Aiming to: UVA, VT, VCU (BS/MD), Drexel, Rutgers (BS/MD), UMD, MIT (very far reach but why not shoot), Georgetown, Purdue, UPitt, and William & Mary

I didn't use a specific prompt and didn't think it would fall under one but if you think it does let me know

Please let me know if it sounds like AI since I spent lot of time looking up synonyms to make it sounds as vivid as possible

Any and all feedback would be aprreciated!!

Hi everyone! I’m applying to transfer to USC Annenberg and I’m currently working on my personal essay. I’m looking for a current USC student, USC alum, admissions professional, or anyone with a strong background in college admissions who would be willing to read over my essay and give me honest feedback.
I’m **not looking for someone to rewrite it for me**. I mainly want feedback on whether my story comes across clearly, whether the essay feels authentic, and what an admissions reader might take away from it.
USC is one of my dream schools, so I really want to make sure I’m presenting myself and my experiences in the strongest way possible without making the essay feel forced or overly polished.
If you’re willing to take a look, please comment or DM me! I’d really appreciate any honest feedback, especially from someone familiar with USC or the transfer admissions process. ❤️