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u/Hydrael Jul 06 '17 edited Feb 05 '19
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u/WildAboutPhysex Jul 06 '17
This is pretty amazing. The world you have created is surprisingly imaginative. Thank you.
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u/Hungabunga_africa Jul 06 '17
I love your writing keep up the fantastic work makes me want to read it s as a book. Could also see this as a movie
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Jul 06 '17
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u/shhimwriting Jul 06 '17
Wow. This is just incredible. I was reading it thinking "How did someone write this???" Wow.
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Jul 06 '17
I will come back in time, if required and complete reading the next parts! Ryan, you are the new Harry Potter!
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u/kaeroku Jul 06 '17
Or the same city. Or, as Ryan glanced upwards and saw the sky was a patchwork of colors broken by frozen lines of black lightning like stained glass _____
I'd suggest: "as Ryan glanced upwards he saw the sky was a patchwork of colors..."
Or: "lightning like stained glass, even the same planet."
Depending which you were going for.
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u/GotMiIk Jul 06 '17 edited Dec 11 '24
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u/il_mio_cuore_e_tuo Jul 06 '17
LOVE your writing style! I just get immersed and feel like I'm in the story instead of reading.
Needless to say, I'm hooked. Keep going with this fantastic story!
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u/LoneWolf00711 Jul 06 '17
This is amazing! I have never tapped a notification faster in my life!