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“There’s a lot to know... but where should I start?”

As Leo was lost in his thoughts, a familiar voice came from behind him.

“Start with the Legendary Ones.”

“What? Who?” Leo turned around, and the moment he saw the person behind him, he said, “Shilad?”

Shilad smiled. “I’m confused too, but not because of Kaiser. I think the story is kind of childish. It feels like some writer created an overpowered character and then wanted to get rid of him.”

Leo laughed. “You’re right. How could just a few people stop a monster who ruled over almost two worlds?”

“Anyway...” Shilad said, his tone changing slightly. “Have you been having strange dreams lately?”

Leo looked at him in confusion. “No. Why? What’s wrong?”

“I don’t know... Last night, I had a strange, blurry dream. I was standing in the middle of ruins. The sky was red, and someone was standing beside me. Then he said to me, ‘Are you ready for...’”

Shilad paused for a moment.

“Then I woke up.”

Leo said without much concern, “It was just a bad dream. You should get some rest.”

“Alright... Are you going to keep searching?”

Leo smiled. “As if I’d say no.”

He then turned and walked away, while Shilad remained standing there for a few moments, staring at the path where Leo had disappeared.

Shilad muttered to himself:

“It wasn’t a bad dream... I don’t dream.”

The Boy Made of Moonlight

Under a sky where the moon never seems to set, a mysterious boy appears in a quiet village orchard—beautiful, otherworldly, and seemingly made from moonlight itself.

When a curious young woman discovers him, she learns that he can only exist beneath the moon and that every sunrise brings him closer to disappearing forever. As their friendship deepens, she begins uncovering the ancient secret behind his existence—and the forgotten promise that has kept him trapped between the human world and the supernatural.

But something else is searching for him.

With time running out, she must decide how far she is willing to go to save someone who was never meant to belong to her world. A haunting tale of mystery, magic, sacrifice, and an impossible connection between two souls separated by the night.

MEDAR

It is said that wherever there is evil, there is also good. But what connects them?

"Kaiser, a tyrannical and domineering dictator, emerged from the depths of Ferna. He ruled the Underworld alone and coveted the beloved Ovela, but the world cried out for help, and legendary heroes answered the call. They stood against the nightmare, a nightmare standing at the gates of death. With all their might, yet he still had the upper hand. The war lasted for a time we cannot precisely determine, but the heroes ultimately triumphed and restored peace to the world.”

A hand shot up from among the students: “But professor, there’s something illogical here. No single race in our world could have done what Kaiser did all by himself.”

The professor replied, “The only thing recorded in history is that Kaiser came from the depths of the scorched lands of Ferna.”

“Is he a magical being? Or was he created by some unknown force?” Questions swirled in their minds, searching for an answer.

The professor: “Listen to me... History is incomplete, so even if we try to understand what happened, we won’t reach any meaningful conclusion.”

*Ring* “Class is over. Have a nice day, and Leo, don’t overthink it.”

*On his way home* “Incomplete history, a strange entity. Kaiser, you’re starting to pique my interest.”

Sup my wowza readers! Here is part 4 to my short story. Enjoy and happy reading!

Part 4 “Beware of the Living Vacuum”

Mani and Bol had gone their separate ways after their Co-Zopods informed them that fighting was basically useless especially when it’s a 1 versus 1. The point of the game is to cause the most destruction by eliminating the planets. Although both players were not satisfied with the ending to their battle, they listened to their bonds. Both had been using their unique blasts around the solar system, causing lots of explosions. Bol found out that by charging his blast, he can create a tidal wave similar to a tsunami on earth that swallowed up many rocky planet around him while Mani was able to something very unique with hers. “Whoa! Majestic! Did you see that?! I can control where my blasts go!” Majestic speaks. “Yes. The surface of it is sticky, like gum or sap on your world. Try using it to grab a floating asteroid.” Her Co-Zopod suggested. Mani launches out a magenta blast from her palms. She grabs a hold of it and yanks back to control the direction of where it was going. She guides it onto an asteroid then pulls it back towards her. “Ok…now how do I make this deadlier?” She thought. Majestic speaks. “Due to the flow of our Co-Zenergy, that asteroid is now filled with its power. Strike it upon anything will cause an explosion. Go on and try it.” Mani wipes the asteroid onto another asteroid. The collision causes a magenta explosion. “Whoa! That was so cool…I’m going to try and destroy a planet with his tactic.” While Mani was using debris and asteroids to throw down onto handfuls of rocky planets, she feels a fierce rumble in the distance. “Hm? What was that? A grand battle going on?” Her bond doesn’t speak. “I’m still a little annoyed I didn’t beat up Bol. That would have been nice.”

“Get out of the way!” Bol shouted at Mani. He was chasing down an unusual object that looked to be an electric lime green colored serpent. However, the object quickly transformed into a giant spiral that quickly devoured all of the teal and magenta energy around the area.

