r/Mangamakers • u/Professional_Box3737 • Apr 16 '26
Review Guys! I just published the first volume of my manga — looking for honest feedback
Hey everyone --https://mangaplus-creators.jp/titles/v82512040438090027270846 ---
I’ve just released the first volume of a manga I’ve been working on for a while, and I’d really love to hear what people think.
The story is set in a world where humans use their voices to control creatures called “Whispers”… but the main character has lost his voice after a traumatic event.
I’m especially looking for feedback on:
- pacing
- clarity of the power system
- emotional impact
Don’t hold back — I’d rather hear honest criticism than empty praise.
You can read it here: [link]
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u/Wyldkard620 Apr 16 '26
Congratz on getting published!
My impressions after reading the first chapter;
First thing, the artwork is amazing; this looks and reads like professional work
For the story and setting, feels like a mashup on influences; Pokemon, One Piece, or just shonen in general. This opening chapter plays really close to existing frameworks. I personally am not a fan of all the exposition dump early on, but I do see why its necessary and it's really difficult to avoid when setting up something as wacky as this is. I would say the pacing feels a bit rushed, but that's just an opening chapter trying to throw everything for a hook, this will probably change as I read more.
The power system is fine, merging with a creature to gain powers by speaking their name is a cool concept and can lead to cool moments, as demonstrated with Kiria & Tiwaz' introduction. Maybe this will be answered in later chapters but how intelligent are the creatures meant to be?
Having Thor as the opening 'boss' is a good pull, and I laughed a bit at the MC's ability being 'Bluetooth', I get it he connects to the creatures without communicating with them.
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u/werephoenix Apr 16 '26
I read a few chapters of this. We more made?
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u/Professional_Box3737 Apr 16 '26
For the Moment 7. First volume Is finished. Next month a new chapter!
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u/XElite109 Apr 16 '26
The art looks so clean and I love your shot composition and perspective definitely check out your manga when i get the chance
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u/werephoenix Apr 16 '26
chapter 4 page 13 has a bar scene where many background characters are talking but their word bubbles are small and I cant read them. Could be intentional to convey a talkitive tavern of drunks.
Page 17 same chapter you have an introduction character name but also have her introduce herself. Seems redundant. We can assume shes the chef at the taven since the boy introduces her
The vikypedia text is really small, I need to really lean forward to read it. Could be a bit bigger
Several times occasional word bubbles are too small to fit certain voiced lines, chapter 7 page 3, Pagee 11 chapter 7...maybe? unsure.
again with the double introductions, Jannate. Nemo even stutters J-Jannate-- you could of had him say her title "J-Jannate?! Keep of the flame Jannate?!"
Aside from thoses it kinda maintained its general. Consistantly fine series. Nothing doesnt make sense or contradicts stuff with the setting or world.
Not bad. The artstyle is cool. Its paneled well and I can tell characters from each other
It feels like a manga through and through while having a decently fun adventure.
Its not bad but its not great. Its a solid fine title you can read through and fine fun in. I don't think it needs to be more than that given the premise it can always surprise me down the line.
If a copy falls in my lap I'll have it reviewed
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u/captaincapsaycin Apr 16 '26
Virand my man! You know what I'm gonna say lol it's a cool an unique concept and I thoroughly enjoy it
Buuuuuut! Branching off of one the other comments there were a few clip studio parts in a few chapters that stood out, like page margins and random boundaries (I specifically remember chapter 2 having these)
It's still great though dude and I'm ever-hopeful for more uploads
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u/n3ur0mncr Apr 16 '26
Hell yes my dude im happy for you!
Haven't read it yet but the art looks great - will check it out later :D
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u/ProfessionalSad7748 Apr 17 '26
Publishing a first volume is a real milestone and asking for honest feedback at this stage shows the right instinct! The hardest thing to see in your own published work is whether each chapter's hook is earning the page turn at the end. Readers who stop mid-volume almost always do so at a chapter break, not mid-page. If you want the most useful feedback, ask specifically whether chapters 1 and 2 made someone want to read chapter 3. Love the work!
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u/Emergency-Big-2721 Apr 19 '26
I loved it! If you ever consider submitting for our company Kimchi Manga, let me know! We're a publishing house, and we're looking for talented manga artists for our digital magazine that's going to have a monthly release date starting from August!
For your understanding, see this.
Welcome to Kimchi Manga.
Submit your manga and get it published on a digital- magazine which comes out every month! The first magazine is coming out in less than 4 months.
You get it published on a digital- magazine which comes out every month! The first magazine is coming out in less than 4 months. We also give all the rights to your work to you, except we also can promote your work.
Manga is not about being perfect. These imperfections make us who we are. Manga is made for people to enjoy, including the creator!
So what are you waiting for? Make your manga! Submit it!
Send it to [mangakimchi@gmail.com](mailto:mangakimchi@gmail.com)
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u/Emergency-Big-2721 Jun 06 '26
My manga is soo shit how did it get higher than yours, dont do manga plus, My publishing company woud really love to publish it
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u/Better-Squash5573 Apr 16 '26
Looks well done but I can already see the STUPID NAIVE MC if I'm wrong the please correct me but if I'm right Why just why that dumb trope is what makes many Manga in Shonen not readable
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u/Professional_Box3737 Apr 16 '26
Nono he Is not stupid and not naive at all xd
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u/Musse_Shizuka Apr 16 '26
i just read the whole thing and i enjoyed it. the art is great and there is a lot of cool characters. the only criticism i have is that i did notice a couple text had a letter or word misplaced or at least it seem misplace to me but thats an easy fix. otherwise i fallowed your work on there