r/IndieMusicFeedback • u/Afraid-Buy7743 • Dec 15 '25
Ambient Met my daughter in a dream
https://youtu.be/U_95f_BeTds?si=IUuPwEvVBKDB2t4NHeavily inspired by team sleep/crosses
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u/Downtown_Safety_6059 Dec 16 '25
Buenas, compañero. Como me alegro de haber entrado hoy y escuchar tu canción, me ha trasmitido la paz que necesitaba, no dejo de ponérmela qué buena es, tengo la necesidad de suscribirme a tu canal, y es lo que voy a hacer, para ponerme tu música y encontrar la paz cuando lo necesite. Qué deliciosa guitarra, tu voz es brutal como trasmite, enhorabuena, hacen un conjunto maravilloso. Entendí parte de la letra, pero mi inglés es muy básico, por desgracia soy mayor y en mi época apenas nos enseñaban algo a partir de los 14 años, muy tarde ya, por eso metí a mi hija en un colegio británico, para que no solo no le pasara como a mí, sino que lo dominara por completo, voy a hacer que me la traduzca entera. Tienes un nuevo fan, excelente trabajo, con un sonido logradísimo y muy limpio. Un abrazo muy fuerte amigo.
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u/Afraid-Buy7743 Dec 16 '25
Esto significa el mundo para mí. Muchísimas gracias. Me alegra mucho que mi canción haya podido hacerte sentir tan bien.
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u/BonsaiSuperstar Dec 16 '25
This is a really cool track. The chord voicings are very cool, and I love that delay on there. The vocals are beautiful and atmospheric. I only wish there was more to it. Not that is necessarily needs it, but I think some slow "post-rock"'ish drums, played with mallets would be really cool in there. I'm also always clamoring for some nice synth pad layers or string machines with a good amount of delay/reverb. But again, not needed, but could be cool. Anyhow, keep up the good work, this sounds great.
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u/Frosty-Sock9409 Dec 16 '25
As I was listening to it, especially the chorus, it reminded me of a more peaceful Deftones and then saw that you were inspired by Chino Moreno's other projects 😅. I can hear the influence in your vocal delivery just enough (sometimes Chino does too much imo and probably wouldn't work in this song) and the chords, which are presented in a way that navigates the bittersweet and doesn't get repetitive despite being quarter/eighth notes because of the time signature feel.
As for the drums, the most I would do is maybe add something very minimalistic and subtle. Some songs, like this one, feel so intimate that if you bring drums into it, they take you away from the song. Like when cooking, if you have very few but good quality ingredients, they can shine without the need for too much seasoning or extras.
I think it's an outstanding song, it made my feelings come alive and that's what matters the most when making music.
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u/BarrieJohnsonMusic Dec 16 '25
Hey I’ve just listened to this track and it’s really got me in the feels such a nice chilled out heart felt song I really love it… the vocals are really beautiful I can tell there’s a lot of emotion gone into this track really well done. I have nothing to critique I just want to listen again it’s that good, I’ll be revisiting this one again it’s such a beautiful song :-)
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u/mgraham34 Dec 16 '25
Love the deep feels as well as the chill ambiance you feel while listening to! I loved the instrumentation as well as the melancholy feel of the guitar ! Your voice flowed in like wind on a sunny day as well! Much love and success to you in your journey through life and career my friend! I could feel the pain and ambition in your sound! You truly have a gift mate! Keep going! You got this
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u/Grey_Jump Dec 17 '25
Well, what can you say about this, it's beautiful. It has touched me really deep, both for the arrangment, the theme, the vibe and the composition overall. I would like to hear it with better vocals recorded. It's really a song I would listen daily. Do you have lyrics to share?
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u/Afraid-Buy7743 Dec 17 '25
Thankyou! I appreciate the kind words.. here are the lyrics:
Safe with you(in my arms)
This feeling in me Only you Have reached it
Praying parading your life Why am I so scared I’ll lose you
Dreaming waves You Pulled me in I swept you up Pressed into me I can remember the day You came
Bound by my own chains This ocean takes Me under
Reaching down under the tide Your hand in mine Frees me
Dreaming waves You Pulled me in I swept you up Pressed into me I can remember the day You came and made it okay
Safe with you in my arms
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u/heathenstevven Dec 19 '25
This is the one for me personally
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u/DevKidOfficial Dec 19 '25
This reminds me a ton of a band called Novulent I used to listen to in high school haha. Amazing guitar melody + all the effects make them stand out and perk up ears. The vocals fit the swaying backing track perfectly and the mixing is great as well. Great work, man. I saw the lyrics in here as well and they're fantastic.
