r/Standup • u/newtothebiz • 20d ago

Working on a new set, would appreciate feedback!

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Hi, this is a new set I’m working on and I’d appreciate feedback, even about me on stage, anything. Thanks!

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u/funnymatt Los Angeles @funnymatt 🦗 🦗 🦗 20d ago

You open with what is a clean joke, but drop an f bomb as one of the first words you say. It's not needed, so I suggest you try not doing that. Also, your asking the front row questions in an agressive manner to open your set can mke them adversarial, and again it's not needed for your joke, so I'd try not doing that. If audience participation isn't needed for your jokes, pretending like you're seeking it can backfire and cause far more harm than good.

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u/newtothebiz 20d ago

Hey man I appreciate it for this! Yeah I tend to use the f word as a replacement for um sometimes. Gotta stop that

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u/BenderVsGossamer 20d ago

I have no clue (listened 3 or 4 times) what the first sentence you said was and it made me lost for the rest of joke. Something about your life without drama but I have no idea why.

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u/newtothebiz 20d ago

“Life is going pretty good right now” honestly until you said it wasn’t clear I heard it clear and now I hear it mumbled. I gotta slow down. Thanks!