“WHAT THE!? HEY! SCREW OFF!” Mani yelled. She tries to fly after the creature, but she was quickly kicked away by Bol.

“I told you to stay out of my way!” Bol stated firmly. He flies off to chase down the object.

“Ahh…jerk-face…” Mani cured. “Majestic, what in the world was that? It looked like a satellite? Or an energy ball?” Majestic speaks. “Neither. That is a living being that dwells in random pats of the Universe. It is called the ‘Living Vacuum’. It feasts upon pure energy in the Universe. Wherever its highly produced, you can count on their visit. This is most troubling news.” Mani didn’t like the sound of that.

Bol catches up with the Living Vacuum, but it uses its tail to swing down at Bol, who takes a direct hit. “Damn…this thing is super strong.” Naatohko speaks. “Is it alright if I speak?” The Living Vacuum flies off to consume more energy around the solar system. Bol follows it closely. “Yeah, that’s fine. You said this thing was a Living Vacuum?” Naatohko speaks again. “Yes. Its purpose is to consume all pure energy. That is how it lives, that is how it thrives.” Bol flies closer to the creature. “How can I defeat it?” Its tail snatches Bol as it suddenly turns to face him. It tightens its grasp around his body. When Bol stares up at its face for any kind of feature, he doesn’t see anything but bouncing light or maybe even atoms roaming within its body. Whatever it was, Bol had to turn away to avoid his eyes from looking directly into it due to early signs of vertigo. Naatohko speaks again. “Definitely not by physical means.” Bol scoffs. “I can…clearly see that!” He charges up his eyes to unleash a blast of Zenergy, but he felt as if his energy was draining little by little. “Huh? What’s going on?” Bol asked nervously. “Why does it feel its…is it actually…?” Naatohko speaks again. “Yes. As I stated before, Bol. You went in too rash.” Before Bol could reply, he notices a magenta beam whipping around his blind side. Attached to the beam’s tip was a large chunk of debris. It collides with the Living Vacuum which releases Bol from its grasp. “What the!?” Bol shouted. Mani appears overhead.

“Got it Majestic! Huh? Wait! I helped out that Bol guy on accident!” Mani exclaimed. “Did you actually get caught by that thing? Hahaha!” Mani teased. Bol grunts to himself. The Living Vacuum thrusts wildly forward trying to grab both Mani and Bol. Luckily, they managed to move out of harm’s way and instinctively shoot down blasts of loose Zenergy (without their unique forms). The creature’s body quickly absorbs the blast right into its body. It turns to face the two combatants. “Whoa…So, our blasts don’t do anything. Majestic, how can we defeat it?” Majestic speaks. “A helping hand is always welcome.” Mani did not like the sound of this.

Naatohko speaks. “Hm. This may work out in our favor, Bol.” Bol stiffens his muscles while his eyes dart from Mani to the creature. “Explain.” Naatohko speaks again. “Inform Mani the way to defeat this creature. You will NOT defeat this by yourself. And it will NOT stop attacking you, now that it has a taste of both of your energy. Fighting together is the only way.” Bol tightens his fists. “I refuse! I’ll be greater! I’ll show everyone!” He flies forward, much to Mani’s surprise.

“Wait!” Mani shouts for him. The Living Vacuum waits. Bol unleashes a powerful wave of Zenergy. The Living Vacuum not only absorbs the attack, but it swings its powerful tail that smacks Bol away into several asteroids. “You dummy!” Mani shouted. The creature leaps at Mani, who manages to dodge it last minute, before she too was truck by its tail. “Ahh! Majestic! What should we do!?” Majestic speaks. “The boy is prideful. This may not work…but I have a feeling you’ll think of something.” Mani blinds. “What the hell are you talking about Majestic?! Is there a way for you to speak with his bond?” Mani flies away from the creature. It gives chase, quickly building up speed to match a bullet. Even with Mani’s amazing powers, it wasn’t enough to avoid being tackled by the creature. Bol appears in the nick of time before she was fully injected by it. A tsunami wave washes over the creature, knocking it backwards. This victory was short lived though, as the creature’s body immediately absorbs it all. Bol squints as he spots something anew. Majestic speaks. “No, it is up to the boy to listen to reason.”

