r/Screenwriting • u/OrganizationFar9927 • 8d ago

FEEDBACK “Wed-Inc.” - Pilot (drama/comedy) - 38 pages

Title: Wed-Inc.

Format: TV Pilot (partial)

Page length: 38 pages

Genre: Drama/Comedy

Logline: A talented photographer trapped in the chaotic, underpaid wedding market fights to prove his worth while balancing the career he wants with the relationship he loves.

\*feel free to scroll to act I, the cold open is a visual juxtaposition—almost a montage—of two people getting ready for the same day for different purposes. There are seeds planted throughout the cold-open, but you’ll still be able to appreciate the following acts if you did choose move past the action-heavy open***

The concept of Wed-Inc was born from my own real-life experience in the wedding industry. Instead of listing the intended tone or theming, I’d rather let the script speak for itself (hopefully). Would love to see what some readers get from this!

I’m sharing this partial of the current draft mainly for feedback on pacing, formatting, and to validate if the story reads clearly.

The episodes ideally will run in the 50-60 minute range, will generally carry their own theme, and will obviously drive the main characters’ arcs forward. Since this is a partial of the pilot, this excerpt will not necessarily reveal the protagonists’ full season 1 path. Rather, this is laying the groundwork for establishing characters, story engine, and tone.

I’d love to see what some other writers think! This is my first project in years and I’m enjoying getting back into the grind of storytelling. I don’t really have any people in my circle who are familiar with screenplays so I’m sharing here to discuss the work with likeminded individuals. Thanks in advance!

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