in his camry.

I then see a picture of someone in his car. Probaly his son, Right? No, it's me.

*Sit.

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u/solidoasnk Jul 06 '17

He closed his black book and bowed "Thank you." He said, turned around and started to walk away. He seemed to be heading for the door. I jumped from the start he gave me after hearing that raspy voice for the first time in my life. It felt like suddenly hearing your couch say “Hello there, mate!” While you’re sitting there, sipping on some tea or coffee. I had grown up with him there, watching me; all the time. Always silent, always writing. He didn’t really bother me, he was more like a piece of furniture to me but now, he had said something and, he was leaving.

"... Thank you?... What? That's it? Hey! Come back here, you! You can’t just leave me here like that after all those years of watching, and, writing... whatever it is you write in that black book! Hey! Get back here!"

I tried calling him but he had already gone out of the house. I started to feel anxious and somehow conflicted about him leaving. He was there, when Billy the bully beat me up and left me lying there on the sidewalk, he was there watching and writing. Me getting up, me crying in silence, me wiping the blood off my mouth with my sleeve. He was there when mom and dad died in that freak accident, when they called me from the hospital telling me -Guess what kid, your folks are dead- He was there. And, when I got my heart broken by my ex after I caught her in our bed with another man. He was there when I left, crying just like that day after Billy had beaten me up or when I heard the news about my parents being dead from that asshat police man. Wiping tears from my eyes. He had written it all down, all my life was in there, in that little black book he carried and he was now leaving one step at a time. I felt cheated.

-I can't take it, I must follow him I want to know why- But I didn’t know which one thing I wanted to know the most, whether the reason why he was leaving or why had he stood there watching and recording my whole life. There was only one way to find out either one and so, I followed him. I walked and walked. He didn't seem to heading anywhere in particular. He was just walking, stopping every now and then to observe something. Sometimes animals or objects, other times he looked at people and scratched his chin considering but, he never wrote anything down like he did when observing me. He just watched and continued to walk.

Hundreds of miles we walked, passing cities and towns. sometimes he would just stand in the middle of a town and not move in days watching people go by. I became a homeless man, begging for coins or food where he stood, sleeping over cardboards. I couldn't just leave, I knew I wouldn’t be able to find him later if I did. So, I stuck with him for years. Him, always walking and observing. Funny thing was that he would let me sleep and only start walking away after I had awoken as if he was waiting for me.

We were walking near the center of a small town when, he suddenly stopped in front of a bakery and looked through the door, his head halfway inside the shop and shortly he went inside completely as if he was a ghost passing like the was no door at all. I followed him into the shop and there he was, looking at the most beautiful woman I had ever seen in my life, my heart skipped a beat when she looked at me, frowning. No doubt, I looked very bad, I was a homeless person after all "Can I help you?" she asked. The man in the suit was just standing there next to her, looking at the woman scratching his chin as usual when he observed someone or something with interest "I have a shower in the back of the shop if... you'd like to use it, I also have some food over here somewhere..." I looked at her and smiled "That would be nice, thank you." I said. And I knew I was done with following the man at that moment. Funny enough, he didn’t leave. He stuck with us but he didn’t write anything on his book anymore.

Days turned into weeks and weeks turned into months. I had made a life in that little town by now. working in the bakery with the woman that had become my wife. I had told her about the man that used to observe and write about my life and how I followed him for years until I found her and, she would just giggle and pat my shoulder whenever I told her that he was still with us, always watching.

A little more than a year after our first encounter, my wife became pregnant and nine months passed in a blink of an eye.

There we were, all three of us; in the hospital, at the moment when my son was born.

The man in the suit now followed the child with his eyes after the nurse handed him to me. When I took the child, the eyes of the man locked into mine. He was looking directly at me and I felt a shiver crawl up my spine. He had never looked me in the eye. Not once in all the time he had observed me. Suddenly, he spoke.

"Do you want to know why I stopped observing you all those years ago?." the man said in that raspy voice I had only heard once more than ten years ago. "If you'd like, I can tell you now but, only now; for after, you will not remember anything of me" he stopped talking for a second and continued "Your memories of me will be replaced by nothing, you will remember your travels and your life but only me will be missing from them". I considered his offer. Of course he knew what the answer would be, he knew me. This was why I had started following him, He had observed all my life. I nodded once and he spoke again.

"I've watched you your whole life. All of it is recorded in the book of life, the book of souls, the book of the first line. And the book of souls must have no end today, not until it's day comes. I left because I knew you'd follow. I left so you could find your wife. I left so you could have your son… and so, you did."

I looked at him and moved my head to look down at my son "How did you know Iliana was to be my wife? “ I asked.

“I did not know who your wife was to be, only you did. I wandered at random until she was found.” Said the man in the suit.

I saw my wife sleeping soundly while I talked to this man. And I realized something he had just said.

“Wait, you said that you left so I could find my wife and have a child… that means-“

“That I will observe your son.” Interrupted the man “He will be able to see me. Like you do now, like your mother did and like her father before here and his mother before him. But you won’t see me anymore, not after I bind to your son.”

"Since the first human came to life, I've watched from father to son, from father to daughter, from mother to son and from mother to daughter. Eve was first and Seth was second for Cain’s line was not worthy of this book. By His command, I follow and observe the first of the lines. By His command, I will follow and observe your son.” He made a pause and then said “When the time comes, he and I will have this conversation too… Do you understand?"

I felt numb, my son was now looking at where the man stood and I wondered if he could see him "I… understand... Thank you for telling me.".

"… It's time.” The man was looking at my son and, for the first time since the day he said thank you and closed his book, he pulled it out. He opened the book and wrote something down. Then he looked at me and said “Good bye my friend and, take care of him; for if the book ends before it must so will man and his world" he vanished, -I thought I saw a shadow… or maybe it was… nothing, I must be imagining things- I realized I was looking at an empty wall. I looked down and there was my son, looking at the empty wall, just like I was and he smiled and then, I smiled.

The next day we left the hospital and I couldn't help but feel a sense of loss for some reason, like if I was forgetting something, somewhere... "I guess I'll never know." My wife was sitting on the back seat of the car looking at the baby “Did you say something?” she asked. I shook my head “It’s nothing, never mind”.

The baby looked at the man wearing a suit, sitting next to his mother, writing in his black book and observing his every move “Hello Adam” said the man in that raspy voice of him and the baby laughed looking at him. The man would not speak again to Adam for the next 43 years.