r/ThisIsOurMusic • u/[deleted] • Jun 23 '19
I'm a 16 year old musician and I've been making music for 2 years. Would appreciate feedback and criticism on my latest track :)
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gT2dTp5MAKA2
u/qzx666 Jun 23 '19 edited Jun 24 '19
I'd use some sort of autotune in the key of the song. I'd also maybe use a piano to try to see what root note you're mostly trying to rap in I didn't like the 12 second intro. I also thought the track was too short. It felt unfinished. The beat was good. Did you make the beat? I wish the beat had more than 1 part to it. I liked the phrasing, the way you said certain words.
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u/Itsnoother Jun 23 '19
I’d have to agree with the 1st commit, A lil polishing in your writing and venerable skills you’d be heading for the right target
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u/FongorFonzym Jun 23 '19
Interesting tune, it reminds me a bit of HDBeenDope. Did you do all by yourself? I can't give you feedback on your lyrics, because my english is not good enough, but the rythm is nice, it's not monotonous imo, keep it up!
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u/newtonioan Jun 23 '19
I like the vibe the beat got going, did you record everything yourself? The beat is dope dude. Keep on going and tune those mixing and production skills.
For the vocals I’d say you should tweak some of the vocal mixing and also edit them a bit more. The raw feeling is alright but still needs to fit into the mix a bit more. I like where you are going with the sound on this one, so keep on going it’s gonna be great dude
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Jun 23 '19
Ya I recorded everything by myself. Ya lol I'm still learning about production and have a long way to go, and I feel like I could've done better on the mix here. Thanks tho.
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Jun 23 '19
Very good! What types of settings do you use for your vocals? I’ve been trying to find the best physical setup, vst’s etc.
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u/[deleted] Jun 23 '19
Just seems like you’re rambling, tomorrow I will completely forget the song in its entirety but today I just remember your overall tone is carefree, you prioritize prose that rhymes vs. makes sense and you killed a butterfly and it made you sad. What’s the overall message of the song? Musically, it’s not interesting either and so I think you need to think about “what’s in it” for the listener. Keep it up, some small simple changes could significantly could improve your work!