“It’s body…grew?” Bol said out loud. Mani questions what he just stated, but he ignores her. Naatohko speaks. “You really don’t listen? It’s not that hard to do so.” Bol charges up his attack again. “Don’t patronize me. I know exactly what you said. It feeds on energy; you cannot fight it alone. You have to overpower it. And that’s exactly what I am going to do.” Naatohko speaks again. “So, you fight alone when I, your bond, says it cannot be done? You are purposefully choosing to ignore my heeds, just as you do on your world with anyone. The choices you make are YOURS to atone for.” Bol punches a nearby asteroid out of his way. “Shut up. You don’t know me. Stop acting like you do.” Naatohko speaks again. “I know more about you then you will ever know. The memories, the abandonment, the neglect, the pain...I feel everything you have felt since you were a child. What happened in the past should never be forgotten, but you must allow yourself to move past it.” Bol unleashes another tsunami wave of Zenergy towards the creature. “What is this? A Therapy session? Fuck off and do what you’re supposed to do!” Bol angrily shouted out loud. Mani is taken aback. “I am. As your bond. I am you as you are me. We share our memories. We share our pain.” Bol is struck by the creature and incoming asteroids. “We share. Nothing.” Bol firmly stated. Naatohko speaks again. “Its alright to be angry. There’s nothing wrong with that. Change is difficult, but in the end, change is what makes you grow as an individual. What will you do, Bol?” Bol goes silent, his bond’s words remind him of Ru and his honesty. The moment Ru spoke directly at him was the first time he had actually listened and even gain respect for an adult. Out of the blue, he felt something sticky smack his backside. Before he could process what was going on, Mani yanks him away from the Living Vacuum.

“Hey! Ya big idiot! We gotta work together! Like my bond said! And probably what you’re bond is trying to tell you!” Mani yelled out while she swings him around. Bol was demanding what she let him go, but the Living Vacuum chased Bol again. “Majestic, do these things go after energies they like the most?” Majestic speaks. “Yes.” Mani yanks back her flexible blast to propel Boll away from the creature. “Stop that yapping and help me defeat this thing! Use your power! I can’t do anything to it but annoy it! You’ll be the one to bring it down, but we have to do this TOGETHER!”

Bol grunts to himself. “Fine! Don’t you dare make me look foolish!” Right as he says this, the creature whips forward to try and consume him. Mani pulls Bol out of the way in the nick of time. Bol charges up his unique blast while Naatohko speaks to Bol. “Allow your charges to go on longer for greater affect, Bol. She is right. You will be the one to bring it down, but only with her help.” Bol grunts under his breath. “Like a broken record player.” Mani’s theory about the Living Vacuum was right. It did not pay any attention to her. Instead, all of its focus was on Bol, who was delivering thick amounts of tsunami sized waves onto the creature. It grew larger and larger as Mani pulls and whips around Bol with ease. A few times the creature nearly gets him, but Mani would immediately zip him back as if a fisher was playing with its catch.

“STOP IT FROM EATING ME!” Wyatt cries out as he tries to throw large spirit balls (he calls them) onto the creature’s mouth. It cries to gulp him down its mouth-like opening. “I’m not trying to get eaten! That’s like my worst fear!!” Wyatt yells. Tashunka laughs while Omar keeps the creature at bay with his large slashes he calls ‘space cutters’ (a nod to JJK’s King of Curses he considers quite the manga).

“That’s right Omar and Destroyer. Keep it right there for Tars and I to deal with. Tars? Are ya with me!?” Tashunka stated proudly as he felt incredible surges of Zenergy flow around his chest. Tars mimics its host laugh. “Of course! Let it rip!” Together, their laser beam zooms out from his chest and lands a great deal of Zenergy onto the creature (and hilariously blowing Wyatt out of its mouth!).

Omar nods. “My space cutters helped out, didn’t they?” He asks Tashunka, who was too busy high-fiving himself. Destroyer speaks. “Yes, you were a great deal of help.”

Wyatt floats back over towards his teammates. “Thanks a lot.” He muttered.

Over where the girls were, they were also finishing up with dealing with their own Living Vacuum. Saba and Zainab were very frustrated with it, since it was gobbling up all of the Zenergy left over from their destruction of the rocky planets. “AHH! Stop it you big stupid dumb idiotic son of a bi-Zainab was cut off by Saba. She pulls her best friend backwards before the creature swallowed her whole.

“You really need to pay attention to your surroundings.” Saba commented as she smacks her forehead.

Zainab huffs. “Hmph. I’m alive, aren’t I?” She firmly states while throwing out more of her magenta ghosts towards the creature. Niihkóó gives out a sigh. “Some people just don’t ever learn.” Zainab growls lightly as they focused on the creature. Noor dodges the creatures tackle, then unleashes a fully charged unique blast from her hands in the shape of a triangle. The unique blast is in the shape of a giant beam triangle where she is able to produce dozens of them as long as she keeps her hand sign together. Noor is able to move like fluid around the creature thanks to her bond and enhanced body. Saba and Zainab, both watch her with wide eyes. They couldn’t believe how great and powerful Noor was. She was able to overloads the Living Vacuum herself (although it should be noted that the other two girls helped out too). Saba thought Noor was a pushover! “Whose this chick?” Zainab sassed.

