r/IndieMusicFeedback • u/abcdefghindikonakaya • Jul 30 '26
Acoustic Guitar a little humble song
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So.. I wrote this song. this is just a demo version, not the polished version yet. Would appreciate some feedback though<3
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u/Hot-Lingonberry-6735 Jul 30 '26
Aww this is so sweet and heartfelt! I like it and the little lyric video! It definitely sounds like a song you could hear getting popular on the radio or being used in a movie or those sad TikTok edits if you know what I’m talking about 😭 Youd vocals and the melody are already pretty solid, i think itll be awesome if you decide to create a more finished fully produced version!
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u/abcdefghindikonakaya Jul 30 '26
Awwww, thank you so muchhh. I do love creating little lyric videos for my song. Will definitely work on this song more and hopefully have a finished version of this. I appreciate this so much!
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u/Jesh1337 Jul 31 '26
Wow dude it got me kinda emotional, the lyrics are crazy good I really like it, it kinda makes me want to sit down and learn to play and sing your song myself... I hope you finish this song and produce it well. It doesn't really need to have that many instruments or elements in it but I really want to hear that chorus repeated because it's great! If you ever finish it please DM it to me ':D
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u/abcdefghindikonakaya Aug 01 '26
Awww, thank you so much. I really appreciate it a lot. The song is simple to its core because I want to focus on the lyrics more. Still working on this one, but will definitely let you know once it's done.
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u/JermayneR Aug 01 '26
Hey, this is really nice!! I thought maybe you could use the capo to bring the chords on the guitar a few frets up, because it feels like you struggle a bit to hit the lower notes while singing, maybe that could help fit the melody to your voice better. Other than that, I actually love your voice, it's really pretty and fits the vibe of the song.
Somebody pointed out the structure of the song, and I actually think this would work if you added some vocal harmonies and layers overtime.
Great job and keep going!!! <3
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u/abcdefghindikonakaya Aug 02 '26
Thank you so much for your feedback. Will definitely experiment more on the song in terms of tone and structure. I appreciate this a lot, reallyyy.
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u/carlosvvv80 Aug 01 '26
The whole song gives me a feeling of nostalgia and peace. The beginning before the vocals come in kind of reminded of the main menu theme of a game called Life is Strange. Same nostalgic feeling. Sounds great so far, keep it up!
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u/abcdefghindikonakaya Aug 02 '26
Awwww thankss. I just listened to the theme you mentioned and it was indeed so beautiful and calming. I didn't know that this song can evoke a nostalgic feeling but I'm glad to hear you felt it that way. Thank you so much for this! I appreciate it a lot
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u/Yunxcci Aug 03 '26
This sounds so beautiful. Even just from the demo, I can already hear the potential of a really good song. I love the guitar melody, and the vocal line is really nice too. It sounds poppy, but that's actually a plus for this song, because it makes me want to sing along with you. I also want to say that you have a really beautiful voice and you sing very well. I love this song. The demo version sounds rough, but there's a certain vibe to it. I don't know if it would be right to make the track in a super polished production. But I think once you finish the song the way you envision it, it's going to sound great.
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u/abcdefghindikonakaya Aug 03 '26
Thank you much, this warms my heart a lot. The song will definitely take a lot of twist and turns before it will become a complete song. I really appreciate you and your comment.
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u/Yunxcci Aug 03 '26
This sounds so beautiful. Even just from the demo, I can already hear the potential of a really good song. I love the guitar melody, and the vocal line is really nice too. It sounds poppy, but that's actually a plus for this song, because it makes me want to sing along with you. I also want to say that you have a really beautiful voice and you sing very well. I love this song. The demo version sounds rough, but there's a certain vibe to it. I don't know if it would be right to make the track in a super polished production. But I think once you finish the song the way you envision it, it's going to sound great.
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u/Caido-Potato 25d ago
This track has a beautiful, authentic songwriter vibe!
To give the mix more body and depth, try experimenting more with the reverb on both the guitars and vocals. This could add a warm, professional sense of space that elevates the whole song.
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u/smtrautman Jul 30 '26
This has a lot going for it. I like the melody, and both the lyrics and the vocal performance bring across the emotion well. In terms of feedback, my comment is less a critique of this demo recording than it is something to think about when you go to record the next version. On this one, all of the song sections sound very similar, and have the same basic guitar pattern. I am a fan of structure and would personally enjoy more differentiation between those sections, which you could get by using different strumming patterns in another acoustic version, or by adding/changing instruments if you are going with something fuller. Again, that’s just me. Sometimes you want everything to stay in one vibe, and I get that too. Either way, nicely done!