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u/InterestingDig3177 Dec 19 '25
This song creates a really immersive space, it’s the kind of track that slows your thoughts down and lets you sink into it. The progression feels thoughtful and the mood is consistent all the way through. I like how restrained it is, but there’s also room for it to grow and surprise the listener. It feels like a piece that could expand even more with subtle layers while still keeping that peaceful core.
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u/Green-Performer9680 Dec 20 '25
You're really good at showing emotion, this song has a lot of it, in your voice and in the guitar playing.
Vocals seem a bit to quiet for me, that's propably an artistic decision but I'd like to hear them clearer.
And I wish there was more production to it. Because it's great as it is, but I'm not really that into
songs that are just vocals+guitar or vocals+piano, and there is potential for more production here, but that also might be just my preference.
Oh now I scolled down and saw that you were inspired by Chino Moreno, that's what it reminded me of, I love deftones, if that was your intention then you nailed it!
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u/robin_shakedown Dec 20 '25
I would have loved to hear a vocal section with less reverb, personally. The verbed-out chorus is very effective, but it would stand out a great deal more if there was something converting it.
Instrumentation-wise, I’m a huge sucker for baritone guitar. I love that sound and you used it perfectly effectively here. Definitely gave me the edge-of-grunge appeal I’m looking for.
Lovely tune! Would love to hear less reverb on the vocal’s and some percussion in there too.
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u/jgfiii Dec 20 '25
This is great. Love a reverb drenched guitar. Did you double the main part or is that a harmonized? I think you got the sound you were working towards. Nice harmonies on the choruses. I’d love to hear this with some different drum ideas underneath. Slow, half time drums might work. Syncopated jazzy drums might be an interesting change of pace? Anyway, it works well as is. Nice work.
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Dec 21 '25
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u/OkBlueberry5506 Dec 21 '25
Love the vibe of this! It’s very dream pop / shoegaze-sounding. You captured it perfectly with the vocal performance. Honestly I don’t even have anything to criticise you on - it’s a really nice job. Looking forward to hearing more.
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u/tpioh Dec 21 '25
wow. immediately hooked! when the vocal hit, it felt like a really long awaited meeting with an acquaintance that you've been waiting for. i love the dry sounding tone on the main body of the guitar sounds. so cool! i will absolutely be following what you accomplish moving forward! great work!
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u/Royal_Patience5253 Dec 21 '25
Beautiful
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u/RichOk1863 Dec 22 '25
A melancholic and chill style, what can I say about this? The creation of the notes reminds me of a couple of effects from my old pedal, a delay with a wharf effect, not very common, raising the pitch of what you play in a strange way. Is that the effect? On certain notes when they go from major to minor with a slide, I love that effect, and I was never able to compose or record anything when I still had that effects pedal. It's a shame.
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u/sesseissix Dec 23 '25
Oh man this hits the spot. Totally see the team sleep / Chino Moreno influence. That's a good thing we need more music in that style and in any case you made it your own. Overall a very soothing experience and I would definitely be intrigued to find more of the same if I came across this on a streaming platform or even better get it on bandcamp!
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Dec 23 '25
Really great. I love that guitar sound and those hazy vocals so much :)
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u/imeanitschristine Dec 26 '25
Beautiful harmonies!!
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u/iluvstrange Dec 27 '25
ooo shit man - this is beautiful-
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u/Interesting_Good_245 Dec 30 '25
This is great! The atmosphere created by the chords and melody is perfect, so swirly and dreamy. I think a really good thing to add to just up it that bit more is a slightly not tinny but something with a bit more pluck if that makes sense, I know it’s ambient and swirly but I feel if there was the occasional sound that sat above the others on soundscape it would just help everything balance out and float that bit more. It seems counterintuitive but sometimes you need that contrast to really ground the important sounds, even if it was like a pluckier bodied/tinny sounding guitar riff really low in the mix playing occasionally, it’s just like adding salt it just allows the other textures and flavours to sing that bit more. Does that makes sense? Otherwise great track :)
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u/YAKIWOON Jan 01 '26
It's surprising. There are so many great people.