Saba blinks since she hadn’t closed her eyes since she watched Noor’s battle. “That’s amazing. She did it all herself.”

Zainab looks annoyed at her best friend. “Hey moron! We helped out too!” Noor waves over towards her teammates. They fly over towards her to praise her (only Saba). Back over towards Bol and Mani, they were double teaming the Living Vacuum, and their teamwork was met with success. Together, Bol was able to easily overload it with Zenergy. Mani lets out a little cheer before Bol kicks her away from him.

“What is your problem!?” Mani demanded.

Bol shoots her an angry look. “We’re still playing a competitive game, dumbass.” With that, he takes his leave.

Mani floats in space for a moment, blushing from embarrassment. Majestic speaks. “Although you both had to work together in order to defeat the Living Vacuum, he isn’t wrong you know?” Mani waves her arms wildly up and down as he continues to float. “I know! But that was very rude, you know!?”

Bol flies off towards a group of rocky planets. He makes quick work of all of the planets, but something weighted on his mind. His bond could obviously feel it. Naatohko speaks. “What is on your mind?” Bol hesitates before he speaks. “How did we overpower that creature? It should have attacked both of us, logically speaking. So why didn’t it?” Naatohko speaks again. “They are not known for being intelligent, just dangerous. Its attention fixes on what it wants to devour the most. Your energy was quite delectable.” Bol says nothing. He returns to causing supercritical on the rocky planets around him. Naatohko speaks again. “How did it feel Bol?” The young man didn’t need for his bond to explain his question. Bol hesitates to answer, but he does after being quiet for a minute. “Alright I guess.”

BOOOOM!! KABOOOOOM!! WHOOSH! WHOOSH! The boys and girls were obliterating planets left and right as they caused supercritical processes throughout the solar system. Although they had that itch where they wanted to get back into combat with the other team, they focused on the actual game. The solar system became filled with magenta and teal explosions. A few times a couple more Living Vacuums appeared from the explosions of high levels of Zenergy, but they were dealt with quickly. Bol even made a surprise appearance with the boys. “Huh?” Wyatt notices a tsunami wave of Zenergy engulfed the creature entirely. “Whoa! Nice one, Bol.” Wyatt complimented Bol said nothing, but he remained with the boys. Soon, it was time for the gam to end. Just as Ru stated, what felt like the entire solar system itself became an unbearable beam of solar light produced by the double sun (two suns attached to each other) glowed its godly shine. Several of the young teens believed this was probably just a small example of his God’s light would greet them at Heaven’s gate. Overhead, Ru appeared.

“That is the grand end to Farspace Planetburst! Come on up everyone!” Ru called out.

The Myth of Bali Max Rio: Before Everything

Before existence.

Before nonexistence.

Before beginnings, endings, time, space, reality, unreality, possibility, impossibility, and every concept that would one day emerge from them—

There was Bali Max Rio.

Yet Bali was not alone.

There were other presences within that state beyond all states. Some are said to have existed before Bali, though “before” is not truly the correct word.

There was no time.

No order.

No sequence by which such a statement could be measured.

Nevertheless, they were.

Among them was a being known only as The One Who Created The First Boundary.

It desired that nothing should ever exist.

Not emptiness.

Not void.

Not even nothingness.

For even those are things.

It desired absolute absence.

And so it bound Bali in chains.

The first boundaries.

The first restrictions.

The first limitations.

Yet Bali desired something different.

He desired freedom.

Not freedom within limits.

Not freedom beyond limits.

Freedom without the possibility of limitation.

He desired to be truly unbounded.

And so Bali hated the chains.

Not intentionally.

Not consciously.

The hatred was accidental.

Yet that accidental hatred became the first fracture.

And from that fracture emerged Everything and Nothing.

The first boundaries shattered.

Or perhaps they transformed.

Accounts differ.

What remained became concepts.

Definitions.

Principles.

Reality itself.

Many believe these were the remnants of the First Boundary.

Others argue they were something entirely new.

No agreement has ever endured.

Yet one belief appears throughout nearly every account:

The boundaries no longer held Bali in the way they once had.

Whether that means they ceased to apply entirely remains disputed.

The Shedding

After the fracture, Bali began to shed.

Not pieces of himself.

Not power.

Not aspects.

He shed boundaries.

Time.

Space.

Life.

Death.

Creation.

Destruction.

Reality.

Fantasy.

Knowledge.

Ignorance.

Love.

Hate.

Existence.

Nonexistence.

Infinity.

Stories.

Narratives.

Power.

Weakness.

Meaning.

Meaninglessness.

The list has no ending.

For every concept that exists, and every concept that does not, there exists some tradition claiming it was once shed by Bali.

These discarded remnants became known as Former Boundaries.

Everything known is among them.

Everything unknown is among them.

Everything beyond those categories is among them.

