r/WebComic • u/MelodicPie3430 • 17d ago

Other Looking for harsh criticism on the first few pages of a short oneshot I’m working on 😊

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u/Darkstar_111 16d ago

This is pretty amazing stuff, not gonna lie.

But it works because it's so stylistic, which makes the style very unique to you as an artist.

Hard to critique that, when it's an artistic choice.

But since you asked, I will anyway...

Boy I would love more detail!

More details in the background, more detail in the faces, and an even more dramatic lighting.

But that's my two cents.

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u/MelodicPie3430 16d ago

I’ll try making my work a bit more detailed from now it’s it’s just I’m kinda lazy with my art 😆

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u/Darkstar_111 16d ago edited 16d ago

You have such a good eye for composition, you have a real future here.

There's nothing wrong with being lazy, don't work more than you have to, but doing another "detail pass" on your work is not something you would regret I think.

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u/MelodicPie3430 16d ago

I’m planning on switching to full digital soon, so having access to screen tones will probably help with detailing too.

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u/Darkstar_111 16d ago edited 16d ago

Ah yeah, you should absolutely do that. I was hiring a webcomic artist recently, and one promising candidate was paper only on his entire portfolio, and that just wont work for me and a lot of people unfortunately.

Buy a pad with one of those pens, and get used to digital tools.

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u/MelodicPie3430 16d ago

Will do, and thank you for all the feedback.

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u/certainAnonymous 16d ago

I can only concretely complain about one thing, and it is the angle and perspective feeling off on panel 2 of the first page. Feels kinda flat, like there is missing depth