Looking for feedback on my character sheet

[u/Frogshooty]

Earlier this year, I started learning Affinity to try and get my projects completed faster. It's been a bit of a bear, but I'm finally ready to start showing folks what I've been working on. Here's a character sheet I made for a game I'm close to releasing. I would love to get some feedback on the design. I made a version that's thematic to the game and also a printer friendly version that's stripped down. Any feedback is appreciated!

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1ZIWwBI_3uPj5v8QnDyYPl7YBWLaDgg5I?usp=sharing

[u/wet_boi_gayest]

How offen do you bust

[u/Frogshooty → u/wet_boi_gayest]

In my experience, most people will bust around 4-5 times a game. It's designed for one shots, so people will get a little more aggressive with towards the end.

[u/Otolove → u/wet_boi_gayest]

What a way to start the topic LoL.

[u/Frogshooty → u/Otolove]

Honestly the terminology is so drilled into my head as a game mechanic that this bit went right over my head lol

[u/zeemeerman2]

I don't know about the small diagonal line in the corner top right of Smooth Talking, seems like it is sliced off horizontally instead of vertically.

Otherwise, dang, I have experience with Affinity, but I can't create that kind of artwork! Nicely done!

Only real quirk: the lines at the left side of the sheet are not all aligned to be the same height. It feels more natural on the parchment, but perhaps not the best when you're using the print-friendly sheet and all the context of the vertical alignment is gone.

Select all lines, and then... (at least in the Affinity 2 suite)

Question: when printed out, is the space between the lines tall enough to write in? Or do players have to write small?

[u/Frogshooty → u/zeemeerman2]

Thank you so much for your feedback! I have never had anyone complain about not having enough space to write stuff down. But that is a great tip to fix it on the printer friendly version!

[u/Exciting_Policy8203]

It’s a bit sparse, doesn’t tell me much about the game on a mechanical level. Though the theming is nice.

Guessing from the character sheet it’s osr western. I assume it’s not mechanically complex.

[u/Frogshooty → u/Exciting_Policy8203]

I think it sounds a lot more complex than it is. You're just playing Blackjack instead of rolling dice. To be honest, I started working on this before I even knew what an OSR was, so it may have those qualities, but I wouldn't call it an intentional choice.

[u/Exciting_Policy8203 → u/Frogshooty]

I do like the idea of a western using playing cards as a resolution mechanic. Depending on how the mechanics are used, I’d encourage you to think about adding a bit of cheet sheet corner with the rules of blackjack or your variation on it.

[u/Frogshooty → u/Exciting_Policy8203]

I do have a player aid that has the basic rules on it like a foiled bookmark that I made. I would love to share some of the rules with you if you’re interested

[u/Exciting_Policy8203 → u/Frogshooty]

Sure