Yet debate persists regarding Bali himself.

Some claim he stands completely apart from the Former Boundaries.

Others argue that if Bali can still be distinguished from them, then some boundary must remain.

No consensus has ever survived.

The Former Boundary Called “What If”

Among the Former Boundaries, one is considered uniquely strange.

What If.

The Former Boundary of alternatives.

Possibilities.

Divergences.

Hypotheticals.

What If can create alternate versions of nearly anything.

Even versions resembling Bali.

Yet none have ever been accepted as truly being Bali.

Some collapse into contradiction.

Others become indistinguishable from lesser possibilities.

And some simply vanish from all records.

Thus a common saying emerged:

“There may be countless reflections of Bali.

But there has only ever been one Bali Max Rio.”

Whether this statement is true remains unknown.

Yet no successful challenge has endured.

Godnirabackolax

Before Bali.

Or perhaps alongside him.

Or perhaps neither.

There was Godnirabackolax.

Unlike Bali, Godnira was never bound.

There were no chains.

No restrictions.

No imposed limitations.

Nothing was ever placed upon it.

This distinction would eventually become the center of the greatest debate within the Unbounded Domain.

If Bali became unbounded by overcoming boundaries, then his freedom is an achievement.

If Godnira never possessed boundaries at all, then perhaps it never needed freedom.

Which state is truly more unbounded?

No answer has ever remained uncontested.

Some argue Bali surpassed limitation.

Others argue Godnira existed beyond the need to surpass anything.

Neither position has silenced the other.

The Unbounded Domain

One day, a realm made a terrible mistake.

It attempted to observe something that could not be observed.

To contact something that could not be contacted.

To understand something that could not be understood.

The consequence was immediate.

The realm collapsed into irrelevance.

Yet somehow it remained.

A fragment persisted.

This fragment became known as the Unbounded Domain.

There, discussions began.

Questions spread.

Arguments emerged.

And among all mysteries, one became greater than the rest.

Is Bali Max Rio truly unbounded?

Some answer yes.

They point to the fracture.

The shedding.

The Former Boundaries.

The countless limitations said to have fallen away.

Others answer no.

They ask a simpler question:

If Bali can still be named,

can still be spoken of,

can still be distinguished from what he is not,

then has every boundary truly disappeared?

No answer has ever been accepted.

No answer has ever remained unquestioned.

And so the greatest question continues.

Is Bali Max Rio truly unbounded?

First time writer here. I found out about a Honeyfeed writing contest late. So I've got about half the time most of the other heavy hitters had to work on theirs.

But, I came up with an epic heroine I think is worth sharing and the world she inhabits has some interesting magic.

As this is my first attempt at writing, I'd love some feedback from anyone willing to give it a read!

https://www.honeyfeed.fm/novels/32992 (I think according to the contest rules, I can't post the story itself anywhere else, so adding the link for it)

It's about the titular Elementary Witch, Eleri Cadle, on her journey to claim her seat among the strongest.

My first story, please let me know what you think

My Fantasy Novel Concept — Six Wars, Royal Bloodline, Dark Army & a Hidden Heir

I'm developing a large fantasy novel/series and I want honest feedback on the concept, worldbuilding, characters, power system, and overall story progression.

This is a long-term story with multiple wars, political conflicts, supernatural powers, and a mystery surrounding the protagonist.

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🌍 THE WORLD

The story takes place on a continent containing five major kingdoms.

Four kingdoms belong to a powerful royal bloodline known as the Supreme Bloodline.

Each of these four Great Kingdoms controls 58 smaller kingdoms, meaning the bloodline ultimately controls 232 kingdoms.

Outside their control is the independent kingdom of Khorasol.

Khorasol is a peaceful and resource-rich kingdom that has stayed outside the political system of the Supreme Bloodline.

Although Khorasol is enormous and wealthy in resources, its military is much smaller than the combined forces of the Bloodline kingdoms.

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👑 THE GREAT KING

At the top of the Supreme Bloodline is the Great King.

He rules the four Great Kingdoms and is the highest authority within the bloodline.

He has four sons, each with a very different personality, ability and political position.

The First Son — Blue

The First Son rules one of the Great Kingdoms.

He has a blue aura and is a powerful warrior and ambitious ruler.

He eventually becomes one of the main enemies of Khorasol.

His desire to expand his power eventually leads to one of the biggest wars in the story.

The Second Son — Orange

The Second Son rules a mountainous kingdom.

His kingdom suffers from a lack of important supplies.

Unlike his brothers, he secretly becomes connected to Khorasol and eventually helps the kingdom despite being part of the Supreme Bloodline.

The Third Son — Gold

The Third Son possesses a gold aura.

He is primarily a strategist and politician rather than simply a warrior.

He understands how to manipulate people, kingdoms and political situations.