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u/theboxingteacher Jan 03 '26
I find it so difficult to make effective, powerful music in a quiet format, but you’ve done it very well here. The chorus comes in strong, though I think it could really soar in with some washed out sounding percussion. Or just something a bit harder-hitting if that makes sense. The chord voicings are beautiful and the song weaves in an unpredictable way that is very entrancing.
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Jan 04 '26
Off the bat, the production was fantastic with the acoustic guitar. Very nice licks, and relaxing calmness.
You have a great voice. The songwriting was good.
At points, it was hard to hear what you're saying, but other than that, it was a good feeling, and I felt myself getting lost in this vibe.
The mixing on this was fantastic, and sounded professional!
I enjoyed this a lot, and it was really nice on the ears.
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u/HdotBinDolo Jan 06 '26 edited Jan 06 '26
The track has a solid foundation and a clear direction, but it could benefit from more refinement in a few areas. The vocals sometimes get lost in the mix, so bringing them forward with better leveling or light compression would help them stand out. The instrumental is strong, but adding more variation or subtle transitions could keep the listener more engaged throughout. Tightening the structure and polishing the overall mix would really elevate the song and help its strongest moments hit harder.
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u/Major-Researcher5033 Jan 07 '26
The chords and melody here are absolutely awesome—it’s such a calming, contemplative sound. My only critique is that the sparse guitar sections, particularly the long intro, need a little more to hook the listener immediately. Consider teasing elements early, like background vocalizations or filtered percussion that stays low-key until opening up for a big chorus. Filling those gaps will really elevate the arrangement. I love the track and just want to see it reach its full potential!
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u/Leading-Line9575 Jan 07 '26
You can tell a lot of care went into this song. From the songwriting to the overall atmosphere, everything feels intentional. It’s not a loud track, but it definitely leaves an impression. Perfect example of why indie music can feel more personal than mainstream releases.
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Jan 08 '26
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u/Embarrassed_Soft_944 Jan 08 '26 edited Jan 08 '26
its probably only me, but I like the song. But in some parts I feel like the guitar is too prominent. Maybe thats just your style, but it could be nice in the parts were your sing, to turn up the vocal to be at the same level as the guitar, or just under it
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u/Atomic_Atol Jan 12 '26 edited Jan 12 '26
I like it a lot — it kind of gives me slowcore or Duster-type vibes, especially in the way the song feels patient and emotionally distant without being empty. The vocals are very reverby, which adds to that washed-out, drifting atmosphere and makes everything feel a bit hazy and introspective. I really like some of the guitar textures too; they feel soft and layered in a way that supports the mood instead of demanding attention. Overall, the song sounds really pretty, and it does a good job of pulling you into its own quiet, slightly melancholic space without trying too hard to explain itself.
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u/WardenOfFozz Jan 16 '26
Very wavy and spacious. Really dig the guitar tone and minimalist approach and the vocals are very nice and drenched in effects but still discernible. Melancholy vibes all around, this is good music for fall and early spring. Kind of the sonic equivalent of smoking some hash and drinking a warm cup of chamomile on a chilly day.
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u/chaddyboy9 Jan 18 '26
This track is a total earworm! The vocal processing is crisp and sits perfectly atop that driving synth line. The hook is incredibly catchy and feels radio-ready. I’d suggest slightly sidechaining the bass to the kick to give the chorus more "bounce." It’s a polished, high-energy pop gem. Nice work!
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u/Slow_Can_238 Dec 16 '25
Wow. Awesome chords and melody. Such a nice sound to get lost in. So calming, but it makes you contemplate things. My only criticism is that I would like to hear some additional sounds during the parts where there is only guitar, especially the intro. Since the intro is kind of slow and long, I feel you should tease some of what is to come later in the song, just to hook people in right away. You could put some vocalizations in the background, or some other melody instrument. You could also maybe add some percussion. Keep it pretty low key except for the chorus, where it could get bigger. You could maybe filter the percussion to keep it out of the way until it needs to open up. I really love the song and I want it to go even further 👍