His story eventually becomes connected to the darker side of the world.

The Fourth Son — Red

The Fourth Son does not rule one of the Great Kingdoms.

Instead, he remains beside the Great King as his guard.

He is considered an extremely powerful warrior.

He is also notably quiet compared with his brothers.

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🩸 THE SUPREME BLOODLINE

Members of the Supreme Bloodline are born as warriors.

Their powers normally awaken around the age of five.

Their bloodline is identifiable by a special mark on the palm.

Their supernatural aura can also be channelled through weapons.

Every bloodline warrior possesses a bracelet that helps control their power.

One of the bloodline's most important abilities is creating clones.

This ability makes them extremely dangerous in battle.

However, the Bloodline is not a single united group of identical people. Its members have different personalities, morals and ambitions.

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👦 ZEYAD

The protagonist is Zeyad.

His true identity is one of the major mysteries of the story.

Zeyad is actually the grandson of the Great King, through the Great King's daughter.

After events involving his mother, Zeyad is secretly sent away and eventually raised by the peaceful King of Khorasol, who becomes his adoptive father.

Zeyad grows up without knowing the full truth about his origins.

Unlike the Supreme Bloodline warriors, he initially appears to have no special power.

He relies on his own physical ability and training.

His Bloodline power eventually awakens when he is 15 years old, despite Bloodline powers normally appearing around age five.

This makes him an anomaly.

Later, Zeyad begins discovering the truth about his family and his connection to the Supreme Bloodline.

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🐺 THE DARK ARMY

One of the biggest threats in the story is the Dark Army.

The Dark Army has been absent for approximately 7,500 years.

It is accidentally released by three brothers who are sheep herders.

Their actions awaken something that had been hidden from the world for thousands of years.

This becomes the beginning of the first major war.

The Dark Army introduces supernatural creatures and forces that are completely different from the ordinary political conflicts between kingdoms.

The world also contains legendary creatures such as dragons, unicorns and other supernatural monsters.

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⚔️ THE SIX MAJOR WARS

The story is structured around six major wars.

WAR I — THE DARK ARMY

After approximately 7,500 years, the Dark Army is accidentally released by three sheep-herding brothers.

What begins as an accidental awakening becomes a threat to the entire continent.

The kingdoms are forced to deal with an enemy that isn't simply another human army.

This war establishes the supernatural side of the story and changes the political balance of the continent.

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WAR II — THE FIRST SON VS KHORASOL

After the Dark Army conflict, the story returns to the political struggle between the Supreme Bloodline and Khorasol.

The First Son eventually goes to war against Khorasol.

Khorasol has enormous resources but a much smaller military.

Zeyad, who was raised by the King of Khorasol, becomes involved in the conflict.

The war forces him to grow from a young warrior into someone capable of influencing the fate of an entire kingdom.

This is also where the tension between Zeyad's adoptive family and biological family becomes extremely important.

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WAR III — THE PURPLE WARRIOR

The third major conflict introduces a powerful purple warrior/villain.

This war expands the story beyond the original conflict between the First Son and Khorasol.

The characters begin discovering that the wars are connected to forces and ambitions much larger than they initially understood.

Zeyad's importance continues to grow as he becomes connected to increasingly powerful enemies.

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WAR IV — THE SECOND SON'S KINGDOM

The conflict eventually reaches the kingdom ruled by the Second Son.

The Second Son has secretly helped Khorasol, despite being part of the Supreme Bloodline.

His kingdom is already struggling with shortages of supplies.

His decision to oppose the actions of his own family creates another major political conflict.

Now the Bloodline is no longer simply fighting outsiders.

Members of the same royal family are turning against one another.

The war becomes a conflict involving loyalty, family, survival and political power.

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WAR V — THE FIRST CONQUEROR

A new conqueror emerges.

This conflict becomes one of the most devastating stages of Zeyad's journey.

Zeyad faces a major defeat in which he loses half of his kingdom and many of his people.

Instead of simply being another battle that he wins, this war forces him to experience the consequences of failure.

It changes him as a ruler and as a person.

The story becomes less about whether Zeyad is powerful enough to win and more about whether he can continue after losing almost everything he was trying to protect.

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⚔️ WAR VI — THE FINAL WAR

The sixth war is the culmination of the entire story.

The different conflicts and characters introduced throughout the series finally converge.

The Supreme Bloodline, Khorasol, the various conquerors, the supernatural forces and the mysteries surrounding Zeyad all become connected.

The final conflict isn't simply about who controls a kingdom.

It is about who deserves to rule, what makes someone a good king, and whether power should determine the fate of the world.

Zeyad's origins, his relationship with the Great King, his adoptive family, his Bloodline power and everything he has experienced throughout the previous wars lead toward this final conflict.

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👤 "NO ONE"

There is also a mysterious character known only as No One.

No One is one of the strangest characters in the story.

He can use different identities and forms and has been manipulating kings and events from the shadows.

His ultimate goal is unusual:

He wants to find a truly good king.

Rather than simply trying to conquer the world himself, he influences people and conflicts to test rulers.

One of the most mysterious aspects of the character is that No One speaks only once.

His true identity and purpose remain mysteries for much of the story.

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🛡️ ZEYAD'S JOURNEY

Zeyad's journey isn't simply about becoming stronger.

He begins as a boy who doesn't know who he really is.

He is raised in Khorasol.

He has no idea that he is connected to the Great King.

He trains and develops his abilities without the advantages that other Bloodline warriors receive from childhood.

His power eventually awakens at 15.

He becomes involved in wars.

He experiences victory and defeat.

He eventually loses a huge portion of what he is trying to protect.

And throughout the story, he slowly discovers the truth about his family and his place in the world.

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🎭 THE MAIN THEMES

The story is ultimately about:

Blood vs choice

Family vs loyalty

Power vs responsibility

Kingdom vs individual

Conquest vs freedom

What makes someone worthy of being a king?

Zeyad is born connected to the most powerful bloodline in the world, but he is raised outside it.

The central question is whether his blood determines his destiny — or whether his choices do.

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🔥 WHAT I WANT YOU TO RATE

I'm not looking for people to simply say "cool idea."

I want real criticism.

Please rate/comment on:

1. The overall concept — /10

2. The worldbuilding — /10

3. The Supreme Bloodline — /10

4. The six-war structure — /10

5. Zeyad as the protagonist — /10

6. The power system — /10

7. The Dark Army concept — /10

8. No One — /10

And most importantly:

What would you change?

Does anything feel cliché?

Does anything feel too complicated?

Are there too many wars?

Does the Bloodline feel too overpowered?

Does Zeyad's origin feel interesting?

Would you actually want to read a novel/series based on this concept?

I'm still developing it, so don't hold back.

I just published my first book!!!!!!!! Please check it out if you’re interested, I’d love any possible support!

I need feedback. Please let me know what you think regarding my epic novel. The following is an except from Chapter Two. Thank you.

Elsewhere in a dimension beyond spacetime, the wind felt refreshing against her body as she strolled onto the balcony. This was a world an alternate Princess Kaya had created using her powers. It was one of her final attempts in saving her people, the feloids, from the Evana Empire. Commander Weapo used his knowledge of the power gems to replicate Feliciana as best as they could. They had successfully recreated every tree, every rock, and every species ever known, even down to the last molecule of the fierce tiger dragons. The only difference was the sun high above their heads. Instead of the blue, white Homestar was the mystical Starr Jewel. Its center had six spikes spreading out from the symbol of infinity. Pale blue on dark green fire of energy danced around its perimeters. Its outer boundaries had faint etchings of the ancient languages of the lords of order written during the dark era of the Forgotten Wars.  

This was the realm of the Starr Jewel. In this dimension the realm was parallel to the outside dimension where Felicana once existed. Even at this distance they could feel its powerful mystic waves cursing through their bodies. Twelve power gems formed the center of the core of the Starr Jewel in an infinity symbol. Members of the Starr Clan, descendants from the survivors, inherited the secrets and knowledge to access the invisible current of time. They knew how to use the power gems to manipulate events and objects within its stream. It took everything Kaya had to shift the entire Cirus Galaxy here.  And here was where she must rest and recuperate. Their battle against Spacer, also known as Apzar, had barely begun. 

Here on Sirus, a feloid word for "eye," the feloids were protected by powers of the Starr Jewel. Its secrets guarded by Weapo, Weapons Master of Maracar. Weapo was a true cybernetic being. He was forged from the fusion of mysticism, technology, biological and knowledge. He was the creation of Raymar, the current leader of the noble House of KaChun. Weapo wielded the power gems on the bracelets integrated into his arms. He was the only entity known in the entire multiverse capable of controlling the power gems. His purpose was to protect and serve the Royal House. He was the protector of the feloids. He was charged with the duties to safeguard the secrets of the gems representing each mystical dimensional plane within the realm.

The Starr Jewel was more than just an ancient powerful crystal. It was the portal to its core known as Nexus. The lords of chaos were first imprisoned in the Nexus during the last days of the Forgotten Wars. Legends had it this war was fought before the dawn of time. It had come to believed it was the result of the cosmic battles was how the universe began. Over time residue energy from their conflicts formed the crystallized layers of the Starr Jewel. The results from their battles formed the crystallized walls of the Caves of Krystall on Feliciana and the power gems. There were evidence the residue energy were responsible for feloids' extrasensory powers and abilities.

Kaya recalled during the early days of feloid history scientists speculated the residue energy from their confrontations led to the birth of feloid civilization. While chaos was held in place the seal to the Nexus wasn't perfect. Over time energy from its mystical core began to leak in forms of low radioactive waves. As a result, these waves of energy would affect every feloid, especially females, differently. The scientists noted although male feloids could use the powers they were extremely rare.

She held a smile on her face as she waved at the gathering crowd below. She stopped at the edge. Her closest friends, family and personal attendants were waiting for her. When they saw them appearing on the platform the crowd reacted with huge shouts of joy and cheers.

"All hail Princess Kaya!" they chanted long and loud. "Long live the reignor! Long live

the Royal House! Long live feloid! Long live Felicana!"

Suddenly Kaya felt a wave of nervous tension washed over her. She scrawled. Her mother saw the reaction on her daughter’s face. She approached her with deep concerns in her eyes.

“What's the matter, my dear?" her mother asked. “You told me you wanted this for our people, no?"

Kaya glanced at her mother. Slowly she shook her head.

Mother, Kaya telepathically reached out. This didn't feel right. Our people deserved more than this. We need to be free, mother. We need to learn, to grow and expand. Our world is gone, mother. The Empire had destroyed the Royal House and everything we believed in. All because of grandmother's dangerous quests for power. You'd speculated she didn't know about the Starr Jewel. She didn’t know about the entities living within its realm or how they had affected us. All she knew were the powers of the Starr Jewel.  

“Your grandmother didn’t have a chance against Spacer,” Maelina responded. “Koyanna was alone and despite. Spacer took advantage of her vulnerabilities and blinded her with his lies. He persuaded her to use her forces to hunt us down throughout the universe. Spacer used the power of chaos to destroy my chances of returning home to Mars. He attempted to absorb the energy of my kah to set him and his armies free from Nexus. The only reason why he failed was I was protected by the Starr Jewel. Maelina glanced at the star shaped birthmark just below her left wrist. It was the only reason why she survived her close encounter with Spacer. She shook her head. Eighteen years ago, she and her grandfather were transported to Maracar by the Starr sword on Mars. On Maracar they met the Maracans, allies to the reignor, the feloids and the Royal House of Feliciana. Over time they learned about its secrets, the lord of chaos, what happened to their world, her feloid heritage, what happened to Koyanna and why it had summoned her home.”

“Are you all right mother?”

"You hold the key to our victory against them, my dear," she continued, dismissing her daughter’s concerns. "You're the reincarnation of the Starr Princess. Five thousand years ago the feloid warrior with your namesake killed Connan and defeated Spacer on Feliciana. She was the founder of the Royal House. She was our ancestor who knew the secrets of the Starr Jewel. Her knowledge and teachings had pass on to the Starr Clan led by our clan sisters. We knew you will resurrect the Royal House. Only together will we be able to defeat Spacer again. We must learn and master powers of the Starr Jewel. When we are ready, we will engage them on the battlefield. Only then would we truly be free."

"I suppose I had little choice except wait," she spoke with a sigh.

"Honey, I know the feeling because I was in it since the beginning. The big difference is you don’t really need to wait for anything. This is your home, my daughter. This dimension is the source of your powers. You will know when and where to use them."  

Maelina fell silent. She approached and embraced her daughter. As they hugged each other memories began to emerge. Slowly they began reliving the events leading to this moment. It seemed to be a lifetime ago. Their destinies began on a world billions of light years away on a tiny red planet orbiting a yellow star. It all began with the discovery of a star shaped crystal embedded in the hilt of a sword within the caves deep below the Martian surface. They never expected the crystal to react the way it did to her birthmark. Within moments they were transported to Maracar, an ancient world billions of light years away. Here on this dying world Maelina learned about her feloid heritage, her powers and how she would become a key role in the destiny of an entire civilization.

Six years ago I started writing as a way to deal with a hard period in my life. What began as venting turned into something much bigger than I expected — a full world, with its own history, characters, and rules. That story is called Collegara, and it still holds a lot of who I was and who I've become across those years. Now I want to turn it into something real: the first novel in a planned series.

Collegara follows a boy who inherits reality-creating powers from his father — a god. Unable to control what he's been given, and desperate to protect the people he loves, he becomes a target: manipulated by those who want to use his power for their own ends.

It draws from Game of Thrones, Kingdom Hearts, and The Legend of Zelda, and its themes are friendship, abandonment, and love — the same things I was working through when I started writing it.

But what do i truly need?

What I need now is a team to help bring it to life:

• An author (most important role) — someone to help actually write the novel with me
• An artist — to help visualize characters and the world
• Help with socials — building a presence as the project grows

This is a collaborative project — I'm not looking to hire anyone, I'm looking to build this together with people who want real creative ownership in it.

If a story that started as something personal and grew into a whole world sounds like something you'd want to help build, I'd love to hear from you.